Human Demon
When an unspeakable evil is done.10 total reviews
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Loads of atmosphere and a real Gothic tinge to your words - ending in a very stark manner which creates a back-story all in one go. Very accomplished writing.
If it helps - I also checked and it is 100 words on the nose.
I wish you well with this.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Hello Anon
Loads of atmosphere and a real Gothic tinge to your words - ending in a very stark manner which creates a back-story all in one go. Very accomplished writing.
If it helps - I also checked and it is 100 words on the nose.
I wish you well with this.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Thanks much for the read and the encouraging review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Human Demon, falls within the limited format and makes the term 'getting fingered' take on a spine-tingling meaning. Such an accusation in those times might well lead to a hanging.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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This one-hundred-word story, Human Demon, falls within the limited format and makes the term 'getting fingered' take on a spine-tingling meaning. Such an accusation in those times might well lead to a hanging.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Thanks much for the read and the encouraging review.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Very good flash fiction story. I enjoyed this piece and thought the ending was well done. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Very good flash fiction story. I enjoyed this piece and thought the ending was well done. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your read and the comments.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, this begs the question of whether the father is telling the truth or if the Incubus took a familiar form. it works the latter way. If the former, it begs the question why he'd report it...lol
Good job on the story in such limited wordage. very tricky undertaking.
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Hi there,
Well, this begs the question of whether the father is telling the truth or if the Incubus took a familiar form. it works the latter way. If the former, it begs the question why he'd report it...lol
Good job on the story in such limited wordage. very tricky undertaking.
GMG
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from ciliverde
Unfortunately, your story is all too realistic - it is the father who has committed the unspeakably evil act - it is he who was the demon, he who preyed upon the poor child. Good use of the few words allowed you in this challenge.
Carol
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Unfortunately, your story is all too realistic - it is the father who has committed the unspeakably evil act - it is he who was the demon, he who preyed upon the poor child. Good use of the few words allowed you in this challenge.
Carol
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read and the review.
Comment from heavenempress
Hi, Waal you excelled beyond expectation with in a few words. I got the gist of the story. I liked most when you ended in a style that leaves the reader wondering how. I liked that at least it gives room to connect with the rest of the story. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Hi, Waal you excelled beyond expectation with in a few words. I got the gist of the story. I liked most when you ended in a style that leaves the reader wondering how. I liked that at least it gives room to connect with the rest of the story. Keep it up.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the read and the comments. Appreciated.
Comment from Dean Kuch
So, Daddy dearest isn't just the concerned father he oughta be, he's also the monster responsible for his daughter's brief disappearance by doing unspeakable things to her.
Hey, it could conceivably happen.
In fact things like this happen far too often in our "civilized society" today.
Good writing, a very plausible tale.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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So, Daddy dearest isn't just the concerned father he oughta be, he's also the monster responsible for his daughter's brief disappearance by doing unspeakable things to her.
Hey, it could conceivably happen.
In fact things like this happen far too often in our "civilized society" today.
Good writing, a very plausible tale.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your read and the review. Much appreciated.
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You're very welcome.
Best wishes!
~Dean 8)
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent short short and entry for the contest.
The situation is described very well
with a good distracter having the father call for help.
The ending is current and the art work matches well
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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This is an excellent short short and entry for the contest.
The situation is described very well
with a good distracter having the father call for help.
The ending is current and the art work matches well
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the read and your encouraging comments.
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Thanks much for your read and review.
Comment from RodG
This is a creepy thriller based on medieval stories of demons that could ravage maidens. I like how we initially hear the story from the father's point of view as he speaks to the priest. The ending IS surprising and very believable. A stunning achievement in only 100 words. Polish your phrasing in paragraph one (there's also a run-on). And your last sentence is clumsy and might work better as two.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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This is a creepy thriller based on medieval stories of demons that could ravage maidens. I like how we initially hear the story from the father's point of view as he speaks to the priest. The ending IS surprising and very believable. A stunning achievement in only 100 words. Polish your phrasing in paragraph one (there's also a run-on). And your last sentence is clumsy and might work better as two.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the tips. I will edit
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Thanks for the suggestions. I will edit.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Superb ending! Actually, chilling...and not easy to accomplish in only 100 words! A complete story that captures the reader from beginning to end. I applaud your creativity.
Best wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Hello!
Superb ending! Actually, chilling...and not easy to accomplish in only 100 words! A complete story that captures the reader from beginning to end. I applaud your creativity.
Best wishes,
diane
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the read and your encouraging comments.
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Thanks for the read and the commnets.
