The Suspect is Lying!
A good detective knows the 'tells'...16 total reviews
Comment from Revelina Malinnag
"Thank you so very much for sharing and, if you like, we can work on grammatical corrections next time - just love stories about other cultures! :) ;) Comment Written 26-Aug-2018 by Y. M. Roger"
This was a part of your comment in my story.
Now I would like to teach you REAL grammar:
Syllable -is a SINGLE WORD / just ONE word >that contains either one or more broken sounds example : UN-RES-PEC-TA-BLE in only one word that has 5 syllables !
So, don't think you are smart to come and tell me that you can teach me grammar or English, Roger. You are only good >to offend people, but not good in grammar or even as a PROFESSIONAL WRITER. Because if you think are, you should not be so active here in Fanstory; coz you must be SO BUSY in some other places. I'm sorry to say, that you need to improve your grammar as well!
You made a poem that was asking you to make 1-7-1 that means that on the:
1) first line must have one syllable,
2) 2nd line must be JUST one word with 7 syllable
3) 3rd line must have one syllable
but your poem is is very wrong! On your second line, you wrote 6 words that has 7
syllables, and i don't think, that's what the challenger was asking for. I"m sorry to say that, but I just want you to HOLD your bad behavior and bad etiquette when you comment on other people;>
You like to OFFEND people. Actually, you UPSET me with you comment! I COPIED and PASTED it here below to read it again.
(It is obvious that you are writing from a place of having not mastered the language yet....
You might want to go into the text and take out all the unnecessary "returns" within paragraphs...there is one at the end of a given number of characters so, it is probably just a remnant of your word processor as it transferred the file to this site's editor. Easy fix to completely transform the visual appearance of your work. :) ;) :)
Thank you so very much for sharing and, if you like, we can work on grammatical corrections next time - just love stories about other cultures! :) ;) Comment Written 26-Aug-2018 by Y. M. Roger)
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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"Thank you so very much for sharing and, if you like, we can work on grammatical corrections next time - just love stories about other cultures! :) ;) Comment Written 26-Aug-2018 by Y. M. Roger"
This was a part of your comment in my story.
Now I would like to teach you REAL grammar:
Syllable -is a SINGLE WORD / just ONE word >that contains either one or more broken sounds example : UN-RES-PEC-TA-BLE in only one word that has 5 syllables !
So, don't think you are smart to come and tell me that you can teach me grammar or English, Roger. You are only good >to offend people, but not good in grammar or even as a PROFESSIONAL WRITER. Because if you think are, you should not be so active here in Fanstory; coz you must be SO BUSY in some other places. I'm sorry to say, that you need to improve your grammar as well!
You made a poem that was asking you to make 1-7-1 that means that on the:
1) first line must have one syllable,
2) 2nd line must be JUST one word with 7 syllable
3) 3rd line must have one syllable
but your poem is is very wrong! On your second line, you wrote 6 words that has 7
syllables, and i don't think, that's what the challenger was asking for. I"m sorry to say that, but I just want you to HOLD your bad behavior and bad etiquette when you comment on other people;>
You like to OFFEND people. Actually, you UPSET me with you comment! I COPIED and PASTED it here below to read it again.
(It is obvious that you are writing from a place of having not mastered the language yet....
You might want to go into the text and take out all the unnecessary "returns" within paragraphs...there is one at the end of a given number of characters so, it is probably just a remnant of your word processor as it transferred the file to this site's editor. Easy fix to completely transform the visual appearance of your work. :) ;) :)
Thank you so very much for sharing and, if you like, we can work on grammatical corrections next time - just love stories about other cultures! :) ;) Comment Written 26-Aug-2018 by Y. M. Roger)
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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There was never any offense meant whatsoever, and I am extremely sorry that you took it as such. And your interpretation of the 1-7-1 instructions is incorrect - please take some time to look at the winning entries from that contest. I do sincerely hope that writing this review and issuing that single star has helped you in some way. Have a good evening.
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Well, if those winning entries before are like your poem and have won ? I suppose that the judgments of all the reviewers are wrong. Coz that is not the meaning of the challenge Poem with 1-7-syllable.
I tell you, all the winners here in fan story is being based on the writings that collects a complete numbers of reviewers that is set. >So that means that if one professional writer comes here and posted a very perfect article or poem but this NEW writer have NOBODY in here yet, then he wont have any even 2 reviewers! So that NEW writer has NO chance to win the contest at all! He would NEVER win NO MATTER how perfect is the new writer's work is!
Can't you realize that? This site is for pupils who loves to LEARN from their "classmates" and enjoys their works being reviewed by the same level of them!
I signed up here very recently within this month only coz I thought it's something else as I've expected, but I'm so disappointed!
I'm leaving from here so soon. I'm just utilizing the rest of my days that I've paid for, that's it. In fact, on my very 1st poem, I've received 6 reviewers with an EXCELLENT RATINGS; ON MY 2nd one got 6 stars EXCEPTIONAL!
And before I leave you, I copied and paste IN HERE BELOW the PROFESSIONAL REVIEWS and result of my works for PROFESSIONAL judges IN DIFFERENT magazine publishers/ companies but I deleted their names for privacy purposes:
1) Dear Reveline,
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In fact, our judges felt it was among the highest caliber of lyrics that were submitted. They typically leave notes on the lyric sheets for the best lyrics and we thought you'd like to know what they had to say.
If you're interested in seeing your free judges review please reply to this email and I will email the free review to you.
Congratulations! This is a great opportunity for you to gain insight into why the judges liked your lyric.
I look forward to hearing from you and always feel free to enter our monthly contest. -Rachel
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I've changed my rating for you just because you apologized to me. That's it.
As a poem, it should be fine, but s a poem contest to respond the challenge 1-7-1 in 3 lines,I believe, it doesn't apply to it. Good luck though.
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Comment from Therese103
This is a good one for the 1-7-1 contest! Cleverly constructed and an appropriate picture too...well done! Thank you for sharing, and best wishes!
Blessings, Therese
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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This is a good one for the 1-7-1 contest! Cleverly constructed and an appropriate picture too...well done! Thank you for sharing, and best wishes!
Blessings, Therese
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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This was just a little break from the school week, Therese - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately (in those wee hours of the morning when us older women can't seem to sleep well anyway) - LOL!!) and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
A tell-tale sign to any determined detective that the suspect he's interviewing is nervous and wants to get the hell outta there or wishes he or she were anywhere but in the hot seat.
Good 1-7-1, nicely presented.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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A tell-tale sign to any determined detective that the suspect he's interviewing is nervous and wants to get the hell outta there or wishes he or she were anywhere but in the hot seat.
Good 1-7-1, nicely presented.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Dean, and I needed a challenge that had nothing to do with high school students and their homework!! :) :) LOL! - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
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I get it, Yvette. We all need a diversion from time to time.
Good luck to you!
~Dean
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A good topic to tackle for this writing prompt/contest. I like your chosen title for this writing piece. This is a nicely formatted 1-7-1 poem. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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A good topic to tackle for this writing prompt/contest. I like your chosen title for this writing piece. This is a nicely formatted 1-7-1 poem. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Cindy - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately (in those wee hours of the morning when us older women can't seem to sleep well anyway - LOL!!) and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
Comment from LynnetteOK
This is a very interesting take on one of the most restrictive poem formats I've seen. I think it's great that you tied the single word to both ends of the 7 syllable line.
Well done.
Best of luck in the contest,
LynnetteOK
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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This is a very interesting take on one of the most restrictive poem formats I've seen. I think it's great that you tied the single word to both ends of the 7 syllable line.
Well done.
Best of luck in the contest,
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Lynnette - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately (in those wee hours of the morning when us older women can't seem to sleep well anyway - LOL!!) and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Very well done with this piece - it is difficult to write in this format and to create meaning too so it is a clever idea to work with a key word which has more than one meaning
I wish you well in your contest: it is a tough one but you have my "x"
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Hello Anon
Very well done with this piece - it is difficult to write in this format and to create meaning too so it is a clever idea to work with a key word which has more than one meaning
I wish you well in your contest: it is a tough one but you have my "x"
cheers
phill
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Phil, and I needed a challenge that had nothing to do with high school students and their homework!! :) :) LOL! - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This is a clever use of two meanings of the word "watch." I appreciate this, because it is hard to be clever with so few words to work with. Your syllable count is correct. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you for sharing. This is a clever use of two meanings of the word "watch." I appreciate this, because it is hard to be clever with so few words to work with. Your syllable count is correct. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, KyColonel - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Great entry for this contest. The subtitle helps to add depth to this since you are looking for a "tell" and it's the theme. Even though it is short, you grab the reade's Interest and hold it. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Great entry for this contest. The subtitle helps to add depth to this since you are looking for a "tell" and it's the theme. Even though it is short, you grab the reade's Interest and hold it. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Sugarray - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Author now I really love this clever play on words where in the beginning the word watch means to look and then at the end the word watch is a timepiece. Very very clever
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Author now I really love this clever play on words where in the beginning the word watch means to look and then at the end the word watch is a timepiece. Very very clever
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Mary - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately (in those wee hours of the morning when us older women can't seem to sleep well anyway - LOL!!) and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
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THANK YOU I enjoyed the read. You have a blessed and wonderful healthy as possible weekend and God bless you. I sleep pretty well, thank God.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very well written one - seven - one with clever words and artwork. Excellent use of color, font, and arrangement for a pleasing visual presentation. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Very well written one - seven - one with clever words and artwork. Excellent use of color, font, and arrangement for a pleasing visual presentation. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Just a little break from the school week, Kathleen - been reading a few of my PI novels on the side lately and this was on my mind...go with what's there, I suppose! :) :) Thanx again for the read and review and have a wonderful weekend of easy reading and gentle breezes! :) :)
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You're welcome and thanks, you too!
