God's Dream
a 40 word poem7 total reviews
Comment from nor84
You might want to check the contest rules. As I understand it, the required words were God, on, dream, whispers, man, clamours, but this poem used clamour and whispered.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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You might want to check the contest rules. As I understand it, the required words were God, on, dream, whispers, man, clamours, but this poem used clamour and whispered.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you, I will rewrite.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about God's creation, as per His own dreams, on six days of creation, He whispered the land creatures into existence and He found his dream completed creating man out of the dust and He declared with a clamour that it was done very good; nice, but two words (whispers and clamours) have been used in changed formats and there is deviation and contest requirement is not fulfilled, I think; though otherwise, well done; DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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This speaks about God's creation, as per His own dreams, on six days of creation, He whispered the land creatures into existence and He found his dream completed creating man out of the dust and He declared with a clamour that it was done very good; nice, but two words (whispers and clamours) have been used in changed formats and there is deviation and contest requirement is not fulfilled, I think; though otherwise, well done; DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you, I've been advised of my error and am correcting it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How unique! :) :) A very well phrased forty words with a wonderful visual that results - I'm still imagining all the possibilities of this 'clamor' [be sure to correct your spelling...] that could have taken place with His declaration!! :) :) Absolutely love it!! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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How unique! :) :) A very well phrased forty words with a wonderful visual that results - I'm still imagining all the possibilities of this 'clamor' [be sure to correct your spelling...] that could have taken place with His declaration!! :) :) Absolutely love it!! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) :)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Was going with the spelling as written in the contest rules.
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Ha!! You are so right! :) :) The British spelling is also clamour ... my apologies. :) :)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
That's true. A woman in our church asked, "If it was very good why did He create a woman?"
Because he said, "I can do better."
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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That's true. A woman in our church asked, "If it was very good why did He create a woman?"
Because he said, "I can do better."
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for the excellent rating and the comment about woman.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
This made me gasp out loud which must mean you did your job very well! I am really taken with the artwork and I mean by that your words as well as the painting.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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This made me gasp out loud which must mean you did your job very well! I am really taken with the artwork and I mean by that your words as well as the painting.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you Shauna Bloom for the excellent rating. Credit for the artwork goes to Cleo08, of whom has provided such for a number of my pieces. I am deeply humbled by your kind comments.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is 'A God Whispers Man Appears' Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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This is 'A God Whispers Man Appears' Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for the excellent rating and comments. They are very much appreciated. May you have a blessed weekend.
Comment from patcelaw
fm this is a good poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May your weekend be filled with wonder and blessings. Patrici
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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fm this is a good poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May your weekend be filled with wonder and blessings. Patrici
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you patcelaw for the excellent rating and kind comments, May you have a blessed weekend.
