Of Hearts and Heartaches
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "When You Left"Poems about falling in or out of love.
12 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
That is what happens when love walks out the door leaving only the remembrance and fragrance of a loving flower. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 writing contest. Good luck on the contest and your love life. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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That is what happens when love walks out the door leaving only the remembrance and fragrance of a loving flower. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 writing contest. Good luck on the contest and your love life. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2018
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Thank you poetwatch for the excellent rating and kind words. I am deeply humbled.
Comment from donette1914
wow there is so much truth to this, a hole in a heart when someone leaves.
it was an honor to read your talented work
thank you for sharing
this is well penned
I hope for the best in the contest
I like the artwork
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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wow there is so much truth to this, a hole in a heart when someone leaves.
it was an honor to read your talented work
thank you for sharing
this is well penned
I hope for the best in the contest
I like the artwork
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you again for another excellent rating and kind words. Once more I am truly humbled.
Comment from Merajul
Very good poem . I liked the word selection and the message it is giving . Very elegant.
5-7-5 conditions met , makes it a strong entry to the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Very good poem . I liked the word selection and the message it is giving . Very elegant.
5-7-5 conditions met , makes it a strong entry to the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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I am most grateful for the excellent rating and your very kind comments.
Comment from LynnetteOK
A well written expression of love and loss. Is it better to have loved and lost or to have never loved at all? I think the answer to that depends on how long it's been since the loss.
Best of luck in the contest,
LynnetteOK
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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A well written expression of love and loss. Is it better to have loved and lost or to have never loved at all? I think the answer to that depends on how long it's been since the loss.
Best of luck in the contest,
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you LynnetteOK for the excellent rating and I much appreciate the kind comments.
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a sad poem. She left, but he still calls her "my love." How touching. And he is clearly heartbroken in a way that will not mend.
Why does life have to be that way?
You did an excellent job with your 17 syllables.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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What a sad poem. She left, but he still calls her "my love." How touching. And he is clearly heartbroken in a way that will not mend.
Why does life have to be that way?
You did an excellent job with your 17 syllables.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much Debbie Pope for the excellent rating and your kind review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a nice pairing of words +m picture, Mystery Author. Good job on the syllable count as required in your 575 poem about heartache. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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This is a nice pairing of words +m picture, Mystery Author. Good job on the syllable count as required in your 575 poem about heartache. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and kind comments. I appreciate them a great deal.
Comment from Dean Kuch
So, this could conceivably be classified as senryu, which is basically just human haiku without the references to nature or a kigo, or seasonal word.
Isn't that about right, Anonymous Poet?
Haiku avoids punctuation like commas, but some can be used as kireji, or cutting words.
Capitalization isn't used either, save for proper nouns, like the name of a person, place or thing.
Good luck with your entry.
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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So, this could conceivably be classified as senryu, which is basically just human haiku without the references to nature or a kigo, or seasonal word.
Isn't that about right, Anonymous Poet?
Haiku avoids punctuation like commas, but some can be used as kireji, or cutting words.
Capitalization isn't used either, save for proper nouns, like the name of a person, place or thing.
Good luck with your entry.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and kind words. Yes, I do suppose it could be considered senryu, though I have seen punctuation used in haiku in Writer's Digest magazine.
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Along with a kigo and satori as well, no doubt.
You're welcome.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. Technically not a haiku, but I have forgotten the term for such a poem focused on the human condition...starts with an "s". This does have the correct syllables for the contest you have entered, and the picture is a lovely choice. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you for sharing. Technically not a haiku, but I have forgotten the term for such a poem focused on the human condition...starts with an "s". This does have the correct syllables for the contest you have entered, and the picture is a lovely choice. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the excellent rating and kind words. I believe the word you're looking for is senryu.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one
continuous thought.
-You show the effect of
this person having left you.
- The alliteration emphasizes
the impact of this situation.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one
continuous thought.
-You show the effect of
this person having left you.
- The alliteration emphasizes
the impact of this situation.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for the excellent rating and the kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sally Law
This is a beautiful poem, simple and sweet. Well done. I hope love heals your heart once again. The flower was breathtaking! Did you photograph it?
Kindest regards,
Sally
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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This is a beautiful poem, simple and sweet. Well done. I hope love heals your heart once again. The flower was breathtaking! Did you photograph it?
Kindest regards,
Sally
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the excellent rating and the kind comments. I wish I had photographed but I actually borrowed it from fanart review. It was under heart in my particular search.
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You are welcome!
