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Comment from humpwhistle
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Hmmm, that must be how a tennis ball feels--whacked over the net, back and forth. I can't say I feel particularly bad for this guy.
On the other hand, lot's of nice places to live in Mexico--cheap.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

Comment from tfawcus
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It doesn't pay to be on the wrong side of the fence!

Just a couple of minor points.

ICE is probably a familiar acronym for Immigration and Customs Enforcement in the US, but I had to look it up. I wondered if it needed periods - I.C.E."

Does Tardis need the capital letter? [You had me thinking of Dr Who.]

Yeah, sure buddy. back [Back] the way ya came...

There's a nice balance between realism and humour in this. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018