Party on the River
Yeah, even he's gotta pay to play...13 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is so well done. I love your rhyme scheme. You did so much more than was asked of you in the prompt. This is truly exceptional. It's very ballad-like with its rhythm and repetition. And, I like how you incorporate mythology into the mix. This is a polished, well-crafted poem. No pun intended.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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This is so well done. I love your rhyme scheme. You did so much more than was asked of you in the prompt. This is truly exceptional. It's very ballad-like with its rhythm and repetition. And, I like how you incorporate mythology into the mix. This is a polished, well-crafted poem. No pun intended.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Debbie :) :) -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend there in Birmingham to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Anon, best of luck in the 'use these words' writing prompt. Perhaps you will laugh, then again, maybe you won't, lol He might have the last laugh, even though you sound very confident in the poem. I do hope there is music playing though. I love music.
I liked your poem, it has a good premise with Charon and the Styx idea. One everyone is familiar with so it should have broad appeal. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Hello Anon, best of luck in the 'use these words' writing prompt. Perhaps you will laugh, then again, maybe you won't, lol He might have the last laugh, even though you sound very confident in the poem. I do hope there is music playing though. I love music.
I liked your poem, it has a good premise with Charon and the Styx idea. One everyone is familiar with so it should have broad appeal. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Ana -- yeah, and you'll note the author note about the laughter being maniacal....! :) :) LOL! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
Comment from mally mack
Hello
Yours is the best of these i have read and reviewed tonight. You really went above and beyond. The rhyme flow was perfect and I love the subject being the river styx!
Your artwork and color Choice are absolutely perfect.
I wish you the best of luck in this contest
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Hello
Yours is the best of these i have read and reviewed tonight. You really went above and beyond. The rhyme flow was perfect and I love the subject being the river styx!
Your artwork and color Choice are absolutely perfect.
I wish you the best of luck in this contest
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Mally -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
