Party on the River
Yeah, even he's gotta pay to play...13 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest entry. My personal psychic advisor, Homer the Chimp, tells me that this is the winning entry. So I'm betting $2,00 pesos on it to win.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is an excellent contest entry. My personal psychic advisor, Homer the Chimp, tells me that this is the winning entry. So I'm betting $2,00 pesos on it to win.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Thomas. This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the week ahead to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Keep dancing and laughing while the party's fun. I can hear
your music loud and clear from down yonder. I'm sure you
had a hoot of fun writing this poem for the challenge. Well
done and great imagination. I'll bring the peach pie. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Keep dancing and laughing while the party's fun. I can hear
your music loud and clear from down yonder. I'm sure you
had a hoot of fun writing this poem for the challenge. Well
done and great imagination. I'll bring the peach pie. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Nancy -- you've made my weekend! And, OH MY GOODNESS, YES!! Swarthy men in pirate boots with mugs in hands singing to that wonderful tavern music was EXACTLY where this was going -- thank you!!! :) :) ;) This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the week ahead to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! Yvette :)
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What an awesome response to this writing prompt! I love the rhyming pattern--it makes it really flow throughout. You've used all the words required for the contest. Good luck to you. This is a very strong contender! :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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What an awesome response to this writing prompt! I love the rhyming pattern--it makes it really flow throughout. You've used all the words required for the contest. Good luck to you. This is a very strong contender! :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Cindy -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the week ahead to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Adri7enne
Wonderful. I enjoyed your references to the River Styx and Charon's gaze. Loved your rhymes and the unfailing rhythm. Enjoyed the repetition at the end as well. I'll vote for this one. Good luck in the contest. Hope you win. I read them all. This is by far the best.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wonderful. I enjoyed your references to the River Styx and Charon's gaze. Loved your rhymes and the unfailing rhythm. Enjoyed the repetition at the end as well. I'll vote for this one. Good luck in the contest. Hope you win. I read them all. This is by far the best.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Adri7enne -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
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Now I'm so curious about who this is. Someone who knows me, obviously. Someone who knows I garden. Can't wait to find out! Your poem was terrific- you're a poet!
Comment from meeshu
a great rhyme scheme, here. and the third line in each could be separated and formed into a monorhyme poem itself. well crafted piece..
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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a great rhyme scheme, here. and the third line in each could be separated and formed into a monorhyme poem itself. well crafted piece..
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your positive review, meeshu -- always a blessing! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one was a old pub drinking song!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process -- make sure you do it before you pour your mug and put on the melodies, though!!! :) :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem and excellent use of the prescribed words to write a poem that is joyful and uplifting. Working and having a great time while the music is playing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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A very well-written rhyming poem and excellent use of the prescribed words to write a poem that is joyful and uplifting. Working and having a great time while the music is playing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Sandra -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin'"! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You fulfilled the brief and included all the words and I wish you luck with the contest, your poem is a bit like a sea shanty, a song about a sinking boat, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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You fulfilled the brief and included all the words and I wish you luck with the contest, your poem is a bit like a sea shanty, a song about a sinking boat, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Dolly -- you've made my weekend! And, OH MY GOODNESS, YES!! Draughts in hands with swarthy men in pirate boots was pretty much what came to mind when I read those four words -- thank you!!! :) :) ;) This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Wonderful and creative, Mystery Writer!
Good ole' River Styx!
Well, I do hope your journey is great fun; my reading of your well-crafted verse certainly was!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wonderful and creative, Mystery Writer!
Good ole' River Styx!
Well, I do hope your journey is great fun; my reading of your well-crafted verse certainly was!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Diane -- you've made my weekend! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
Comment from rspoet
This poem is very well written, well rhymed
with excellent imagery, too.
Best to laugh while the music plays
for there might not be much laughter when it stops.
Even ferrymen have their moment
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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This poem is very well written, well rhymed
with excellent imagery, too.
Best to laugh while the music plays
for there might not be much laughter when it stops.
Even ferrymen have their moment
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, RS -- yeah, and you'll note the author note about the laughter being maniacal....! :) :) LOL! This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like your first two verses. The descriptions give the reader a glance inside the mind of the speaker. They can then wonder will he will take us...ah down the Styx. There are some good allusions here too, which may send some readers scurrying to look up the meaning of the titles. Another clever double use of the word Hell. This is fun. I can almost hear this chanted with swinging draughts in hand. Well written.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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I like your first two verses. The descriptions give the reader a glance inside the mind of the speaker. They can then wonder will he will take us...ah down the Styx. There are some good allusions here too, which may send some readers scurrying to look up the meaning of the titles. Another clever double use of the word Hell. This is fun. I can almost hear this chanted with swinging draughts in hand. Well written.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review, Liz -- you've made my weekend! And, OH MY GOODNESS, YES!! Draughts in hands with swarthy men in pirate boots was EXACTLY where this was going -- thank you!!! :) :) ;) This was only my second one of the "use these specific words" contests to try -- for me, it literally comes down to the question: DO these words IMMEDIATELY manifest into an idea in my head....a rhythm, an image, a melody (like this one!), something...?? And if the answer is 'no' within the first few moments, then I don't even wrack my brains over it...too much else clogging up the ol' thinker as it is!! These should be a fun distraction not another 'thing that needs doin''! :) :) Hope this finds you taking the rest of the weekend to discover some unknown fairy hideouts in your yard (or house elves in the basement!) and enjoying the symphony of birdsong in the process!!! :) :)
