God and Man
a poem about God and His creation3 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks God the Creator loves man, is unhappy since the fall of His Plan, but this is not clear to me, once God has been addressed a second person and again a third person singular number (who so loves man) and again second person (Thee) (and again, in this phrase - since the fall of Your plan), besides, the phrase - 'unhappy is this world' is not clear to me, who is the speaker? it is ambiguous; sorry, expression is inexpressive, confusing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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This speaks God the Creator loves man, is unhappy since the fall of His Plan, but this is not clear to me, once God has been addressed a second person and again a third person singular number (who so loves man) and again second person (Thee) (and again, in this phrase - since the fall of Your plan), besides, the phrase - 'unhappy is this world' is not clear to me, who is the speaker? it is ambiguous; sorry, expression is inexpressive, confusing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your rating. It was written as a type of prayer therefore the speaker is the one reciting the prayer.
Comment from Scarlett Elise
I love that you said, "God my creator" because it makes the poem feel more personal. Also, I could not tell that you were required to use any of those words, because the poem flowed so well and did not feel forced. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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I love that you said, "God my creator" because it makes the poem feel more personal. Also, I could not tell that you were required to use any of those words, because the poem flowed so well and did not feel forced. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thanks again for the rating and comments. You are very kind.
Comment from kiwijenny
Thee who so loves man. We need this in the forefront of our thoughts as our visor our windshield to help us weather every storm. Sheesh sorry for the weather review. But I agree 100% with your poem
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thee who so loves man. We need this in the forefront of our thoughts as our visor our windshield to help us weather every storm. Sheesh sorry for the weather review. But I agree 100% with your poem
God bless
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and kind comments and the weather review was fine.
