Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Do you know that lobsters can live seventy five to one hundred years? They live longer than we do if we let them? My daughter brought us a live lobster once. I wanted to take it to the ocean and let it go. Not sure it would have survived since it was an Atlantic lobster and we are near the Pacific. Your meter and rhyming are spot on. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Pam. I think ocean is ocean to a lobster.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Claw meat's the best...at least it is in their cousins, the crawfish, down here!! :) ;) A fun little write that has officially made me hungry! :) :)

Thank you for the smiles today! :) :) Yvette :)

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Yvette

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Clever and whimsical. A fine "PRANKA" - thanks for making me chuckle with that new term. Ha ha ha! Excellent form, though the pivot line works smoothly only in one direction. Many don't know this, but in tanka, ideally, the pivot line should toggle between the first and second halves of the poem more fluidly, as your grammar and semicolon choices fail to link it but here is an idea:

for their sacrifice,

accounting for seafood sales,


Excellent medley ofL and S sounds. A cohesive and comedic write. Well done, and a fine presentation.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, RD. I purposely name these pranka to escape restrictive rules of the form. Happy day.

reply by rama devi on 16-Aug-2018

hee hee! Clever you!

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting and well written Tanka poem about the lobsters and their tails. Many people love seafood. I love it too, but don't remember having lobster. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Teri

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Yep! Lobster tales are a favourite and he poor lobster bites the dust! At least you are giving thanks to them here is your clever little poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Yummy for the tummy. Gives a whole new meaning to getting a little tail, does it not? While there is nothing wrong with the other iteration, I won't complain if getting a little tail relates to getting some lobster tail. Perhaps presenting the young lady with some scrumptious Lobster Tail might just lead to your getting some of the other kind as well.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Better than ending up being clawed. Or is it?

reply by nomi338 on 16-Aug-2018

Hell yeah!

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very creative and i feel so sorry for these guys but they taste so good

thank you for sharing this is a well-penned work you had made
i like the artwork and how creative you are
it was a pleasure
donette1914 Aug 15 2018

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018

Thanks, Donette

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I certainly do.

You've invented another poetry form - the Pranka, a prank and a tanka. Very good.

Now, I'm off to Red Lobster. Dinner's on you. lol

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018

Thanks, da. Remember the garlic butter.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Not that fond of lobsters myself. I do love the lobster-stuffed mushrooms at the Red Lobster, with all that mozzarella. Excellent way of bringing in your rhyme. I understand you have to have a great deal of expertise to eat a lobster tail. It's also expensive. (At least here in Indiana. A fun pranka. judi

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018

Thanks, Judi

reply by judiverse on 15-Aug-2018

You're welcome. judi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Another fun lobster poem with great meter and rhyme. I almost wished for the Spanish word for lobster "langosta" just for the alliteration with languishing but that would be too many syllables.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018

Thanks, lyenochka.