Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Who could not laugh out loud at the wording in this clever poem, illustrated perfectly with "lobster girl." Love at first crush-tation. I hope you made out well in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018

Thanks, Marilyn.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Ouch! I cannot imagine romance with a lobster that would be without pain. Love between species is unthinkable as it is, but romance between a human and a crab would be most painful.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018

Note the picture and reassess your values.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, you have some great clever double meaning words here to bring life to your poem and you made me smile Bill, and that's always a good sign, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Bill. This is cute. "spawn a prawn" and "crushtation" are incredibly brilliant. I really like this one. I am out of six stars. I really would have given this one a six if I had one. I know to post my best stuff earlier in the week. Wink. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018

Thanks, Pam

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You're so funny, Bill. But the gal in the picture is pretty gorgeous. I would think she'd definitely inspire "crushtations" and maybe those future spawned prawns would look pretty good, too.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018

Thanks, lyenochka

Comment from Sararb

Exceptional

I love this limerick Bill! You did a great job with Lobster love one of the crustaceans from the sea. I love the picture and the childhood crush-tations. I had a few of those too! Hugs & Smiles, Sara

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018

Thanks, Sara

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Love your like-a-limerick love poem, Bill. The internal rhyme is a stroke of genius as is the entire poem. Spawing a prawn is a real giggle.

Best wishes to you in the contest with this most unique love poem.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks, Gloria

Comment from Shanbreen

Excellent

This rather a "cute" humorous love poem. It flows well except for:

to our current lust relationship,

This line seems awkward -- forced -- and stops the flow of an otherwise wonderfully written poem.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks, Snanbreen.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

A breath of fresh air in this often rather saccharine contest! Love crush-tation! And the lust relationship that follows. Perhaps you'll be able to use that well known Aussie expression when the little ones step out of line: "Don't come the raw prawn with me!"

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks, Tony, for the upbeat review. Bill

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a fun poem for the contest, Bill. Your picture is a good pairing with your words, too. Your lines flow well & it does read like a limerick. I like the play on the word 'crustacean' with crush-tation. The internal rhyme of line 5 is good, too. Best wishes. Jan

[author notes--line 5 has the internal rhyme.]

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks, Jan. I was referring to the word ?relationship? in the fourth line, which several reviewers have noted would be better, in their opinion, as ?relation?.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 10-Aug-2018

But what does relationship rhyme with in that line?

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

I misspoke. You win. :)