Creation Day 6
5/7/5 God's Paint Set4 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This piece you have written for the God's paint set poetry contest is so poignant. I feel you deserve some recognition for your thoughts. I love the "black and white" thoughts and understood your deepest meanings... Love it!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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This piece you have written for the God's paint set poetry contest is so poignant. I feel you deserve some recognition for your thoughts. I love the "black and white" thoughts and understood your deepest meanings... Love it!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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And thanks again for that wonderful accolade and 6 bright stars zanya
Comment from Skywatcher707
What an interesting concept. Not sure it really is the case, as there are so many shades of skin, but, I like the imagination it took to come up with the idea. It does limit God's ability to come up with more colours though which I highly doubt. The poem has correct syllable count in each line. Punctuation of comma is right where the voice should pause but visually I find that the word "so" placed on that line, in order to keep the syllable count correct, seems to dangle a bit. When reading it of course, it flows into the last line where if there was no syllable restriction that is where it should be. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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What an interesting concept. Not sure it really is the case, as there are so many shades of skin, but, I like the imagination it took to come up with the idea. It does limit God's ability to come up with more colours though which I highly doubt. The poem has correct syllable count in each line. Punctuation of comma is right where the voice should pause but visually I find that the word "so" placed on that line, in order to keep the syllable count correct, seems to dangle a bit. When reading it of course, it flows into the last line where if there was no syllable restriction that is where it should be. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Comments and the detail of same very much appreciated -thanks for all that zanya
Comment from AprilViolet
What a clever poem! I love the imagery in your writing as well. I can just imagine God running out of paint. Excellent entry into the contest! Best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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What a clever poem! I love the imagery in your writing as well. I can just imagine God running out of paint. Excellent entry into the contest! Best of luck to you!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha but actually black is more brown...a beautiful mix of blue red and brown
And white is more pinko grey beige...alas I am an art teacher...black and white aren't technically colors...monochromes...black is the absence of color...'
God bless
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Ha ha ha but actually black is more brown...a beautiful mix of blue red and brown
And white is more pinko grey beige...alas I am an art teacher...black and white aren't technically colors...monochromes...black is the absence of color...'
God bless
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Enjoyed reading this review zanya
