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Comment from Y. M. Roger
To quote a quite famous space ranger of recent import (he hails from Pixar and Andy's Room): "you are a sad strange little man [or woman] and you have my pity" -- lol!!! :) ;) ;) This was certainly a strange little piece but was well written and it definitely held my intrigue EVEN when I could see where it was going...so, good job! :) :)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!! :) :)
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To quote a quite famous space ranger of recent import (he hails from Pixar and Andy's Room): "you are a sad strange little man [or woman] and you have my pity" -- lol!!! :) ;) ;) This was certainly a strange little piece but was well written and it definitely held my intrigue EVEN when I could see where it was going...so, good job! :) :)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!! :) :)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
But she was mean to me and I read in a book she was all bones inside like spaghetti and stuff ... so I put her in the scalding water and ... from the land of sky blue waters ... Hammmmmmssssssssss!... she's too big for a pot of spaghetti, so you can have her.' Wow1 This was very unusual and unexpected! But fabulous all the same. I loved reading this even though it was sinister and childlike at the same time which was obviously the point, it worked very well but raised some questions for me that can't really be answered in 200 words..and maybe that's the mystery! Well done kindest regards Meia xx
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But she was mean to me and I read in a book she was all bones inside like spaghetti and stuff ... so I put her in the scalding water and ... from the land of sky blue waters ... Hammmmmmssssssssss!... she's too big for a pot of spaghetti, so you can have her.' Wow1 This was very unusual and unexpected! But fabulous all the same. I loved reading this even though it was sinister and childlike at the same time which was obviously the point, it worked very well but raised some questions for me that can't really be answered in 200 words..and maybe that's the mystery! Well done kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, well presented, interesting to use spaghetti as a story, it is witty, image to match, it has a humorous spin that makes it hard to take it serious,
even though it is a serious kind of story, cleverly combined, creatively done,
this structure can be duplicated into different story lines/topics, including adding other fruit and veg, (this one should have an appropriate warning sign though).
Good Luck!
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Good read, educational, well presented, interesting to use spaghetti as a story, it is witty, image to match, it has a humorous spin that makes it hard to take it serious,
even though it is a serious kind of story, cleverly combined, creatively done,
this structure can be duplicated into different story lines/topics, including adding other fruit and veg, (this one should have an appropriate warning sign though).
Good Luck!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A horror story for sure. I wonder who she tried to put into the boiling water. She was too big, so it was not an animal/pet but likely a person, but who was mean to her? Mother? Sister? Creepy story! :)
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A horror story for sure. I wonder who she tried to put into the boiling water. She was too big, so it was not an animal/pet but likely a person, but who was mean to her? Mother? Sister? Creepy story! :)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
