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Comment from Gloria ....
Whoa, this is an interesting competition, AllCreator. A sentence of 60 words to inspire people to do good works. It's not easy to write a single sentence with exactly sixty words, but by gum you've done it.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Whoa, this is an interesting competition, AllCreator. A sentence of 60 words to inspire people to do good works. It's not easy to write a single sentence with exactly sixty words, but by gum you've done it.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this wishful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Inspiring and nothing is missed by the eye of God, the suffering and the love. Appreciating the gifts we have been given and celebrating our life, wise words, love Dolly x
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Inspiring and nothing is missed by the eye of God, the suffering and the love. Appreciating the gifts we have been given and celebrating our life, wise words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this good review I appreciate.
Comment from Shanbreen
Well said Alcreator. In one 60 word sentence you said a whole lot on the behavior of mankind. These are wise words. Best for the contest and thanks for sharing.
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Well said Alcreator. In one 60 word sentence you said a whole lot on the behavior of mankind. These are wise words. Best for the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review I appreciate.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, thanks for sharing this with us, but to be honest I'm not all that sure what you actually said. It's difficult only in sixty words I know. A good try. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
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Hi there, thanks for sharing this with us, but to be honest I'm not all that sure what you actually said. It's difficult only in sixty words I know. A good try. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from judiverse
You have an excellent artwork choice, and you make some good points in your short post. However, you need to aim for more clarity. Use your articles like "a" "and" and "the" so your sentences will read more smoothly. I suggest omitting "seems" in front of talking. This would be more readable if you break up this one long sentence. You might also eliminate unnecessary words. Do you really need both "set and show" examples? Also, try to avoid repeating "man" so often. I hope you will take these suggestions as well intended, and the editing I've suggested isn't that difficult. judi
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You have an excellent artwork choice, and you make some good points in your short post. However, you need to aim for more clarity. Use your articles like "a" "and" and "the" so your sentences will read more smoothly. I suggest omitting "seems" in front of talking. This would be more readable if you break up this one long sentence. You might also eliminate unnecessary words. Do you really need both "set and show" examples? Also, try to avoid repeating "man" so often. I hope you will take these suggestions as well intended, and the editing I've suggested isn't that difficult. judi
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Thanks.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! Now that is certainly a mouthful! :) :) But oh so wonderfully stated! :) I was wondering how some would answer that intriguing contest, and you have a done a really good job! :) :)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
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Wow! Now that is certainly a mouthful! :) :) But oh so wonderfully stated! :) I was wondering how some would answer that intriguing contest, and you have a done a really good job! :) :)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this good review I appreciate.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry. Your words flow smoothly with a great message. Good job with the prompt. We could all learn from this. Best wishes. Jan
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This is a great contest entry. Your words flow smoothly with a great message. Good job with the prompt. We could all learn from this. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review I appreciate.
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Alcreator, Excellent use of words in writing prompt. A good use of a picture depicting all kinds of people all around the world living life better. Good suggestions and ways of making life better. Dove
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Dear Alcreator, Excellent use of words in writing prompt. A good use of a picture depicting all kinds of people all around the world living life better. Good suggestions and ways of making life better. Dove
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this good review.
