Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well Shirley I haven't to the best of my recollection ever read an Octelle poem before and I must say it is a delightful form. I like the idea of using personification and symbolism in a telling manner. You have accomplished that ins spades with this delightful poem about a storm. They really are something aren't they?

Your poetry is always top-notch and this is no exception.

My pleasure to read and review.

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thank you Gloria,
I am thankful for your kind review and continued support.
Blessings
Shirley

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This octelle, Across the Sky, follows all the rules spelled out here and follows the coming storm revelation that alerts us to what the mountain can no longer hold back.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018

Thanks Bill.
I appreciate the review and continued support.
Blessings
Shirley

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

I have not tried this style of poetry, but you seem to have it down so well. You used very good words on a very real subjects - storm. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work. Great job my friend. love, Teri

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018

Hi Teri,
Thank you so much.
I appreciate your time and review.
Blessings
Shirley

Comment from Elizabeth Brown

Excellent

This poem certainly brings to life the power of a storm with some good imagery - I love the toss and turn of the leaves and branches. A clever Octelle poem (something I've never tried) which I'm sure concentrates the mind! The picture is lovely too. Best wishes, Elizabeth.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018

Thank you Elizabeth,
I appreciate your review.
I find storms quite frightening but also very interesting.
Blessings
Shirley

Comment from Hayley Zemontas

Excellent

A lovely poem that flows beautifully with the rhyme scheme used. I've never come across an octelle poem before- I love that I'm learning so much more about poetry and the various forms from this website. I think there is something stunning about lightening, despite how angry it sounds paired with the thunder, and the personification used to describe it in your poem really brings it to life. I love the picture you used as well, I too have a collection of pictures taken of the sky, mostly sunsets but I saw some gorgeous purple lightening when in Croatia. I'm glad that you are inspired by nature too. Great work. Hayley x

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018

Thanks Hayley,
I appreciate your time and review.
Yes, nature acts as an inspiring muse for me always.
Blessings
Shirley

reply by Hayley Zemontas on 31-Jul-2018

You?re most welcome Shirley x