Little Jim has a new Blue Racer
50 Words. Oh, the wonders you find in little boys pockets.12 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Congratulations, Melissa. On being in the winner's circle for the dribble fiction contest You are a wonderful talent and I look forward to reading more of your work, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Congratulations, Melissa. On being in the winner's circle for the dribble fiction contest You are a wonderful talent and I look forward to reading more of your work, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Thank so much, Bob. I appreciate you and how you take the time to give me encouragement and r views. Have a great day! Melissa
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And I appreciate your reviews of my chapters always. :) bob
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Always glad to help a fan. :) Bob
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Ah, such a sweet story of a little boy and his wishes to make his mother smile. I love the artwork you chose to compliment the piece. Thank you for a nice morning smile,
~patty~
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
Ah, such a sweet story of a little boy and his wishes to make his mother smile. I love the artwork you chose to compliment the piece. Thank you for a nice morning smile,
~patty~
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I?m so glad you like it. With the restriction of 50 words, it was complicated and I wasn?t sure if anyone would like it. There is so much ,ore that would flesh this out. Thanks, Patty, for your review.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sugarray77, aww... the little boy in the picture is adorable - so cute! I am sure with that smile the little boy got away with his surprise trick. A well written and enjoyable 50 words story for the Dribble Flash fiction contest. Good luck! ~DD
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Sugarray77, aww... the little boy in the picture is adorable - so cute! I am sure with that smile the little boy got away with his surprise trick. A well written and enjoyable 50 words story for the Dribble Flash fiction contest. Good luck! ~DD
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thanks again, DD.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh, I would not be at all happy with Little Jim. Although when I was a kid, I lived on the desert and our pets where horned toads and lizard. I am still amazed that I held and played with these things. =} Very fun, cute story. I hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Oh, I would not be at all happy with Little Jim. Although when I was a kid, I lived on the desert and our pets where horned toads and lizard. I am still amazed that I held and played with these things. =} Very fun, cute story. I hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Artasylum
Thanks so much for your very fun write. Great good luck in the Dribble Flash Fiction Contest. You played my heartstrings with this sweet and very charming story. thanks so much. yours, diana
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for your very fun write. Great good luck in the Dribble Flash Fiction Contest. You played my heartstrings with this sweet and very charming story. thanks so much. yours, diana
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much Diana!!
Comment from kiwijenny
A blue racer ..beautiful lizard...that electric blue.
He he he ...this is exactly what my son did to me only it was a frog that leaped down my blouse...way to make it a flash fiction...we come out of our blouses in a flash for sure
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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A blue racer ..beautiful lizard...that electric blue.
He he he ...this is exactly what my son did to me only it was a frog that leaped down my blouse...way to make it a flash fiction...we come out of our blouses in a flash for sure
God bless
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Hahah... Jen. I?m so glad you saw the humor in the story. Thanks for the review.
Comment from judiverse
What a charming picture! He looks like he belongs to "Our Gang." A great story, but you might want to wait until end to reveal the snake. Save it for this line and add racer. Momma squealed as a flash of blue racer ran up her arm. You did a great job with Momma's reaction. You might have more description of Little Jim to replace the sentence "A tiny blue racer...." Clever idea. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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What a charming picture! He looks like he belongs to "Our Gang." A great story, but you might want to wait until end to reveal the snake. Save it for this line and add racer. Momma squealed as a flash of blue racer ran up her arm. You did a great job with Momma's reaction. You might have more description of Little Jim to replace the sentence "A tiny blue racer...." Clever idea. judi
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks Judi. Much appreciated. I especially like the suggestions. Melissa
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You're very welcome. Hope that helped. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, how sweet is this. So little Jim was mischievous and had a wee gecko in his pocket, so he could scare his mum. What a lovely little story in fifty words. Not easy to do, but so well done. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Hi Melissa, how sweet is this. So little Jim was mischievous and had a wee gecko in his pocket, so he could scare his mum. What a lovely little story in fifty words. Not easy to do, but so well done. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks Ulla!! I love this Little Jim character that moves in and out of my writing. I have so many ideas for this little man. Today, he just had to have a lizard. Your good review and comments are much appreciated. Melissa
Comment from jenintorre
This is a great little flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it but I would have hated being in Momma's shoes, I would have screamed the place down.
Nice one. Best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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This is a great little flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it but I would have hated being in Momma's shoes, I would have screamed the place down.
Nice one. Best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thank you Jen. Me too. I raised two boys with full pockets and received a few surprises myself. Much appreciated.
Comment from fm wright
Such an innocent and fascinating story. It was well written in that the words and sentences never interfered with the telling. Too bad it was aimed at flash fiction, I would have liked to have read on.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Such an innocent and fascinating story. It was well written in that the words and sentences never interfered with the telling. Too bad it was aimed at flash fiction, I would have liked to have read on.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much fm for the great review. I begun to create stories around the character of a small boy named Little Jim. This is the second one and he lends himself to so many adventures that he continues to inspire me. Thanks for your comments. I do have one other Little Jim story on FS, if you are interested.
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Yes, I am interested in your other story of Little Jim.
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Thanks so much fm for the great review. I begun to create stories around the character of a small boy named Little Jim. This is the second one and he lends himself to so many adventures that he continues to inspire me. Thanks for your comments. I do have one other Little Jim story on FS, if you are interested.