The Sands Of Time
The humanity of man. 2-4-6 poetry10 total reviews
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
So few words make such a big and iconic statement and that is to me saying time waits on no one we have to adhere to the moment at an and maximize on that moment girl saying as it goes through your fingers and that's the saying that goes through The Hourglass is still moving never stop and neither does time
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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So few words make such a big and iconic statement and that is to me saying time waits on no one we have to adhere to the moment at an and maximize on that moment girl saying as it goes through your fingers and that's the saying that goes through The Hourglass is still moving never stop and neither does time
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you Mary.
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My pleasure
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Time itself seems to flow measured through our hands. Where does it go? We really can't measure it as easily as we'd like to. This is a good metaphor. Interesting how sometimes it flows too fast & others just too darn slow. The reader will be invited to contemplate their concept of time and how it is measured. Good work.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Time itself seems to flow measured through our hands. Where does it go? We really can't measure it as easily as we'd like to. This is a good metaphor. Interesting how sometimes it flows too fast & others just too darn slow. The reader will be invited to contemplate their concept of time and how it is measured. Good work.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the good review.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Insightful! Our time on earth is counted but the "counting" is not done by man, but by our Creator. Lovely art work that fits perfectly into the thought expressed.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Insightful! Our time on earth is counted but the "counting" is not done by man, but by our Creator. Lovely art work that fits perfectly into the thought expressed.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He may slow the flow temporarily and your poem is testament to the understanding that time will eventually run out for all of us, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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He may slow the flow temporarily and your poem is testament to the understanding that time will eventually run out for all of us, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-6, The Sands of Time, has the right set up and let's us ponder that we only have so much time to accomplish, love, explore, and believe.
I feel that the the word 'flows' should be flow, as the subject, sands, is plural. If the s at the end of sands went away, then the current verb would be okay. Happy day.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This 2-4-6, The Sands of Time, has the right set up and let's us ponder that we only have so much time to accomplish, love, explore, and believe.
I feel that the the word 'flows' should be flow, as the subject, sands, is plural. If the s at the end of sands went away, then the current verb would be okay. Happy day.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you Bill.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh I do like this one, very well done. It even rhymes and most don't. I most prefer those that rhyme. There just easier to read. Kidding aside, this is well done and I do hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Oh I do like this one, very well done. It even rhymes and most don't. I most prefer those that rhyme. There just easier to read. Kidding aside, this is well done and I do hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 2-4-6 poem and entry for the contest
With the addition of three solid rhymes
Those sands of time flow constant through one's hands
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This is an excellent 2-4-6 poem and entry for the contest
With the addition of three solid rhymes
Those sands of time flow constant through one's hands
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful adaptation for the contest requirements -- your words are wonderful and the rhyme is not forced so, great job there. I would suggest removing the commas and even the period -- your line spacing does the work of the commas and such a short format does not need a period....in fact, it's better with your words to not have it as its removal allows the reader's mind to continue the thought you've begun (a thought your image helps enhance)....just a thought, though -- use or not at your descretion.
Thank you for sharing today and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Such a wonderful adaptation for the contest requirements -- your words are wonderful and the rhyme is not forced so, great job there. I would suggest removing the commas and even the period -- your line spacing does the work of the commas and such a short format does not need a period....in fact, it's better with your words to not have it as its removal allows the reader's mind to continue the thought you've begun (a thought your image helps enhance)....just a thought, though -- use or not at your descretion.
Thank you for sharing today and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for the great suggestions, comments and review. I?ll look at it again.
Comment from Marie Foster1
I applaud those who can write good Haiku's. I think it is more difficult than general poetry; you have much less with which to make an impact. I also like the choice of picture to represent the poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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I applaud those who can write good Haiku's. I think it is more difficult than general poetry; you have much less with which to make an impact. I also like the choice of picture to represent the poem.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Denise J Tidwell
A great 2-4-6 Poem short but sweet I admit I can't do these You have great talent I love your topic most of all Please keep it up Glad that I could read this today!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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A great 2-4-6 Poem short but sweet I admit I can't do these You have great talent I love your topic most of all Please keep it up Glad that I could read this today!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you Denise. I really appreciate your thoughts and encouragement.
