Comment from The Death

Excellent

Congratulations on winning! Your poem is quite touching. Excellent word economy. Great choice to have a single sentence running across three lines. The picture adds up to the atmosphere as well.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Thanx for your review and congratulatory wishes, sir! :) :) Here's wishing you a wonderful week ahead! :) :)

reply by The Death on 24-Jul-2018

Wishing you the same, Sir. :)

reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

It's Yvette, actually -- my dad would be the sir in the family....:) ;) :) Cheers!

reply by The Death on 24-Jul-2018

Sorry, I assumed you're Roger. :)
Anupam this side.

reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018

Please, not a biggee -- not like we're sitting across the table from each other...my response was tongue in cheek about my dad, hope you realize that! :) :) Roger is my last name...it's French (southern Louisiana style) and is pronounced the same as the famous thesaurus! :) :)

reply by The Death on 24-Jul-2018

Haha! Yes, I got that. Have a nice day ahead, Yvette! :)

Comment from Tootie

Excellent

Very effective poem. Said well (although sad) in this 3-5-3 writing prompt entry. Your line at the top shares more. I'm so very sorry. Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you so very much for your taking the time to read my work and for your positive review, Cathy -- and, especially for those wonderful stars! :) :) Much appreciated! And fear not! The poem was not of me, but was a work born of knowing others....I only put words on paper for them. :) :) Here's wishing you a smile-filled week ahead loaded with sunshine and shady spots! :) :)

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

This can speak volumes to readers who have similar relationships with one who has passed. There is so much to this story. This would make a good prose backstory as to what led to this painful moment. Maybe not so painful that he died but that he lived. Well written.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you so very much for your taking the time to read my work and for your positive review, Liz -- and, especially for those wonderful stars! :) :) Much appreciated! And you are correct there is a lot more there -- not personal, mind you, but this was a work born of knowing others....I only put words on paper for them. :) :) Here's wishing you a smile-filled week ahead loaded with sunshine and shady spots! :) :)

Comment from LynnetteOK

Exceptional

Only ten words, yet they manage to tell a long and heartbreaking story. I'm so sorry for your obvious pain. Your one small tear brings one to my eye as well.
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you so very much for your taking the time to read my work and for your positive review, Lynette -- and, especially for those wonderful stars! :) :) Much appreciated! And fear not, it was a work born of knowing others, mine is not so deep....I only put words on paper for them. :) :) Here's wishing you a smile-filled week ahead loaded with sunshine and shady spots! :) :)

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

Ooooo... I really like this 3-5-3 poem you've penned, mystery writer. Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest. ~Kerry

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you so very much for your taking the time to read my work and for your positive review, Kerry! :) :) Much appreciated! Here's wishing you a wonderful week ahead full of sunshine and shady spots! :) :)

Comment from RFL

Excellent

Subjectively, I thought this poem sad, but lovely. You were able to create meaningful words using the 5-3-5 criterion. In addition, the image you chose worked well to enhance your words. Good luck in the contest. Best, RFL

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you so very much for your review, RFL -- I do so appreciate your taking the time to read my work! :) :) Have a wonderful remainder to the weekend! :):)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

People grieve in a variety of different ways.
Some cry while others find they cannot.
Some pray while others get drunk.
There are some who do all of the above--and then some!
The grieving process is very personal and no one should try to tell anyone else who to grieve.
Well penned 3-5-3.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review, Dean, and for your words of reflection -- I do so appreciate your taking the time to read my work and share the words it found in you! :) :) What a great start to the rest of the day -- thanx, sir!! :) :) May you enjoy the bit we have left to the weekend! :)

reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Jul-2018

You are welcome.
You have a pleasant Sunday as well.
~Dean

Comment from JDRBAR

Exceptional

These few words could comprise an entire autobiography regarding my father and me. There wasn't a tear left in me when he died. He'd wrung them all from me.
Extremely good and emotional.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review, ma'am -- and I am so very sorry that the sentiment for which it was written applied so tragically to you. But I am glad that you are now able to take that pain you've overcome and put it into so many wonderful works I read of yours on the site, here, you are truly survivor!! :) :) :) And I so very much appreciate those six shining stars -- they provided a much-needed 'pick up' in my day -- blessings from over here in Alabama! :) :)

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

that is really sad, I think. maybe it is a metaphor for the world today, are we all cried out when every little thing is an outrage?

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2018

Thanx for your review, meeshu! :) :) Was coming from a standpoint of someone hurting us so much continuously throughout their lifetime that, even though we should feel loss because of who they were to us, we can no longer find even a tear to shed for them...However, I really like your interpretation as well -- so glad that the words fell differently upon your heart and mind ... I believe the interpretation of such limited prose says more about the readers than the writers, but that could be me being 'blonde' again......but, you're right, very, very, sad. Yvette

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. It's a great entry in the 3-5-3 Poetry contest. You should do very well. Maybe even win. I never do, but I still like to enter.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thank you very much for your review, Thomas -- I do so appreciate your taking the time to read my work! :) :) :)