Her Lover is Lost to Her At Sea
A Ditty: Every Night She Keeps Watch for Her Captain54 total reviews
Comment from Anne B Francis
This makes one think not just about all those lost at sea during the war but
even today - those lost in mines wives waiting praying and hoping all is not
lost. Excellent
Anne
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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This makes one think not just about all those lost at sea during the war but
even today - those lost in mines wives waiting praying and hoping all is not
lost. Excellent
Anne
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Hi Anne... This was a write that took me away to another day as you say... Also, it was dreamy, not usually my style but I enjoyed it... yours, diana
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
The heart-wrenching reality of unrequited love! That's an emotional nightmare that seems to carry into our waking hours. I loved your connection to the Captain of the sea. A stunning poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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The heart-wrenching reality of unrequited love! That's an emotional nightmare that seems to carry into our waking hours. I loved your connection to the Captain of the sea. A stunning poem.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Cindy... Thanks for the constellation of stars and reading my poem... yours, diana
Comment from rjuselius
this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear artasylum! love lost in a skip of the heart beat. turning a new leaf is best when it loses its compassion.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear artasylum! love lost in a skip of the heart beat. turning a new leaf is best when it loses its compassion.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Rebekka... Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
Comment from Thomas Bowling
As I read this, I was reminded of the song Brandy where a barmaid loses her love to the sea. Some things can't be competed with. A soul that longs to travel is one of them. This is well-written.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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As I read this, I was reminded of the song Brandy where a barmaid loses her love to the sea. Some things can't be competed with. A soul that longs to travel is one of them. This is well-written.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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I love that... I liked that song... now I can't get it out of my head. Thanks Thomas. yours, diana
Comment from estory
This had an interesting, imaginative format with those episodes of reality mingled in with the visions of the lost lover, very good contrast between the loneliness you have to deal with now, done in a very here and now style, and those ethereal visions of the lost spirit. "Nailing drapery over her reality" was an interesting image, trying to turn your back on the pain. very original. estory
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This had an interesting, imaginative format with those episodes of reality mingled in with the visions of the lost lover, very good contrast between the loneliness you have to deal with now, done in a very here and now style, and those ethereal visions of the lost spirit. "Nailing drapery over her reality" was an interesting image, trying to turn your back on the pain. very original. estory
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey estory: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
Comment from nancyrabbrose
This is a sad but beautiful poem. The manner in which you describing the gradual losing of hope is well done. I especially like your line: "Nailing drapery over her reality". Losing someone is hard and sometimes the drapery just doesn't want to stay nailed down.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a sad but beautiful poem. The manner in which you describing the gradual losing of hope is well done. I especially like your line: "Nailing drapery over her reality". Losing someone is hard and sometimes the drapery just doesn't want to stay nailed down.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Nancy:
Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems her love has kept her from realizing he is dead. It took her too long to accept the facts but finally she returned to life.
Well written. I hope it did well in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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It seems her love has kept her from realizing he is dead. It took her too long to accept the facts but finally she returned to life.
Well written. I hope it did well in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Dragonpoet: It's been known to happen that we cling onto unrequited love and forget to let go. Yours, diana
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Yes, it has. Have a great week.
Joan
Comment from D. Joseph Carpenter
This evokes some intense emotions. I truly feel sorry for her. You can feel the longing and loneliness. Very well written. Seems to be inspired by true emotions.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This evokes some intense emotions. I truly feel sorry for her. You can feel the longing and loneliness. Very well written. Seems to be inspired by true emotions.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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D. Joseph: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
Comment from sd shortt
Your title is the best hook and backs up the promise of some good reading. You could feel the despair dripping down. I'm not crazy about artwork accompanying poetry--too distracting. Your title and the body of the piece should be allowed front and center. You words are strong plus she looked like she was looking out the window for Fabio. I felt the the one line demarcations were redundant. Let the reader learn for themselves what's going on. Great subject matter. Write on.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Your title is the best hook and backs up the promise of some good reading. You could feel the despair dripping down. I'm not crazy about artwork accompanying poetry--too distracting. Your title and the body of the piece should be allowed front and center. You words are strong plus she looked like she was looking out the window for Fabio. I felt the the one line demarcations were redundant. Let the reader learn for themselves what's going on. Great subject matter. Write on.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hello sd shortt: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed...It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... yours, diana
Comment from Gloria ....
Great job, Diana. The last stanza sums up the feeling of resigned desolation very well. So true the Captain chooses the sea over a woman every time.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Great job, Diana. The last stanza sums up the feeling of resigned desolation very well. So true the Captain chooses the sea over a woman every time.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Unfortunately Gloria... although I can't say I blame him... yours, diana