Comment from LaFrance

Excellent

This is the first chapter I read of your chapter book. I enjoyed it and I am intrigued to read more. I enjoyed the dialogue between your characters. The gecko was a fun feature.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

a very good write and an interesting story. the lizards and horny toads serve to liven things up in this section. well penned, Barbara..............meeshu

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hello, funny that Shana can't ignore the Jewish part, heh heh I know how she feels. This was nicely written with lots of detail, I had to laugh at the reaction to the little gecko, we have lots of them in Austalia, and I don't mind them in the house, they eat the mosquitoes, lol. Glad you're enjoying your holiday, sounds nice.

I saw no errors and thanks for sharing your story, cheers, Ana.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018

Thank you for the kind review. Geckos live in our walls here. Every so often one will come inside.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Hello Barb
I liked how you brought into you novel of the
how Shana meets cute little gecko and Shan's
sudden fear then how it seems that Anderson feel that Shana is going to have a nightmare about her sudden fright decides he set up a cot in her bedroom to be next to her
Hmm what is he up to.
Gert

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018

Anderson, I think it just up to taking care of Shana and, of course, winning her love. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Gert sherwood on 19-Jul-2018

You are welcome Barb
well to me Anderson is trying to win love from Shana.

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018

he is and if he comes on strong, he will lose her.

reply by Gert sherwood on 19-Jul-2018

Oh I see so it's up to Shana to make up her mind, I hope it will be soon.
Gert

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Barbara,

It does seem as though Shana's poor nerves are truly on edge. Though I don't like things that creep and crawl, I love geckos. (Living in New Mexico for two years was a nightmare - I was constantly afraid of snakes.)

The story is progressing nicely. I do hope Shana can see her way clear to love Drew. I think if her parents give permission, it will be a done deal.

~patty~

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018

I don't do snakes or spiders, but I do enjoy geckos. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from apky

Exceptional

Hello Barbara,

I'm missing on this story so much.

I just popped in to post an essay on Trump, then checked the inbox (overflowing). I picked out your post and wanted to say "Hey there, friend."

Still don't know when I'll get back to FS "full time"!

Take care, and warm regards,
Aki

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018

I am glad you popped in. Thank you for your kind review. I always appreciate your response.

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Barbara

Enjoyed the continuation. Virtual six. You kept the element of humor amidst the seriousness of the situation (Anderson and Michael guns drawn enter the kitchen) as well as the morality of the situation with Anderson in Shana's room (Papa wouldn't approve). Well done.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018

Thank you for the encouragement.

Comment from Music Bob

Excellent

I thought this was an interesting chapter and held my interest.
The only point I have and I don't know if I'm right but I don't believe that the sentence below flows too well -

Laughing Zachery, again, held up the gecko. - I don't feel that the word again is necessary but that may be due to my inexperience.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018

I will recheck that sentence. Nobody else has mentioned it. There is a sentence in there that I was concerned about but nobody's said anything. LOL I do listen to my reviewers. Thank you.

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Oh my when will Shana ever get over her Jewish hang up and finally allow love to bloom and enjoy life together with drew. I admire the endurance and patience of Drew. It is rare to find men like him today. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018

So true. Men like Drew are rare. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Air Spirit

Excellent

This is the first chapter of your book that I have read... so I am sure I am unable to truly appreciate your story to the full extent - but I found it amusing and entertaining.. I typically don't enjoy reading books/chapters, etc., because I have a short attention span... but the gecko caught my attention, because it made me think of my younger brother, who ALWAYS had lizards, geckos, snakes, and any other creature that crawled... not always to my pleasure though... I loved the dramatic reaction to the gecko, and "...The small brownish lizard escaped his hold. Shana jumped onto a chair and continued screaming.

As Zachery reclaimed it, Anderson and the rest of the family entered the kitchen. Anderson and Michael held guns readied..." was my favorite section by far... I chuckled out loud when I read that... thank you for sharing this little bit of your story, and I look forward to reading more... :)

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018

Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate the review.