The Least of the Seven?
Parents, it's not as obscure as once thought...11 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, I could NOT resist - your delightful (and wise) poem has inspired one from me, and actually, mine is humor, whereas yours is VERY good advice. I'd publish this in a heartbeat - it belongs in schools! :))
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Oh, I could NOT resist - your delightful (and wise) poem has inspired one from me, and actually, mine is humor, whereas yours is VERY good advice. I'd publish this in a heartbeat - it belongs in schools! :))
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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WOW!! Thank you so very much for those stars, Dawn!! :) :) You made my week!! This poem, I don't think, was as well received as others, and I was actually afraid I upset some folks.....even WITH the author note I added at the bottom. :) Although, I guess it could have been that it was just not all that well-written....I did just kinda got the idea when I read the "contest of the day" description and put it down pretty quickly. :) :) :) C'est la vie, non? Important thing is that it turned out great in the end because it was your inspiration for that really cute one this morning....so that will be it's achievement -- HOORAY!! :) :) :) It's be a joy conversing with you, ma'am, and I hope to continue the dialogue along the way.... blessings for the weekend! :) :) Yvette
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Awww! Not at all! YOUR poem is important. Mine's just a bit of fun. :))
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The stars were well-earned, by the way. :))
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Sometimes it is not plain laziness that a person cannot get to do everything they have to do. There are sometimes just too much important things to do and the less important must be put on the back burner for a while.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem. Sometimes it is not plain laziness that a person cannot get to do everything they have to do. There are sometimes just too much important things to do and the less important must be put on the back burner for a while.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Yes -- you are so very correct, ma'am!! :) :) There are those times when there are not enough hours in a day! :) And I know I have said it often, but I do sincerely thank you for taking the time to review my work -- you are AWESOME! :) :)
Comment from kiwijenny
I too have been flabbergasted by parents that let their kids do nothing....and when they grew up they did not know how to cook or clean or work or manage money...they stayed at home because they couldnt do anything else. One woman gave her 30 year old son an allowance..
Grrrrrr. My kids didn't have it so easy. They worked hard. And I am so proud of them...each bought their own vehicle..my 33 year old son still has the truck he got at 16. He does his own mechanics on it and it runs well. He repainted the grill so it looks brand new. My daughter had a retirement fund at 17. She wanted to be kind to her older self. My other daughter took care of the horses before school
Obviously your poem hit a nerve...My 4 year olds in class have to sweep the lunchroom and
Clean the tables...they put out their own mats for nap and put them back again. They earn things for the class by building letters on the floor. I do not allow an iPad ...but the parents love it
God bless...I loved your poem
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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I too have been flabbergasted by parents that let their kids do nothing....and when they grew up they did not know how to cook or clean or work or manage money...they stayed at home because they couldnt do anything else. One woman gave her 30 year old son an allowance..
Grrrrrr. My kids didn't have it so easy. They worked hard. And I am so proud of them...each bought their own vehicle..my 33 year old son still has the truck he got at 16. He does his own mechanics on it and it runs well. He repainted the grill so it looks brand new. My daughter had a retirement fund at 17. She wanted to be kind to her older self. My other daughter took care of the horses before school
Obviously your poem hit a nerve...My 4 year olds in class have to sweep the lunchroom and
Clean the tables...they put out their own mats for nap and put them back again. They earn things for the class by building letters on the floor. I do not allow an iPad ...but the parents love it
God bless...I loved your poem
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Oh, Kiwi, you have NO idea -- I watched it all slowly change over the years I was a high school teacher.....makes you want to pull your hair out!! :) ;) :) I had to retire so I wouldn't go bald ..... or commit a crime of some kind! LOL! We joke, but it really is VERY disheartening on so very many levels....Thank you so very much for your review and for the sharing of a small part of yourself! :) Good to know that there are kindred spirits out there! Here's wishing a week of blossoms and bird song just for you! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Lady Jane
This is the first of poems for this contest I have read to date. Sloth and pride do go hand in hand, but eek...I hope I don't enable my kiddos. I try to encourage them to be active participants in society, but it's so true...some employers just want cookie-cutter employee drones who don't think for themselves which does force some youngins into obscurity. Well penned piece. I like the image, too. It's perfect. The poem flowed well and the content was appropriately chosen. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This is the first of poems for this contest I have read to date. Sloth and pride do go hand in hand, but eek...I hope I don't enable my kiddos. I try to encourage them to be active participants in society, but it's so true...some employers just want cookie-cutter employee drones who don't think for themselves which does force some youngins into obscurity. Well penned piece. I like the image, too. It's perfect. The poem flowed well and the content was appropriately chosen. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thanx (again!) for allotting some of your time to read, Janelle, and for the wonderful analysis -- it really means a lot when folks take the time to honestly review .... not very often, but I do so enjoy it when it does!! :) :) Thanx for those lovely stars and, like I said previously, have a GREAT week! :) :)
Comment from pbomar1115
The poem, in my opinion, is more of an indictment on our Stewarts of society. During the voting season, strong proponents of "get out the vote for it counts" press people to get the poles. But, it appears the youth are the first of the casualties of our society. It hard to serve everyone equally.
Phillip
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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The poem, in my opinion, is more of an indictment on our Stewarts of society. During the voting season, strong proponents of "get out the vote for it counts" press people to get the poles. But, it appears the youth are the first of the casualties of our society. It hard to serve everyone equally.
Phillip
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Phillip, and, in response to your final comment there, I would say that is not hard, it is impossible! (this from the perspective of a teacher). :) :) :) :) Thanx for reading and enjoy the remainder of the weekend, sir - Blessings! :) Yvette
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You're welcome, Yvette.
Phillip
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this deadly sin category of story my friend, I can never remember the specific deadly sins, (I thought all sin was deadly) but sloth is high, is gluttony another? (Christians may not drink or smoke, but boy can the eat) a beautifull entry in this concert, in articute, clever quatrains and abcb rhyming, an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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An excellent entry in this deadly sin category of story my friend, I can never remember the specific deadly sins, (I thought all sin was deadly) but sloth is high, is gluttony another? (Christians may not drink or smoke, but boy can the eat) a beautifull entry in this concert, in articute, clever quatrains and abcb rhyming, an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Roy, and I have to say that I really wasn't even intending to enter a contiest til I logged on today and saw the topic for today --- confession: I had to look up the seven sins because I could only remember six, and guess which one I had left off?! LOL :) :) Seriously, though, thanx for those wonderful stars and have a beautiful weekend of cool breezes and starry nights! Yvette :) :)
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Most welcome
Comment from kahpot
I think there is a very strong message in here for everyone, this is a read people should sit up and take notice of an excellent poem of the sin that we all contribute too, very well written and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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I think there is a very strong message in here for everyone, this is a read people should sit up and take notice of an excellent poem of the sin that we all contribute too, very well written and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, kahpot, and I have to say that I really wasn't even intending to make the commentary til I logged on today and saw the topic for today --- confession: I had to look up the seven sins because I could only remember six, and guess which one I had left off?! LOL :) :) Seriously, though, thanx for those wonderful stars and have a beautiful weekend of cool nights and starlight! Yvette :) :)
Comment from Gloria ....
Well at least a small measure of pleasure can be taken from sloth, unlike envy. That said a very strong social commentary on the age of entitlement, coupled with a complex economy and an educational system that makes promises it cannot possibly keep.
Best wishes to you in the contest with this gem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Well at least a small measure of pleasure can be taken from sloth, unlike envy. That said a very strong social commentary on the age of entitlement, coupled with a complex economy and an educational system that makes promises it cannot possibly keep.
Best wishes to you in the contest with this gem.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Gloria, and I have to say that I really wasn't even intending to make the commentary til I logged on today and saw the topic for today --- confession: I had to look up the seven sins because I could only remember six, and guess which one I had left off?! LOL :) :) Seriously, though, thanx for those wonderful stars and have a beautiful weekend of warm breezes and sunshine! Yvette :) :)
Comment from pome lover
well, good for you. I think they'd rather protest - more fun.
You make a lot of good points, here, and express them well.
I do think, though, that this would be better as free verse rather than trying to rhyme because of the meter. I hope you don't mind my saying that. I like your thoughts.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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well, good for you. I think they'd rather protest - more fun.
You make a lot of good points, here, and express them well.
I do think, though, that this would be better as free verse rather than trying to rhyme because of the meter. I hope you don't mind my saying that. I like your thoughts.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Katharine, and no, I don't mind suggestions and/or critique -- they and you are always most certainly welcome! :) :) Good heavens, can you imagine the monotony if we all saw things the same way -- YUCK!! :) :) Seriously, though, thanx for those stars and have a wonderful weekend of warm breezes and sunshine! Yvette :) :)
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sunshine we got! going to be in the hundreds!
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Close enough here....upper 90's! Was hoping to pass some a long ...ha! ;)
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not to moi! ha :)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
It made me tired to read this poem. I feel like taking a nap. I wish I had the energy to get up and walk to the bedroom. This is great and should do well in the contest.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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It made me tired to read this poem. I feel like taking a nap. I wish I had the energy to get up and walk to the bedroom. This is great and should do well in the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the review, Thomas -- sorry it was such somnifacient for you, though. I hope a nap helps.... I do very much appreciate the stars, though -- thanx! :) :)
