Lust be a lady...
Lust is a deadly sin against which you cannot win!9 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
What a great exercise in personification! "I'm the creak of the springs / And the moan in the noise." What a fantastic, poetic expression that straddles the line separating G-rated and X-rated. That line alone deserves a sex (oops, I mean six - alas, I'm all out).
And of course, behind the great and entertaining writing, there is a spot-on observation you make about everyone's favorite deadly sin - namely, that we so want to embrace it, and not think of it as bad, that we tell ourselves that it's really love. (or, as you put it, "But people get confused / And want to see me in his place" As you further point out though "I make love a liar".
Thank God for happy marriages. Great job, Meia.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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What a great exercise in personification! "I'm the creak of the springs / And the moan in the noise." What a fantastic, poetic expression that straddles the line separating G-rated and X-rated. That line alone deserves a sex (oops, I mean six - alas, I'm all out).
And of course, behind the great and entertaining writing, there is a spot-on observation you make about everyone's favorite deadly sin - namely, that we so want to embrace it, and not think of it as bad, that we tell ourselves that it's really love. (or, as you put it, "But people get confused / And want to see me in his place" As you further point out though "I make love a liar".
Thank God for happy marriages. Great job, Meia.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Mark as always you are the perfect gentleman and reviewer, thankyou so much you really do go the extra mile as a reviewer bless you MEIA XX
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 'Deadly Sons Contest Entree rich in Theme and Imagery.
Based on 'Lust' which at one time, we all will and we all must.
As Ashes are to Ashes Lust is to Dust.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures were excellent.
Meia.
I will post again today.
Wish you luck with this Winner.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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This is a 'Deadly Sons Contest Entree rich in Theme and Imagery.
Based on 'Lust' which at one time, we all will and we all must.
As Ashes are to Ashes Lust is to Dust.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures were excellent.
Meia.
I will post again today.
Wish you luck with this Winner.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thankyou so much Ricky this is so kind of ou BLESS YOU! I am enormously grateful love Meia xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Meia, I am so sorry I missed this one sweet angel...sometimes I forget to check the contest ones...this sounds like the poem I just put out...Sex Isn't Love...and if it isn't felt with love...it is lust...WOW !!!...what a poem....I love all the different examples you talk about...you are brilliant my sweet friend...I love your poem...and I love the pictures...very well written...love you lots...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Hi Meia, I am so sorry I missed this one sweet angel...sometimes I forget to check the contest ones...this sounds like the poem I just put out...Sex Isn't Love...and if it isn't felt with love...it is lust...WOW !!!...what a poem....I love all the different examples you talk about...you are brilliant my sweet friend...I love your poem...and I love the pictures...very well written...love you lots...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thankyou so much I am so very grateful Linda my sweet friend much love Meia xxx
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you are always sooooooo welcome Meia...i hope you are feeling well...love you much...Linda xxoo
Comment from royowen
What a wonderful illustration of one of the seven deadly sins. Lust is the most outstanding of all the major sins, because, although the others are reasonably easier to resist, this one is almost impossible to resist, I think we've all experience it's hoary hand. "Lust be a lady" well done written in abcb rhyming with no fixed meter, and excellent post Meia, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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What a wonderful illustration of one of the seven deadly sins. Lust is the most outstanding of all the major sins, because, although the others are reasonably easier to resist, this one is almost impossible to resist, I think we've all experience it's hoary hand. "Lust be a lady" well done written in abcb rhyming with no fixed meter, and excellent post Meia, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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thanks so much Roy there are so many more people on the site now, it's hard to read it all let alone review it!Thank you so much kindest regards Meia xx
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Well done
Comment from ElegantButler
You've just personified Lust with perfection. I am impressed by the way the wording and cadence of the poem itself is seductive at first. The way Lust slowly reveals her true nature. I often wondered why Lust was usually portrayed as female. But I understand now... there is a subtlety to Lust which is more akin to a Black Widow than anything else.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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You've just personified Lust with perfection. I am impressed by the way the wording and cadence of the poem itself is seductive at first. The way Lust slowly reveals her true nature. I often wondered why Lust was usually portrayed as female. But I understand now... there is a subtlety to Lust which is more akin to a Black Widow than anything else.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much I am truly honoured with your amazing review and six! kindest regards Meia xx
Comment from AprilViolet
I love this poem and then I took a long at some of your other poems and I love those too! You are an amazing writer and I am definitely a fan! Thanks for sharing your talent for writing!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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I love this poem and then I took a long at some of your other poems and I love those too! You are an amazing writer and I am definitely a fan! Thanks for sharing your talent for writing!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much you are so sweet! kindest regards Meia xx
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Terrific composition, Meia.
A lot of terrific imagery, and great development of a theme complete with characters to play the different roles.
Especially liked,
"For the plant of Lust
Bears poisoned fruit-
With pain in the leaf
And misery in the root."
Fine and great work!
Seraph~
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Terrific composition, Meia.
A lot of terrific imagery, and great development of a theme complete with characters to play the different roles.
Especially liked,
"For the plant of Lust
Bears poisoned fruit-
With pain in the leaf
And misery in the root."
Fine and great work!
Seraph~
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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bless you, thankyou so very much! love Meia xx
Comment from kiwijenny
I love this personification of deadly mistaken identity lust
Well penned ...I love the sisters and brother ...who is pure and is really love,
The picture is awesome too
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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I love this personification of deadly mistaken identity lust
Well penned ...I love the sisters and brother ...who is pure and is really love,
The picture is awesome too
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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thanks so much!
Comment from RodG
An excellent job of personifying Lust. What I like best is her honesty. She tells it like it is and makes no attempt to deceive with words. I also enjoyed meeting her family.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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An excellent job of personifying Lust. What I like best is her honesty. She tells it like it is and makes no attempt to deceive with words. I also enjoyed meeting her family.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much!
