Suicide
From the Dark Side; A poem about suicide11 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Very emotional artwork. It works well with the poem, illustrating that everyone will be missed by someone. Even if it's a dog. Excellent rhyme and flow. A very sad topic, but some people get in that state in which they think suicide is the only way out. You wonder about some of the high profile people who commit suicide, like Kate Spade, and why they did it. Excellent rhyme and flow in your poem. judi
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Very emotional artwork. It works well with the poem, illustrating that everyone will be missed by someone. Even if it's a dog. Excellent rhyme and flow. A very sad topic, but some people get in that state in which they think suicide is the only way out. You wonder about some of the high profile people who commit suicide, like Kate Spade, and why they did it. Excellent rhyme and flow in your poem. judi
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your review for it.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Suicide, carries a lot a of bad feelings through it. I usually know when someone mentions suicide that they are generally not ready to act. Those who stop talking are on the edge.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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This poem, Suicide, carries a lot a of bad feelings through it. I usually know when someone mentions suicide that they are generally not ready to act. Those who stop talking are on the edge.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from LaRosa
Thank God you aren't in those shoes, Brett Matthew.
I don't want to make light of the subject matter, but the way you explained where you are coming from, well, I was thinking of the old: think I'll go eat worms song.
But, the 2nd/4th line rhyme is consistent. It's sad to follow the thinking process as the principal of the story relates the intensity building.
A toy unforgotten, depicting the passage of youth, innocence, joyful times, becomes potential tool for death.
Very well thought out and scary thought.
Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thank God you aren't in those shoes, Brett Matthew.
I don't want to make light of the subject matter, but the way you explained where you are coming from, well, I was thinking of the old: think I'll go eat worms song.
But, the 2nd/4th line rhyme is consistent. It's sad to follow the thinking process as the principal of the story relates the intensity building.
A toy unforgotten, depicting the passage of youth, innocence, joyful times, becomes potential tool for death.
Very well thought out and scary thought.
Good job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Brett. Your poem and the use of Willie's photo confirms an important point--the sad ones who are left behind, whether they are humans, felines, or canines. I have had friends and acquaintances commit suicide. A very sad thing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Hi Brett. Your poem and the use of Willie's photo confirms an important point--the sad ones who are left behind, whether they are humans, felines, or canines. I have had friends and acquaintances commit suicide. A very sad thing. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. I am sure all of had such a thought one or more times when we are in a dreadful situation, most of the time we will abandon the thought and carry on with life.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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A very well-written poem. I am sure all of had such a thought one or more times when we are in a dreadful situation, most of the time we will abandon the thought and carry on with life.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your review very much.
Comment from fm wright
For someone who is not suicidal you really hit home. I know this because I have been confined for such in the past. Your muse is good for the words ring true. Very well expressed with well flowing words.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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For someone who is not suicidal you really hit home. I know this because I have been confined for such in the past. Your muse is good for the words ring true. Very well expressed with well flowing words.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your review very much.
Comment from country ranch writer
THERE ARE MANY IN THIS WORLD THAT DO FEEL THIS WAY THOUGH AND DO NOT KNOW WHEN TO TURN TO GET HELP. EVERYONE NEEDS SOMEONE IN THEIR LIFE.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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THERE ARE MANY IN THIS WORLD THAT DO FEEL THIS WAY THOUGH AND DO NOT KNOW WHEN TO TURN TO GET HELP. EVERYONE NEEDS SOMEONE IN THEIR LIFE.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"This was an Informative and Educational Message to call 9-11."
"I have been down 'The Suicide Road' after losing My Son Jason and then my Wife Carolyn in 2006."
"Slept with a Butcher Knife but utilized
{The Toy in My Shelf}
"A Seven inch Serrated Steak Knife Three times to the Right side of my neck and Twice to the Chest trying for the Heart but hit the *Valve."
"In My Recent release...
'Bad Gurl.'
"You can realize why."
"Enjoy.
"And Thanks Brett."
Dr. Ricky 1024.
*{Hit the Valve}
"The Heart Valve controls flow.
"I needed a Machine to drain my chest.
Still have the scar on the side of my hip.
The Three scars on my neck are faded but visible but the scars from the knife entering my chest are gone.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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"This was an Informative and Educational Message to call 9-11."
"I have been down 'The Suicide Road' after losing My Son Jason and then my Wife Carolyn in 2006."
"Slept with a Butcher Knife but utilized
{The Toy in My Shelf}
"A Seven inch Serrated Steak Knife Three times to the Right side of my neck and Twice to the Chest trying for the Heart but hit the *Valve."
"In My Recent release...
'Bad Gurl.'
"You can realize why."
"Enjoy.
"And Thanks Brett."
Dr. Ricky 1024.
*{Hit the Valve}
"The Heart Valve controls flow.
"I needed a Machine to drain my chest.
Still have the scar on the side of my hip.
The Three scars on my neck are faded but visible but the scars from the knife entering my chest are gone.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from misscookie
How happy this is not about you
For awhile I was scared to death
Suicide is next to the highest killer to car accidents
So many people think it solves the problem in a family or relationship well it doesn't now your love one are filled with unanswered question why? Could they have stop you and it , what was it that you wanted or needed in your life.goes on and on thank you for sharing.
cookie
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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How happy this is not about you
For awhile I was scared to death
Suicide is next to the highest killer to car accidents
So many people think it solves the problem in a family or relationship well it doesn't now your love one are filled with unanswered question why? Could they have stop you and it , what was it that you wanted or needed in your life.goes on and on thank you for sharing.
cookie
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Thanks misscookie.
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My pleasure, take care
cookie
Comment from trimple
Hi there, Brett
Glad ya not on the brink of pushing up the daisies, although personally speaking, I think anyone who is truly unhappy should do what they want to do. Why bother plodding along the earth is ya really that miserable? Meh... guess I'm just black and white...
The repetition of ' I'm sick and tired of being sick and tired ' held a wry humour but it was rather sad too.
Chin-up ole boy :)
trimple
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Hi there, Brett
Glad ya not on the brink of pushing up the daisies, although personally speaking, I think anyone who is truly unhappy should do what they want to do. Why bother plodding along the earth is ya really that miserable? Meh... guess I'm just black and white...
The repetition of ' I'm sick and tired of being sick and tired ' held a wry humour but it was rather sad too.
Chin-up ole boy :)
trimple
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this little poem. Appreciate you taking the time to read and write a review. The repeated line did add more flavor to the poem as you stated.
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