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Comment from brenda faye curtis
This is a complete story, with good elements of both action and humor. Is it, by chance, based on real events? If so, I'm glad the little guy survived his ordeal. I wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018
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This is a complete story, with good elements of both action and humor. Is it, by chance, based on real events? If so, I'm glad the little guy survived his ordeal. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Brenda. It?s a true-to-life version that would likely occur if the situation arose.
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You're welcome, Bill. :)
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a terrific poem. I like everything about it, especially that you didn't kill him. Pace, rhythm and word choices are great. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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This is a terrific poem. I like everything about it, especially that you didn't kill him. Pace, rhythm and word choices are great. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Marilyn
Comment from judiverse
Can't say that I blame her. You will have to put up a sign "Not responsible for unattended gerbils." Is gauge the spelling you want? Funny description of both the wife and the gerbil both of them cowering at the other. I like the gerbicidal rage line. The gerbil probably likes a change of scenery once in a while, as long as it isn't your wife. Clever story with excellent rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Can't say that I blame her. You will have to put up a sign "Not responsible for unattended gerbils." Is gauge the spelling you want? Funny description of both the wife and the gerbil both of them cowering at the other. I like the gerbicidal rage line. The gerbil probably likes a change of scenery once in a while, as long as it isn't your wife. Clever story with excellent rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Judi, for giving this a look. Bill
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and cute story in a poem about the little gerbil getting out of his pen and your wife seeing him. I can understand how she felt, but I do think they are very cute. You used a very good picture and very good words. I enjoyed it. blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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This is a very interesting and cute story in a poem about the little gerbil getting out of his pen and your wife seeing him. I can understand how she felt, but I do think they are very cute. You used a very good picture and very good words. I enjoyed it. blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
They are such cute little things, it's hard to think of them as rabid vermin! I loved your fun story though, best keep them caged and out of harms way! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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They are such cute little things, it's hard to think of them as rabid vermin! I loved your fun story though, best keep them caged and out of harms way! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Really cute. We had gerbils when our kid was small. Had a cool set up with plastic tubes extending everywhere from their home in a fishtank filled with wood chips.
Made the mistake of getting a male and a female. We had litters back to back, every few weeks. If I didn't give the babies to a pet shop in time, one of them would have babies! It got out of hand quickly, and finally we took all but four females to pet stores. They were happy to get free gerbils and we were happy to stop the baby boom.
They don't live long. Three or four years later they were all gone, thankfully.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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LOL! Really cute. We had gerbils when our kid was small. Had a cool set up with plastic tubes extending everywhere from their home in a fishtank filled with wood chips.
Made the mistake of getting a male and a female. We had litters back to back, every few weeks. If I didn't give the babies to a pet shop in time, one of them would have babies! It got out of hand quickly, and finally we took all but four females to pet stores. They were happy to get free gerbils and we were happy to stop the baby boom.
They don't live long. Three or four years later they were all gone, thankfully.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Gerbil proliferation will have to be a topic in one the next installments.
Comment from pbomar1115
You know your wife well. After you caught the little critter, I was sure you would have disposed of him by giving him capital punishment. However, you did the unimaginable-- a creature living in your house. Did you put him back in the hole? Wow!
Phillip
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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You know your wife well. After you caught the little critter, I was sure you would have disposed of him by giving him capital punishment. However, you did the unimaginable-- a creature living in your house. Did you put him back in the hole? Wow!
Phillip
Comment Written 09-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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My wife would never leave the chandelier if she saw a gerbil, even in a cage.
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OK.
Comment from nomi338
Rule number one. Never, I mean never, ever scare the women of the house.
Rule number two. If you manage to somehow get outside your cage, turn around and go back inside until someone recloses the cage door.
Rule number three, You must look cute, adorable and harmless at all times.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Rule number one. Never, I mean never, ever scare the women of the house.
Rule number two. If you manage to somehow get outside your cage, turn around and go back inside until someone recloses the cage door.
Rule number three, You must look cute, adorable and harmless at all times.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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This is how I?ve lasted this long.
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Somehow, I sensed that.
Comment from Spitfire
What a tiny helpless creature. But I'm with the wife--don't want it running loose in the house. Still, the poor critter has to be bored and frustrated behind wires. A story well told. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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What a tiny helpless creature. But I'm with the wife--don't want it running loose in the house. Still, the poor critter has to be bored and frustrated behind wires. A story well told. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Shari
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw what a little cutie pie. Moreover what a terrific story in a poem about that the horrible mouse monster being met gerbicidal rage. I hear that gets pretty hot.
Super job with this and a strong entry to the contest, Bill.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Aw what a little cutie pie. Moreover what a terrific story in a poem about that the horrible mouse monster being met gerbicidal rage. I hear that gets pretty hot.
Super job with this and a strong entry to the contest, Bill.
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Gloria.