The Secret
A forbidden love is a secret known to God.6 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
That's a good opening line, intrigue form the start.
sown by the inability to to swoop me away - delete the repetition of 'to' here.
God hears as us we whisper - I think you need to invert as and us here.
Of course, in the eyes of religion, adultery has already been committed - if you belief that sort of thing. Some belief that this kind is worse than the carnal kind.
A well written little piece with a good strong voice.
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
That's a good opening line, intrigue form the start.
sown by the inability to to swoop me away - delete the repetition of 'to' here.
God hears as us we whisper - I think you need to invert as and us here.
Of course, in the eyes of religion, adultery has already been committed - if you belief that sort of thing. Some belief that this kind is worse than the carnal kind.
A well written little piece with a good strong voice.
GMG
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for the careful read. Trying to beat a deadline often results in careless mistakes. Thanks for the "catching." I appreciate your time.
Have a great Sunday!
Mystery Writer
Comment from pbomar1115
A man of God cheats with a married woman. Well, his belief in God may not be as real as he claims. To be a man of God and thinks the secret of cheating is safe from who? People don't care what another person does. He loses his credibility with the people and they think no more of him or her. Down the line should worry them.
Phillip
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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A man of God cheats with a married woman. Well, his belief in God may not be as real as he claims. To be a man of God and thinks the secret of cheating is safe from who? People don't care what another person does. He loses his credibility with the people and they think no more of him or her. Down the line should worry them.
Phillip
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thank you for dropping in to read and comment. Delighted you enjoyed. Only cheating in the mind can result in this penning.
Have a great Sunday!
Mystery Writer
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I have online friendships that could be misunderstood as cheating. I have no desire to do anything. Genuine friendship is the goal. Entertaining physical relationship or anything other than a social relationship seems wrong. Interfering with a committed relationship is not safe or right even though many do it.
Phillip
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No I my friend. Good for you to feel the way you do. I am committed to my husband. My story is fiction, of course. It was inspired by a movie.
Brigitte
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Brigitte, I didn't realize you were the author. I didn't see any indication of you. I try to be honest.
Phillip
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This contest entry had to be anonymous.
Yes, it was me.
Honesty is to be revered.
Brigitte
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Oh . . . ok.
Phillip
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Comment from Zue65
Wow, a married woman in love with a priest. This is a familiar story which happened to my best friend with the initial M. She separated from her husband, married the priest who vowed out of the parish and lived out of the clerical life. Now they are blessed with two children and are happily living together. I enjoyed this romance fiction.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Wow, a married woman in love with a priest. This is a familiar story which happened to my best friend with the initial M. She separated from her husband, married the priest who vowed out of the parish and lived out of the clerical life. Now they are blessed with two children and are happily living together. I enjoyed this romance fiction.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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men of the cloth are human too. The same pitfalls snare them as they do "regular" people. I am delighted your friends story had a happy ending. God gives us choices without judgement.
Have a great Sunday!
Mystery Writer
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, interesting, a marriage being sacred and at the same time
not a prison...one has the fear of consequence, the feeling of guilt or confusion 'of
where the heart belongs, these emotions will be reflected in the sadness of ones
eyes, searching for answers, finding comfort in God, good expression displayed, artistic and poetic.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Good read, educational, interesting, a marriage being sacred and at the same time
not a prison...one has the fear of consequence, the feeling of guilt or confusion 'of
where the heart belongs, these emotions will be reflected in the sadness of ones
eyes, searching for answers, finding comfort in God, good expression displayed, artistic and poetic.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Thank for reading and the kind supportive comments. When a reader enjoys the story, I feel successful.
Secrets are soul gnawing and can never be shared. If you have not watched the movie, "The Thornbirds," I highly recommend it. It follows this theme.
Have a great weekend.
Mystery writer
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You're welcome. I think i did see it, but i will watch it again, as i did not have a subject of a secret at the time. :)
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It struck a familiar chord here. That relationship went to extremes though,lol.
MW
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ok...well done!
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Great interpretation.
MW
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Yes, my heart was protected, as i was on legal separation, but the feelings of despair was still
the same.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
The forbidden love of the forbidden tree -- such a powerfully told story in so very few words. Great job! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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The forbidden love of the forbidden tree -- such a powerfully told story in so very few words. Great job! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Thank for reading and the kind supportive comments. When a reader enjoys the story, I feel successful.
Secrets are soul gnawing and can never be shared. If you have not watched the movie, "The Thornbirds," I highly recommend it. It follows this theme.
Have a great weekend.
Mystery writer
Comment from meeshu
I don't believe God judges so harshly, that is left up to Man and Mankind is flawed. a loving God loves his creation. a thought provoking story..
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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I don't believe God judges so harshly, that is left up to Man and Mankind is flawed. a loving God loves his creation. a thought provoking story..
Comment Written 07-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Thank for reading and the kind supportive comments. When a reader enjoys the story, I feel successful.
Secrets are soul gnawing and can never be shared. If you have not watched the movie, "The Thornbirds," I highly recommend it. It follows this theme. God gave the love and it is how one pursues it that he waiting for.
Have a great weekend.
Mystery writer