Unwelcome Uncertainty
It's not me...yet it is10 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
YM,
Smart post! I can definitely relate. Just when you'd think I'd start to have everything together (age 55) I often doubt myself more than ever. *smile* I think part of that is wisdom that comes with age, knowing that you are not as important or smart as you once thought. hahaha!
Favorite lines:
I want to stop acting as though everything's fine
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
Thanks!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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YM,
Smart post! I can definitely relate. Just when you'd think I'd start to have everything together (age 55) I often doubt myself more than ever. *smile* I think part of that is wisdom that comes with age, knowing that you are not as important or smart as you once thought. hahaha!
Favorite lines:
I want to stop acting as though everything's fine
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
Thanks!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Oh my goodness -- don't I know it?!! I'm right there with you, Robyn -- and it makes me crazy some times as I'm really just not used to this! :) :) :) Seriously, though, thank you so very much for your review and for the sharing -- always good to meet a kindred spirit out there! Have a wonderful weekend!:) :)
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, creative use of words, creative display, good background colour, creative good image of a woman expressing the way she feels eager to be free.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, creative use of words, creative display, good background colour, creative good image of a woman expressing the way she feels eager to be free.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Angela, and for those lovely stars! :) :) May you have a wonderful weekend!
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Comment from kahpot
A wonderful read and poem of self-discovery (I think) and the want of freedom, if I may the third line "I've never been stranger to anger or lust" is this right as it doesn't seem to flow into the next as does the rest of this excellent poem, I love the artwork, this is very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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A wonderful read and poem of self-discovery (I think) and the want of freedom, if I may the third line "I've never been stranger to anger or lust" is this right as it doesn't seem to flow into the next as does the rest of this excellent poem, I love the artwork, this is very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, kahpot! Guess I was just identifying other feelings that tend to get away from us sometime, but that I''m able to control.......at least that was the intent. Oh, well. :) :) Thank you for the wonderful stars!
Comment from Shanbreen
This is a beautiful poem. All your six stanzas with four lines each flow well. It also keeps with ditching part of the contest. Part of the changes in you could be because we live in different times. Whatever it is, your last is superb:
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
Best of luck. Hope you win.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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This is a beautiful poem. All your six stanzas with four lines each flow well. It also keeps with ditching part of the contest. Part of the changes in you could be because we live in different times. Whatever it is, your last is superb:
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
Best of luck. Hope you win.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review
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Oooops! It sent before I was done!! :) :P Thank you (again!!!) for your review, Shanbreen! :) :) And, yeah, I have to say, that the last line felt like the most cathartic when written -- thanx for the beautiful stars and enjoy the week ahead! :) :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Unwelcome Uncertainty, is one that many will understand. We really don't change in our drive or commitment. The inability to TRUST what we hear anymore, makes indecision, in which the Congress usually has the market cornered, becomes our stopper.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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This poem, Unwelcome Uncertainty, is one that many will understand. We really don't change in our drive or commitment. The inability to TRUST what we hear anymore, makes indecision, in which the Congress usually has the market cornered, becomes our stopper.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Bill! :) :) It was one of those that really wasn't difficult to write as all I had to do was concentrate on the rhyme once in a while because the feelings were right there at my fingertips!! Thanx for the wonderful stars and enjoy the week ahead! :) :) :) :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the unwelcome uncertainty that become part of our lives over the years when we feel we are unable to make decisions. We want to get our power back and ditch this uncertainty.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem about the unwelcome uncertainty that become part of our lives over the years when we feel we are unable to make decisions. We want to get our power back and ditch this uncertainty.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Sandra! :) :) It was one of those that really wasn't difficult to write as all I had to do was concentrate on the rhyme once in a while because the feelings were right there at my fingertips!! Thanx for the wonderful stars and many thanks for the time you take to review my works -- it is always appreciated! :) :) :) Blessings from over here!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I love the last line. It's like saying I don't want to be in control, yet, we struggle to keep the control. I don't like making decisions and I probably never will. I hate it. You did a great job and I many can relate.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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I love the last line. It's like saying I don't want to be in control, yet, we struggle to keep the control. I don't like making decisions and I probably never will. I hate it. You did a great job and I many can relate.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Liphe! :) Emotions like this are sometimes hard to grapple with as one also struggles with a rhyming scheme -- I simply fell back on the "old faithful" one that I learned wa-a-a-a-ay back when so that I could concentrate on making sense!! :) :) :) Thank you for your openness and for the wonderful stars, and may you have a wonderful week ahead!! :) :)
Comment from Artasylum
What a wonderful poem... It held me throughout. I loved it...
I want the old "me" back without all this fear
To talk freely with strangers, my smile easy to see
I want to stop acting as though everything's fine
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
LOVE IT!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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What a wonderful poem... It held me throughout. I loved it...
I want the old "me" back without all this fear
To talk freely with strangers, my smile easy to see
I want to stop acting as though everything's fine
I don't want to fake freedom, I want to be free!
LOVE IT!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Diana! Emotions like that are sometimes hard to grapple with as one also struggles with a rhyming scheme -- I simply fell back on the "old faithful" one that I learned wa-a-a-a-ay back when so that I could concentrate on making sense!! :) :) :) Thank you for the wonderful stars and may you have a wonderful week out there in California!! :) :)
Comment from pbomar1115
And I thought it was just me. I feel so out of place in today's social expression. It as if everyone want to vent anger instead of formulating a way to overcome this social mix-up. It appears we are stuck spinning on a merry-go-round and it won't stop. Maybe we have a different understanding but this piece evoke this thought from me.
Phillip
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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And I thought it was just me. I feel so out of place in today's social expression. It as if everyone want to vent anger instead of formulating a way to overcome this social mix-up. It appears we are stuck spinning on a merry-go-round and it won't stop. Maybe we have a different understanding but this piece evoke this thought from me.
Phillip
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Phillip! And, no, it's definitely not just you! :( :) :( :) Emotions like this are sometimes hard to grapple with as one also struggles with a rhyming scheme -- I simply fell back on the "old faithful" one that I learned wa-a-a-a-ay back when so that I could concentrate on making sense!! :) :) :) Thank you for your kinship and for the wonderful stars, and may you have a wonderful week ahead!! :) :)
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All of us are trying to adapt to this doubtful, changing world.
Phillip
Comment from royowen
I think you've described and analysed that a feeing of extreme insecurity is basically a feeling of bondage, displaying a feeling of freedom is a sham. Well done, an excellent work, in no fixed meter quatrains, and articulate, abcb rhymed stanzas, beautifully scribed entry, good luck in the contest, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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I think you've described and analysed that a feeing of extreme insecurity is basically a feeling of bondage, displaying a feeling of freedom is a sham. Well done, an excellent work, in no fixed meter quatrains, and articulate, abcb rhymed stanzas, beautifully scribed entry, good luck in the contest, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Roy! Emotions like that are sometimes hard to grapple with as one also struggles with a rhyming scheme -- I simply fell back on the "old faithful" one that I learned wa-a-a-a-ay back when so that I could concentrate on making sense!! :) :) :) Thank you for the wonderful stars and may you have a wonderful week ahead!! :) :)
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Well done though
