Comment from Victor Y

Excellent

Good work! This cinquain is short in length, but that short length paves way to a blunt, yet clear message that will impact your reader or audience! Simple, yet effective. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much for your excellent review****kahpot

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

The cinquain form is another great little form to help one practice their short game, so to speak friend. Every form has it's benefits and I tip my hat to you for giving them ago : ) You have done your homework here for you have presented a great example of how one should be written. Good luck!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

Such a lovely Cinquain you have penned for the contest. It is so true that He is always willing to come into an open heart. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much a very encouraging review****kahpot

Comment from zanya

Excellent

It's sheer joy to read Faith expressed in a heartfelt manner in a poem, especially in the shorter format, where words have to be especially well chosen -

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much****kahpot

Comment from Tootie

Excellent

This is awesome! You've said it all so very well in this first Cinquain poem. The image is breathtaking too. So well done! Wishing you the very best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot

Comment from evesayshi

Exceptional

In my opinion, a beautifully written poem in its distinctive form - fluid in movement and random rhyme. I lived its succinct and lucid message, especially for my read today, Sunday. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on your first and stunning effort with the Cinquain format. Much luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Wow! it just gets better many, many thank you's as always****kahpot

reply by evesayshi on 01-Jul-2018

You are indeed welcome, and thank you for sharing...Eve

reply by evesayshi on 01-Jul-2018

This is an update - sorry for my typo - I intended to say "loved," versus "lived" in my second sentence. I thought I proofed it, obviously not well...Eve

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a good job, kahpot, with the correct syllable count & strong message in your cinquain. I like the rhyme, too. This is a good testament to your faith. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you for your excellent and encouraging review****kahpot

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Sweet thought, whether it applied to chosen style no comment. I did receive this write conveyed message and found its statement well presented in my opinion.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much****kahpot

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Wonderful job kahpot... I'm trusting you on count... It as fun style and always rewarding to try a poetic form for the first time. Thanks kiddo and looking forward. yours, diana

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you and yes it is a lot of fun****kahpot

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I will have to try this form of poetry. I usually do free verse.
We learn a lot on their site..thank you for speaking words for God. This is so inspiring.
His Son,
Who gave me love
Alone I could not bear
Asks of you to open your heart
And Share....simply faithfully beautiful
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018

Thank you very much and yes do try it is fun****kahpot