On Cherubs' Wings
A rhymed poem26 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tony. My-oh-my, Teagan is getting so big. I like that you are taking her to the Met. I did the same thing with my kids when we lived in NY. Dragged them to all the museums and galleries as an art student. My daughter has her art degree and is a much better artist than I am. Your poem is wonderful. Tried to pick out a favorite line, but I can't. All poem is beautifully composed. Photo is amazing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Tony. My-oh-my, Teagan is getting so big. I like that you are taking her to the Met. I did the same thing with my kids when we lived in NY. Dragged them to all the museums and galleries as an art student. My daughter has her art degree and is a much better artist than I am. Your poem is wonderful. Tried to pick out a favorite line, but I can't. All poem is beautifully composed. Photo is amazing. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for the review and six stars, Marilyn. Teagan loves drawing and painting and gets great encouragement from both her mum and her dad.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Cute photo for your I Imagine poem that you've used for the inspiration for this one as your granddaughter raises her arms to the angelic cherubs floating above her outstretched arms. Lovely all round and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Cute photo for your I Imagine poem that you've used for the inspiration for this one as your granddaughter raises her arms to the angelic cherubs floating above her outstretched arms. Lovely all round and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Valda. Yes, I could not resist using this photo as the basis for a poem! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
Hello, dear Tony. What a fabulous photo choice to match this excellent entry to the I imagine contest. Glad you're enjoying New York.
Love this phrasing:
I embrace
the very essence of the artist's oils
as paint dissolves in swirls of pulsing grace,
freed from the gilt of gesso bordered walls.
*suggestion:
These cherubim are poised on fragile wings
to fly towards the welcome of my arms,(no ,)
and gently lift me up, a heart that sings
and soars beyond the realms of earthbound qualms.--- Nice eloquent voicing!
*suggestion:
In time(,) I'll ask them back with me to earth,
where we will paint the city pavements gold,(no ,)
and fill the hearts and souls of men with mirth,
instilling joy in all, both young and old.
Lovely closing note.
Fine flow and rhyming. Great theme.
Enjoyed!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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Hello, dear Tony. What a fabulous photo choice to match this excellent entry to the I imagine contest. Glad you're enjoying New York.
Love this phrasing:
I embrace
the very essence of the artist's oils
as paint dissolves in swirls of pulsing grace,
freed from the gilt of gesso bordered walls.
*suggestion:
These cherubim are poised on fragile wings
to fly towards the welcome of my arms,(no ,)
and gently lift me up, a heart that sings
and soars beyond the realms of earthbound qualms.--- Nice eloquent voicing!
*suggestion:
In time(,) I'll ask them back with me to earth,
where we will paint the city pavements gold,(no ,)
and fill the hearts and souls of men with mirth,
instilling joy in all, both young and old.
Lovely closing note.
Fine flow and rhyming. Great theme.
Enjoyed!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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Many thanks for your suggestions, RD. Appreciated! Having a great time here at Beacon. Visited the Storm King sculpture park this morning.
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:-)))) So glad to hear it.
Comment from rspoet
I imagine it is wonderful to share such moments with your granddaughter
In youth, anything is possible, even embracing cherubs
and who knows, maybe one day they will return
instilling joy for all.
Excellent rhymed poem for the contest
Best wishes to you and your family
RS
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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I imagine it is wonderful to share such moments with your granddaughter
In youth, anything is possible, even embracing cherubs
and who knows, maybe one day they will return
instilling joy for all.
Excellent rhymed poem for the contest
Best wishes to you and your family
RS
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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Thanks, Robert. I appreciate the extra star. We're having a great visit to NY, currently up north in Beacon for a few days. Best wishes,
Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo, Tony, thanks for sharing.
-It's so nice to introduce children to art.
-You have written a wonderful poem about
this shared experience with your granddaughter.
-The opening line is a perfect complement to the photo.
-Thanks for sharing this special poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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-Very nice photo, Tony, thanks for sharing.
-It's so nice to introduce children to art.
-You have written a wonderful poem about
this shared experience with your granddaughter.
-The opening line is a perfect complement to the photo.
-Thanks for sharing this special poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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Very many thanks, Pam, both for the review and sixth star. We visited the Storm King sculpture park with her this morning - a great place for her to let off a bit of steam! All the best, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony. Thanks for sharing about your visit. All the best to you, as well.
Comment from Aussie
A wonderful snapshot of your granddaughter at the museum. I thought you maybe in the Sistine Chapel. Then again, those old paintings survive in many museums. Have you been to the Tate Gallery in London? Awesome! Thanks for sharing my friend XXK.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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A wonderful snapshot of your granddaughter at the museum. I thought you maybe in the Sistine Chapel. Then again, those old paintings survive in many museums. Have you been to the Tate Gallery in London? Awesome! Thanks for sharing my friend XXK.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2018
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Very many thanks, Kay. It's years since I've been to the Tate. Would love to go again while we are in London, but most of our time in England will be visiting nieces and nephews.I appreciate the sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Spitfire
beyond the realms of earthbound qualms. My favorite line and great use of consonance.
Occasionally this image applies to some of us who experience great joy and share it with others.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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beyond the realms of earthbound qualms. My favorite line and great use of consonance.
Occasionally this image applies to some of us who experience great joy and share it with others.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Shari. Yes, moments of great joy are to be shared. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
I liked how this poem captured the ability of art to raise our spirits, to embody the hopes and dreams in all of us. The language was eloquently composed, with wonderful musical elements, nice echoing rhyme effects and plenty of alliteration stitched into it. Nice one estory
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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I liked how this poem captured the ability of art to raise our spirits, to embody the hopes and dreams in all of us. The language was eloquently composed, with wonderful musical elements, nice echoing rhyme effects and plenty of alliteration stitched into it. Nice one estory
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, estory. I appreciate your comments about the structure of this poem. Young children can sometimes provide just the inspiration needed to raise the spirits and remind us of the important things in life. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from jlsavell
Tony,
This work is incredibly beautiful. Impeccable in delivery, The sentiment is moving and the imagery superb.. how well you imagine.. best wishes with the contest..
jimi
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Tony,
This work is incredibly beautiful. Impeccable in delivery, The sentiment is moving and the imagery superb.. how well you imagine.. best wishes with the contest..
jimi
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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What lovely comments, Jimi, and thank you so much for the six stars. Young children can sometimes provide just the inspiration needed to raise the spirits and remind us of the important things in life. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello,
I love the picture of your granddaughter :) Too sweet.
Your poem is imaginative, indeed. I really like your approach of a connection between the painting and the viewers. It's almost like the artist, hundreds of years ago, made a portal for the past and future to meet. I wonder if the artist knew the art would be enjoyed for so long into the future? I wonder if the artist could see the impact of their painting on future generations, what would he say? Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Hello,
I love the picture of your granddaughter :) Too sweet.
Your poem is imaginative, indeed. I really like your approach of a connection between the painting and the viewers. It's almost like the artist, hundreds of years ago, made a portal for the past and future to meet. I wonder if the artist knew the art would be enjoyed for so long into the future? I wonder if the artist could see the impact of their painting on future generations, what would he say? Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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I loved your take on this one, Joy. So much in tune with what I was trying to express. Teagan can be a great source of inspiration to me at times. Best wishes, Tony