Forest Hill
A peaceful place of Rest for my dad since 1973.12 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Remembrance' writing prompt.
Your verse tells the story of visiting your father's gravesite.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Remembrance' writing prompt.
Your verse tells the story of visiting your father's gravesite.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 18-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this nice review, it's much appreciated!
Comment from Xia Thornwood
I like this poem, honoring the father. Your words painted pictures for me, I could almost see what you were describing. Unfortunately, the poem felt a little clunky at times. Otherwise, well done.
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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I like this poem, honoring the father. Your words painted pictures for me, I could almost see what you were describing. Unfortunately, the poem felt a little clunky at times. Otherwise, well done.
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. Your feedback is much
Appreciated.
Comment from Air Spirit
What a moving and touching poem written about the visit to see your dad in the cemetery. Your description of the road, the birds and the rutted road, the scenery along the way is so vivid I can see the pictures in my mind when I read your words. I also feel the tender longing and melancholy in your words and in the pictures they paint. I understand how it's sometimes easier to talk to your dad in spirit than it ever was in life but the important thing is that you said these things and I know he will hear them.. one of my favorite lines is "...The slightly rutted road winds out,
the duck pond's on the right.
Darkness falls, we leave this place,
to the spirits in the night.". This is a very memorable piece thank you for sharing..
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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What a moving and touching poem written about the visit to see your dad in the cemetery. Your description of the road, the birds and the rutted road, the scenery along the way is so vivid I can see the pictures in my mind when I read your words. I also feel the tender longing and melancholy in your words and in the pictures they paint. I understand how it's sometimes easier to talk to your dad in spirit than it ever was in life but the important thing is that you said these things and I know he will hear them.. one of my favorite lines is "...The slightly rutted road winds out,
the duck pond's on the right.
Darkness falls, we leave this place,
to the spirits in the night.". This is a very memorable piece thank you for sharing..
Comment Written 17-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm so glad you enjoyed this peom.
Comment from IndigoLady
Well done and right on topic. I liked the poetry of course but the story really made it. Making a family outing of visiting your Dad's grave very good, and loved the descriptive narrative.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Well done and right on topic. I liked the poetry of course but the story really made it. Making a family outing of visiting your Dad's grave very good, and loved the descriptive narrative.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this kind review, it means a lot.
Comment from AprilViolet
I love this poem. I almost feel like you are talking about my grandfather. This poem evoked a lot of emotion, and had excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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I love this poem. I almost feel like you are talking about my grandfather. This poem evoked a lot of emotion, and had excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, I appreciate it more than you know.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a beautiful place where your father rest at his final resting place. Every time you visit the memories of his life become alive again.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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A very well-written poem about a beautiful place where your father rest at his final resting place. Every time you visit the memories of his life become alive again.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Thank you for taking time to read and review, I always appreciate it.
Comment from royowen
An excellent work, and an excellent study in descriptive language and a great effort and entry in this contest. Yes, cemeteries can be forbidding, foreboding places and the greyness of the stones adds to the aura, although they can also be attractively packaged, well done, Blessngs, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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An excellent work, and an excellent study in descriptive language and a great effort and entry in this contest. Yes, cemeteries can be forbidding, foreboding places and the greyness of the stones adds to the aura, although they can also be attractively packaged, well done, Blessngs, Roy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Thanks for reading. When I was little I used to be scared of cemeteries, now I understand that there is nothing to fear. I go because I feel closer to my dad and I welcome that feeling. I appreciate you taking time to review.
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Well done
Comment from Sherman541
I think the picture is great and says so much. Your poem it a great tribute and so wonderfully written about the memories of the loss of a father, so loved and buried in a very beautiful cemetery. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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I think the picture is great and says so much. Your poem it a great tribute and so wonderfully written about the memories of the loss of a father, so loved and buried in a very beautiful cemetery. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Thank you so much for this lovely review and for the six stars. It means so much.
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You are most welcome and the six stars were well deserved :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was a lovely, well penned poem portraying reminiscence, Anonymous Poet.
I just lost my dad to Alzheimer's disease on May 31.
He was buried on June 1st.
This will be the first Father's Day spent without my dad.
I can certainly relate to the feelings you've expressed so emotionally here.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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This was a lovely, well penned poem portraying reminiscence, Anonymous Poet.
I just lost my dad to Alzheimer's disease on May 31.
He was buried on June 1st.
This will be the first Father's Day spent without my dad.
I can certainly relate to the feelings you've expressed so emotionally here.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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I'm so sorry for your loss. My dad has been gone from my life for 45 years, but I still remember everything about him. Time makes things easier to bear but you never stop missing them. Thanks for reading.
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It was my pleasure.
Good luck... :)
Comment from Ash Bleu
Great writing, the imagery given to the reader is exquisite. The emotion and stillness I felt was peaceful but sorrowful. The occasional rhyme add even more emotion.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Great writing, the imagery given to the reader is exquisite. The emotion and stillness I felt was peaceful but sorrowful. The occasional rhyme add even more emotion.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I appreciate it more than you know.
