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Another Day on the Job

Quick action scene contest entry

3 total reviews 
Comment from nor84
Good
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You might want to check your word count. When I ran the story through MsWord, it came out 503 words. If you hyphenate twelve-inch, that will make it correctly one word, but contest has an "UNDER 500 words" in the sponsor's rules. Needs a slight trim.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2018
    Thanks. I'll look into it.
Comment from RodG
Excellent
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This is a solid entry to this contest as the action never stops from start to finish. I like that you focused on one scene as the mercenary accomplished his mission. Another plus is that it is easy to visualize each stage in the action. The character is your stock action hero, but who cares. Good job!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
    Thank you for the excellent review, Rod. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great weekend.
Comment from frogbook
Excellent
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Very well written and certainly fit the bill for action. The ending was also very good summing up the purpose of your mission and how you came upon it.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
    Thank you for the excellent review, Frogbook. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great weekend.