Windows to the Soul
the beauty10 total reviews
Comment from Nanny 6
Such a tragic story in poem...so very sad. I couldn't imagine being either one of the people in this story, you did a fabulous job bringing out the sadness and emotions of both ..definitely a good contender for the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Such a tragic story in poem...so very sad. I couldn't imagine being either one of the people in this story, you did a fabulous job bringing out the sadness and emotions of both ..definitely a good contender for the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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thanks so much, Judy. I appreciate your very kind words.
By the way, where is Silt or does that stand for something?
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Western Colorado, near Glenwood springs and Aspen☺
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I lived in Crested Butte for 9 years. Beautiful country.
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It sure is. Love Crested Butte. I lived in Vegas for almost 30 years, it's good to be back in God's country ; )
Comment from poetwatch
A work of fiction at its best. Thank you for a wonderful poem. The eyes may be windows for the soul, but the written word is the implement that is use to bring the soul to the surface. I see that you have shown that writing is beautiful even when it is sad. This is a good entry for the Silver Lining contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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A work of fiction at its best. Thank you for a wonderful poem. The eyes may be windows for the soul, but the written word is the implement that is use to bring the soul to the surface. I see that you have shown that writing is beautiful even when it is sad. This is a good entry for the Silver Lining contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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thank you for such a lovely review!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It must be devastating to see the one you loved in such a condition, but the eyes tell the story of what is inside and the outer condition is not that inmportant.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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A very well-written poem. It must be devastating to see the one you loved in such a condition, but the eyes tell the story of what is inside and the outer condition is not that inmportant.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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that was the message I was trying to convey - though pure fiction, thank goodness.
I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There's great sadness throughout this write and the eyes have great depth and looking into them you can often read a person's intentions, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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There's great sadness throughout this write and the eyes have great depth and looking into them you can often read a person's intentions, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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the love in his eyes - and the beauty of them - the only part of him left that is, and her memory of him as he was, after he died, was her silver lining. Maybe not clear or enough of one.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks of beauty of her man and states the poet in memories finds her man smiling and his beautiful blue eyes she kissed him but he died now love recalls his face and eyes; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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This speaks of beauty of her man and states the poet in memories finds her man smiling and his beautiful blue eyes she kissed him but he died now love recalls his face and eyes; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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many thanks for your kind review
Comment from Old Soldier
How did he get his injuries? Death as a silver lining. Yes it can be. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading writing and writing and reading
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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How did he get his injuries? Death as a silver lining. Yes it can be. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading writing and writing and reading
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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well, actually the love in his eyes - the only beautiful part of him left - and her memory of him after he was gone was the silver lining. That was my intent - maybe overshadowed by his death.
Katharine
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a sad and poignant poem. I do hope that it is not true. I'm not quite sure what the silver lining is as he died. I wish you good luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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This is such a sad and poignant poem. I do hope that it is not true. I'm not quite sure what the silver lining is as he died. I wish you good luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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I think the love in his eyes - his beautiful eyes - and her memory of him was supposed to be the silver lining. Probably not enough to be considered that, huh?
no, this is pure fiction.
Comment from meeshu
great imagery good language and very fine form. but I am confused, is he dying in a fire or in hospital bed or a battlefield? the poem is strong even if I don't get it..
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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great imagery good language and very fine form. but I am confused, is he dying in a fire or in hospital bed or a battlefield? the poem is strong even if I don't get it..
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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I can see why you didn't. It is meant to be that he was burned - I didn't really have a specific location - war, car accident - just that he was burned. and the silver lining was meant to be the love for her shown in his beautiful eyes and her memory of him - as he had been - after he died. But maybe that was overshadowed by his death. So I thank you for your kind words.
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if you started verse five with "in my mind/dreams, I kiss his face. maybe?
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I will check that out. thanks for your interest and suggestion.
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a heart breaking poem. Beautifully written, but just plain sad. I see where you are going with the silver lining in those tormented eyes, but, for me, that is not much of a silver lining. I wish this poem were in a different contest. It could very well win though because it is so well written.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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What a heart breaking poem. Beautifully written, but just plain sad. I see where you are going with the silver lining in those tormented eyes, but, for me, that is not much of a silver lining. I wish this poem were in a different contest. It could very well win though because it is so well written.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Bless you, Debbie! you are not alone in your thought that it was not enough of a silver lining, but I do truly appreciate your kind words!
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I started thinking about your poem and those eyes in the middle of the night last night. Knowing how much someone loves you is a silver lining in any situation. I was wrong. The sadness of the poem just got to me.
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you probably aren't wrong. many people have said the same thing, so...
BUT I appreciate your thoughtful response!!
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, you write this with a lot of feeling considering it is not biographical. But the poem reflects a burns victim, and how excruciatingly painful are burns. I think the picture is good and sets the tone of the poem, which rhymes nicely. I noticed no errors and good luck in the competition, Ana.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2018
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Hello, you write this with a lot of feeling considering it is not biographical. But the poem reflects a burns victim, and how excruciatingly painful are burns. I think the picture is good and sets the tone of the poem, which rhymes nicely. I noticed no errors and good luck in the competition, Ana.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2018
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thank you very much!
