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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from nomi338
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Of course, what else would some one who eats chicken taste like but chicken? You are after all, what you eat. If you eat chicken, you then become chicken, right? If that is truly the case, then what is a condor?

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
    A big chicken, I guess. Don?t say that to his face though.
reply by nomi338 on 06-Jun-2018
    Never, I would never get that close
Comment from damommy
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Great play on words. Also good alliteration.

Buzzards play a big part in keeping things clean, but they have a bad reputation which is unfair. In their way, they are beautiful birds, too.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
    Love buzzards.
Comment from judiverse
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Isn't everything supposed to taste like chicken? My mother-in-law used to try to pass of tofu as chicken. What a story in this. Some condors just don't appreciate the finer things. Love your play on the word "peckish." Cleverly done. You don't need the comma after Coco. Great names. judi

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
    I was going to say it was how "Coco," spelled her name. One of my son's student's name is (ladasha), spelled L A - A H. True story.
Comment from lyenochka
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Well, you taught me a new word, "peckish" which works especially well if you happen to be a bird. Humorous and unexpected pivotal middle line which is what one would expect in a tanka.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
    Well, that's a switch. Thanks for giving this a look.
reply by lyenochka on 02-Jun-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
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Pranka now that IS fun. A new form is it then? If so, I love it, Bill.

I can't imagine one would be too particular about their meal if they're peckish.

Looking forward to your next pranka. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
    I've been calling them that because I use the tanka form, but typically make them funny and otherwise don't keep any proper tanka discipline. Thanks for giving this a look.