Comment from johnwilson

Excellent

Ha ha! Yes, this deserves a sixth star, so the virtual will have to do! This is a great poem--wise, funny, questions asked and answered so well, rhymes are flawless, and I love the words you chose. Well done! (as usual)

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Thanks very much, John. I'm glad you enjoyed, and the virtual sixer is greatly appreciated. Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hi, Craig.

Strong poem, with an across the spectrum message of wisdom in using the word of the day theme to pen out a warning not to watch the time pass by.

I'm not very good with the form to know if the beats are all where they should be, but I can say that I didn't trip over any of the lines (save for a slight reorienting for when I got to the line using enjambment, the second time through, I didn't even hesitate.)

don't let that torpid tell-clock type be you.
(really liked the triple T sounds through this line, the 'torpid tell-clock type' leaps off of the end of 'that', allowing the mouth to be ready to say it, and ending on the softer you... after all the faster, harder sounds... I liked it, it sums up the theme of the poem very nicely)

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Thanks again for the perceptive and kind review, Turtle. I probably shouldn't admit this, but sometimes when I read my own poems back, I don't pick up the meter the first time. I start reading, and think... "no, wait, that's not how it went" lol

Most grateful, as always.

Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Really well done sonnet and admirable message, too. I was surprised at the meaning of "idler" as the first definition seems to show perhaps some kind of human clock.

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Thanks very much for the kind comments, Helen. Agreed, the first definition could be clearer. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Excellent sonnet form, Craig. Nothing more time wasting than actually watching the clock instead of doing something you love so time flies by.

Cool new word and now I need to go and pass some time somewhere.

Enjoyed.

Gloria

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Thanks so much, Gloria. When I'm guilty of clock-watching, it's usually a result of wishing I could squeeze in more time, not wanting it to rush by :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. Time is the only thing we really have for free. When we waste it it is gone forever. When we use our time with great care we find we are richer than anyone else.

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Very true, Sandra. I find there's always too little of it. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Craig. I kind of guessed as to the meaning of this one. Tick Tock. This poem was a very smooth read and was well rhymed. Message was abundantly clear to me. I totally agree. Even if there is an afterlife, we should live our lives to be as kind and caring to others as we can. Man has his own will and should use it for good. Not wait for some possible entity to run our lives. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Thanks very much for the kind and insightful comments, Pam. Most grateful :) Craig

Comment from aanneee

Excellent

This is such a super-duper write and so full of good advice and I agree with you a 100% and more. I set myself a project constantly and for me no project should go unfinished, hauling rocks, weeding, cooking something special or what ever, although at 78 the rocks have gotten a lot smaller lately...but no project not done...it works for me. I so agree with you and I thank you for the read...Dinah

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

At 78, I'd say shuffling rocks of any size is pretty good going, Dinah. Plenty wouldn't be able to manage it. Thanks for the terrific comments, they're much appreciated - Craig

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Hi Craig,

You taught me two new words today ... "torpid" and "tell-clock". Thanks!

Your poem clearly conveys the meaning of the word "tell-clock". "It could be time you stopped counting the days, and looked to Earth for answers, not the sky" ... I really love this line. We have to live in the here and now and be realistic. This could well be all we've got ... this time on Earth ... right now.

Well done, Craig! ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Thanks so much for the great comments, Connie - I really appreciate them. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig;

When I saw the title of your poem, I thought you were going to tell of those maddening people in the workplace who would have their things all ready to go and leave their desks at exactly five o'clock. (Worse when I worked in the shipyard, they would be lined up at the time clock at five minutes til so they could punch out at exactly the time we were to stop for the day.)

However, the message of your poem is much different. It IS important to make the most of each day - you never know when it will be your last.

~patty~

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Thanks very much, Patty. I think to a large extent it depends on whether you enjoy your work. Most of us don't and so we can't wait to get away. A lucky few do, and they don't seem so bothered by the clock. I've been in both situations at various times lol

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Craig, well written poem with a lot of truths. If there is a clock we tend to keep watching checking it - obviously I do, does that mean I'm an idler? LOL! I think we were on the same wave link when we wrote our latest postings. Good final couplet in your poem. I'll try following your advice. Good read, well rhymed in good abab. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

I'll try following my advice too, Dorothy - not something I'm great at!

Many thanks for stopping by, and for the fun comments. I appreciate the kind remarks as well.

Cheers,
Craig