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Comment from Dawn Munro
Ha! That's what Mantis gets for not being more specific. (LOL) Clever 5-7-5, Bill, and fun. Excellent alliteration for each line too - what more could anyone ask from a poem than to enjoy it? I mean... Really!
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
Ha! That's what Mantis gets for not being more specific. (LOL) Clever 5-7-5, Bill, and fun. Excellent alliteration for each line too - what more could anyone ask from a poem than to enjoy it? I mean... Really!
Comment Written 23-May-2018
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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Thanks, Dawn
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My pleasure.
Comment from frogbook
A bit chilling with the night picture and the waiting for death. Makes me think of the old movies always with the giant bugs.
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
A bit chilling with the night picture and the waiting for death. Makes me think of the old movies always with the giant bugs.
Comment Written 23-May-2018
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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Thank you, FB
Comment from judiverse
"Mantis in moonlight" has a serenade-like quality. Mantis in moonlight--will he live through the night? Survival is on the guy's mind. This is perfect form for a 5-7-5, and the artwork is rather spooky-looking. It reflects the sinister thoughts in your poem, though. judi
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
"Mantis in moonlight" has a serenade-like quality. Mantis in moonlight--will he live through the night? Survival is on the guy's mind. This is perfect form for a 5-7-5, and the artwork is rather spooky-looking. It reflects the sinister thoughts in your poem, though. judi
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Those manti are not to be trifled with.
Comment from damommy
Very good alliteration throughout. I like the use of 'prey' and 'pray' in the same sentence.
Nice image of mantis praying in the moonlight, waiting for dawn apparently.
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
Very good alliteration throughout. I like the use of 'prey' and 'pray' in the same sentence.
Nice image of mantis praying in the moonlight, waiting for dawn apparently.
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, da
Comment from lyenochka
Nice one with cool artwork! Great alliteration of m, p, and d words. And the internal rhyme of prays/prey/day gives this 5-7-5 a more musical element. Glad the mantis got his food!
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
Nice one with cool artwork! Great alliteration of m, p, and d words. And the internal rhyme of prays/prey/day gives this 5-7-5 a more musical element. Glad the mantis got his food!
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from nomi338
A prayer for food when answered provides a bellyful of happiness. A prayer denied means your intended prey has found a place to run away and hide. Your belly becomes skinny because bites to eat you haven't had any.
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
A prayer for food when answered provides a bellyful of happiness. A prayer denied means your intended prey has found a place to run away and hide. Your belly becomes skinny because bites to eat you haven't had any.
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Praying mantis will eat anything living, including fellow mantes.
Comment from Kerry Foley
This is a terrific 5-7-5, Bill. I love the juxtaposition in this in this little piece of poetry, as well as the internal alliteration. Nicely done. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
This is a terrific 5-7-5, Bill. I love the juxtaposition in this in this little piece of poetry, as well as the internal alliteration. Nicely done. ~Kerry
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, Kerry
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Very welcome, Bill.
Comment from kiwijenny
Mantis in moonlight...great alliteration
Prays for prey...great homonym
Death comes with the dawn...yep, prayers are answered.
Circle of life kind of thing
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
Mantis in moonlight...great alliteration
Prays for prey...great homonym
Death comes with the dawn...yep, prayers are answered.
Circle of life kind of thing
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, Jenny
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Bill,
Your 5/7/5 poetic offering is rather chilling, and yet, it is the law of nature! Syllabic count is correct, and your poem paints a vivid visual image. Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
Hello Bill,
Your 5/7/5 poetic offering is rather chilling, and yet, it is the law of nature! Syllabic count is correct, and your poem paints a vivid visual image. Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, Mrs. KT
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
All three lines were captivating to where this little piece said so much and was so expressive, it had vivid imagery and just a plain enjoyable read, as always good work
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
All three lines were captivating to where this little piece said so much and was so expressive, it had vivid imagery and just a plain enjoyable read, as always good work
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you, Phillip