Daddy Will You
Growing up seeking a father's love16 total reviews
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Damn Liz this is brilliant. I can understand every single word but with different examples. The ending is stunning and relates to the poem I sent you. We are both trying to get across the deep and irrational feelings you experience when you are an innocent child. That incredible feeling of being rejected, and so alone, hurt but not knowing why. Anyway that's enough for one review. And I only earned 2 member cents, :)
Thank you so much for your comments on my poem, means a lot.
Take care and stay safe, Pete
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Damn Liz this is brilliant. I can understand every single word but with different examples. The ending is stunning and relates to the poem I sent you. We are both trying to get across the deep and irrational feelings you experience when you are an innocent child. That incredible feeling of being rejected, and so alone, hurt but not knowing why. Anyway that's enough for one review. And I only earned 2 member cents, :)
Thank you so much for your comments on my poem, means a lot.
Take care and stay safe, Pete
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your hard work for 2 cents...lol When I can nominate next month I will include a bump thing that has more points to it. That's what I've done for friends here.
Comment from Mabaker
Dear Liz you are so talented I love your work. If you notice I write of imaginary talking cats, and though sometimes, I let one of them die, I do it for a valid reason. I can't face reality, I had a parent I wanted so desperately to hear one word of praise. It never came. So I create make-believe friends, and they never hurt me. I would love to be like you able to line all the rejection up and take it by the throat and shake all the hurt away.
I love u Liz, don't ever change. Love Anne
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Dear Liz you are so talented I love your work. If you notice I write of imaginary talking cats, and though sometimes, I let one of them die, I do it for a valid reason. I can't face reality, I had a parent I wanted so desperately to hear one word of praise. It never came. So I create make-believe friends, and they never hurt me. I would love to be like you able to line all the rejection up and take it by the throat and shake all the hurt away.
I love u Liz, don't ever change. Love Anne
Comment Written 07-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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How sweet. Thank you for your expression of admiration. I am humbled. It was after 7 years of therapy and many years of Alanon for friends and families of alcoholics, that I was able to move on. My bullying that has followed me my whole life til I have retired, began with him. He has always haunted me in one way or another. I learned to become my own parent during therapy. Thanks for sharing your story, Anne.
Comment from Joan E.
I may be wrong, but this poem seems autobiographical, and I admire the theme of disengaging to stop hurting and to start healing. The purple background was perfect to reinforce empowerment. I hope this touching poem was well received in the contest. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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I may be wrong, but this poem seems autobiographical, and I admire the theme of disengaging to stop hurting and to start healing. The purple background was perfect to reinforce empowerment. I hope this touching poem was well received in the contest. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review of my autobiographical poem.
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Thank you for confirming that your poem is autobiographical. I hope writing and sharing it was therapeutic. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Very moving. Nice flow--if one can say such a thing about a poem covering such a serious subject. You come across as being a very strong and loving woman. I loved my father, but he never showed me the affection I think a father should. Not that I thought he was a bad man. Just no hugs, and his excessive drinking caused things to go awry at times.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Very moving. Nice flow--if one can say such a thing about a poem covering such a serious subject. You come across as being a very strong and loving woman. I loved my father, but he never showed me the affection I think a father should. Not that I thought he was a bad man. Just no hugs, and his excessive drinking caused things to go awry at times.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Wow, your review is shadowing my experience. Thank you for your affirmation. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for the 6 stars. I am honored.
Comment from LaRosa
This is such a poignant, emotional poem, Liz. Thank God such painful experiences only served to create a gentle and loving heart.
It was very effective that the 'voice' was that of a child in the beginning which then built into a woman of power and strength over her own life.
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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This is such a poignant, emotional poem, Liz. Thank God such painful experiences only served to create a gentle and loving heart.
It was very effective that the 'voice' was that of a child in the beginning which then built into a woman of power and strength over her own life.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad it touched you so.
Comment from Anne B Francis
Gosh never realised one could look on this as depending on someone, but yes it is so true everyone wants to be loved and needed. Parents really don't think, never have time guess they have forgotten what it was like to be a child. Yes living in the same house sum it up, that's all some children seem to do.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
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Gosh never realised one could look on this as depending on someone, but yes it is so true everyone wants to be loved and needed. Parents really don't think, never have time guess they have forgotten what it was like to be a child. Yes living in the same house sum it up, that's all some children seem to do.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
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Thank you for taking an interest in my writings. Thank you for your affirming review.
Comment from Badger_29
This speaks volumes of trying to gain acceptance from somebody who not only with give it, they withdrew it. This is put together in a simple easy to read way with some good meter form flow and rhyming.
Enter we have a lot in common, although mine father did encourage me and give me acknowledgement, he then withdrew it would because I could be human at it for 25 years. You might be interested to read his work here, as his moniker is Irish author me. Thanks so much for your kind review thanks for sharing that we are Kindred Spirits.
Enter blessings, brother badger
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This speaks volumes of trying to gain acceptance from somebody who not only with give it, they withdrew it. This is put together in a simple easy to read way with some good meter form flow and rhyming.
Enter we have a lot in common, although mine father did encourage me and give me acknowledgement, he then withdrew it would because I could be human at it for 25 years. You might be interested to read his work here, as his moniker is Irish author me. Thanks so much for your kind review thanks for sharing that we are Kindred Spirits.
Enter blessings, brother badger
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
Comment from johnwilson
Since you reviewed my work, I thought I'd take a look at what you'd written. I'm so pleased that I did. When I first started reading this poem, I didn't appreciate the "Oh", as an answer each time; however, because you are a talented poet, I understood when I reached the end. This is powerful in its simplicity. I could feel the emotion. Well done!
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Since you reviewed my work, I thought I'd take a look at what you'd written. I'm so pleased that I did. When I first started reading this poem, I didn't appreciate the "Oh", as an answer each time; however, because you are a talented poet, I understood when I reached the end. This is powerful in its simplicity. I could feel the emotion. Well done!
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Oh, I thought I had saved my response but it says I haven't so here we go. Thank you for your persevering review. I'm glad you got the essence of my message. I couldn't resist the "oh"
Comment from Marvin Calloway
What a shame.
So well written and tearfully expressed. Its difficult to read a work like this. The main thing is you beat him. You emerged a wonderful person.
You are to be admired and congratulated. And it's still painful.
Marv
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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What a shame.
So well written and tearfully expressed. Its difficult to read a work like this. The main thing is you beat him. You emerged a wonderful person.
You are to be admired and congratulated. And it's still painful.
Marv
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Thank you for your heartfelt review and for your affirmation of whom I've become
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This is a very powerful poem and I loved the message. Often we are better off to move on and find others that will "empower" us. This is a fine example of an emotional dependency poem. A great entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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This is a very powerful poem and I loved the message. Often we are better off to move on and find others that will "empower" us. This is a fine example of an emotional dependency poem. A great entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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What great response to this poem. Thank you for your kind review. I am a very strong confident happy woman after all this. It has inspired me to write & publish a series, Be Wee With Bea, a Winnie the Pooh genre, dealing with a lot of these issues.
