A free verse about women.
A free verse for the club.17 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Ine, I hate to say this sweet girl...but there is dysfunction in all families...you just have to work things out...very well written poem you...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hi Ine, I hate to say this sweet girl...but there is dysfunction in all families...you just have to work things out...very well written poem you...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and lovely weekend.
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you are so welcome Ine...and you have a blessed and lovely weekend as well...love you...xxoo
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Ine. I am giving you 5 stars for being brave enough to bare your soul and family faults in your free verse. I think women are our sisters, not our enemies, and why we hate each other so much, I don't know. I am not one of those women. Women have been there for me and me for them. We cannot paint one gender (our own) with a black brush. Family illnesses handed down are, of course, not the fault of the carrier of those diseases. If there is incest in the family, I think that may say a lot for the behavior and compassion for the victims is warranted. All families have their secrets. We're stuck with our relatives. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Hi Ine. I am giving you 5 stars for being brave enough to bare your soul and family faults in your free verse. I think women are our sisters, not our enemies, and why we hate each other so much, I don't know. I am not one of those women. Women have been there for me and me for them. We cannot paint one gender (our own) with a black brush. Family illnesses handed down are, of course, not the fault of the carrier of those diseases. If there is incest in the family, I think that may say a lot for the behavior and compassion for the victims is warranted. All families have their secrets. We're stuck with our relatives. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good last part of the week.
Comment from meeshu
this is quite a piece about your family women, Robina. I have found that if you formalize a list, all families are messed up. nobody makes a list of the great things in their family.........meeshu
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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this is quite a piece about your family women, Robina. I have found that if you formalize a list, all families are messed up. nobody makes a list of the great things in their family.........meeshu
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and lovely second part of this week
Comment from patcelaw
I am with you in many respects about women. Ido find I can more easily relate with me, as they seems more logical in their thinking and women many times seem to be scatter brained. Patricia
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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I am with you in many respects about women. Ido find I can more easily relate with me, as they seems more logical in their thinking and women many times seem to be scatter brained. Patricia
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and lovely second part of this week
Comment from Dutchie
Interesting poem Ine. I'm from a dysfunctional family too..But it had a reason.
You can chose your friends, but not your family, so you try to make the best of it.
I think it was not easy for you, not in the past and not at this moment. Thanks for sharing it with us. Love Fia
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Interesting poem Ine. I'm from a dysfunctional family too..But it had a reason.
You can chose your friends, but not your family, so you try to make the best of it.
I think it was not easy for you, not in the past and not at this moment. Thanks for sharing it with us. Love Fia
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and lovely second part of this week.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Robina,
My favorite part is:
Insanity runs in our family
insane as a horse going wild
or a dog getting haywire.
I thought your comparisons were great. love 'as a horse going wild'; maybe the word 'gone' would work better than 'going'?
My family is dysfunctional too.
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Hello, Robina,
My favorite part is:
Insanity runs in our family
insane as a horse going wild
or a dog getting haywire.
I thought your comparisons were great. love 'as a horse going wild'; maybe the word 'gone' would work better than 'going'?
My family is dysfunctional too.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good second part of the week.
Comment from dragonpoet
It sounds like you don't like your family much. You seem to be very critical of them and don't see any good side or lovable side to them. I feel sorry for your youngest sister if she truly was a victim of incest.
In the third stanza 'mother's site' should be 'mother's side'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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It sounds like you don't like your family much. You seem to be very critical of them and don't see any good side or lovable side to them. I feel sorry for your youngest sister if she truly was a victim of incest.
In the third stanza 'mother's site' should be 'mother's side'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good second part of the week.
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My pleasure, Robina.
Jon
Comment from Joan E.
I admire your courage to discuss your dysfunctional family members, especially females--maybe, writing about them is a good way to chase away the demons! My genes aren't great either--among other autoimmune disorders, I have Hashimoto's syndrome--the opposite of your condition with low thyroid factor. Good luck to us both- Joan
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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I admire your courage to discuss your dysfunctional family members, especially females--maybe, writing about them is a good way to chase away the demons! My genes aren't great either--among other autoimmune disorders, I have Hashimoto's syndrome--the opposite of your condition with low thyroid factor. Good luck to us both- Joan
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good second part of the week.
Comment from rheabug
Wow! This is a great poem about women. I wouldn't even know where to start with the women in my life. Mainly my daughters-in-laws. I have two sons and both of them are on their second marriages so that makes 4 daughter-in-laws that I have to be friends with because of their children being my grandchildren. HUgs...
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Wow! This is a great poem about women. I wouldn't even know where to start with the women in my life. Mainly my daughters-in-laws. I have two sons and both of them are on their second marriages so that makes 4 daughter-in-laws that I have to be friends with because of their children being my grandchildren. HUgs...
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good second part of the week.
Comment from Henry King
This poem, free verse, is a tale of a family in disarray. It appears the poet is releasing stress, the most dreadful type, that of abuse, neglect and most assuredly indifference or ignorance to self and kin. Her words are specifically directed at those she suspects or knows they are at fault. This stress is long standing and festered to this inevitable boiling point. That splash of hate blamed her maternal grandmother for passing on her infectious genes. I don't know when the knowledge that there was a human gene to which to blame came into existence. But life goes on and on and on. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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This poem, free verse, is a tale of a family in disarray. It appears the poet is releasing stress, the most dreadful type, that of abuse, neglect and most assuredly indifference or ignorance to self and kin. Her words are specifically directed at those she suspects or knows they are at fault. This stress is long standing and festered to this inevitable boiling point. That splash of hate blamed her maternal grandmother for passing on her infectious genes. I don't know when the knowledge that there was a human gene to which to blame came into existence. But life goes on and on and on. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a blessed and good second part of the week.
