Love Me Once More
Love is strong and will return to me34 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an exceptional and heartfelt poem. That's such a tragedy and my condolences for your loss of your brother.
You could feel the heartache, sadness and a sense like they're kind of blaming you or holding you responsible for his death and them forgetting that your still their son and you grieve for the loss of your brother, just like them, their son.
I think you expressed your feelings well in this poem, it flowed well.
Great job and Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Hi
This is an exceptional and heartfelt poem. That's such a tragedy and my condolences for your loss of your brother.
You could feel the heartache, sadness and a sense like they're kind of blaming you or holding you responsible for his death and them forgetting that your still their son and you grieve for the loss of your brother, just like them, their son.
I think you expressed your feelings well in this poem, it flowed well.
Great job and Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you, my Friend, Yes at the time I guess all the worst things went through my mind about everything****kahpot
Comment from Pamusart
Hi kahpot This is a good entry for the contest. I am sorry if this is autobiographical. I am reminded of the movie "Ordinary People". But at least the surviving son had his father. I know what rejection feels like. You are not alone. My mother tried to kill me at 15 and my dad abandoned me at 16 and had bad experiences at foster home. That movie showed me how parents can totally screw the surviving son. I am glad that you survived and that I can read your eloquent poems. It is clear that you have suffered. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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Hi kahpot This is a good entry for the contest. I am sorry if this is autobiographical. I am reminded of the movie "Ordinary People". But at least the surviving son had his father. I know what rejection feels like. You are not alone. My mother tried to kill me at 15 and my dad abandoned me at 16 and had bad experiences at foster home. That movie showed me how parents can totally screw the surviving son. I am glad that you survived and that I can read your eloquent poems. It is clear that you have suffered. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much, and I am very glad that you are still here, and we can share our words on this site, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Wow. This really touched my heart and I could feel your pain. Your poem is raw, real and emotion evoking. Grief makes us act/do many things, even withdraw from love. I hope you win this contest. GOOD LUCK! :)
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Wow. This really touched my heart and I could feel your pain. Your poem is raw, real and emotion evoking. Grief makes us act/do many things, even withdraw from love. I hope you win this contest. GOOD LUCK! :)
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you, I try not to get withdrawn from love and hope it will return, many thanks for the wonderful 6 stars****kahpot
Comment from Hitcher
Grief can be a dark malevolent force, it can blind and bind those unfortunate enough to succumb to it's full power. The loss of a child would be devastating on a family and things would never be as they were... ever. I believe when the grieving is done, the pain and loss worked through, Love would return and it would be stronger.
An excellent poem for the contest friend. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Grief can be a dark malevolent force, it can blind and bind those unfortunate enough to succumb to it's full power. The loss of a child would be devastating on a family and things would never be as they were... ever. I believe when the grieving is done, the pain and loss worked through, Love would return and it would be stronger.
An excellent poem for the contest friend. Good Luck!
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you, Friend, and yes I too believe it will return****kahpot
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello kahpot,
I think this line is better with the addition of 'the'
as I am falling from the life you gave
Very nostalgic. Imagery stands out. Rhyming is good.
All the best in the contest.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Hello kahpot,
I think this line is better with the addition of 'the'
as I am falling from the life you gave
Very nostalgic. Imagery stands out. Rhyming is good.
All the best in the contest.
Sylvia
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you very much, and I did try it both ways and really was unsure****kahpot
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Instead of losing one child they lost two by their own actions. I hope they are able to come around. My dad always says that a parent should never have to bury a child but a child should always bury the parent. I guess in a perfect world that's how it should work. I hope this was therapeutic for you
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Instead of losing one child they lost two by their own actions. I hope they are able to come around. My dad always says that a parent should never have to bury a child but a child should always bury the parent. I guess in a perfect world that's how it should work. I hope this was therapeutic for you
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Many thanks and yes I understand that the child should do the burying, such circumstances are unfortunate for all, many thanks for the wonderful 6 stars****kahpot
Comment from Unmie Dawn
Hello,
I felt this poem touch my soul. I am the oldest child in my family. I was never wanted by own my mother. So reading this is like taking all the things I feel and putting it paper in a way I never could. Thank you for taking what others feel and putting in words.
Sincerely,
Unmie
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Hello,
I felt this poem touch my soul. I am the oldest child in my family. I was never wanted by own my mother. So reading this is like taking all the things I feel and putting it paper in a way I never could. Thank you for taking what others feel and putting in words.
Sincerely,
Unmie
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you very much for such a wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Kahpot, You've suffered a loss, yet the greatest loss still lives ... the loss of love received from your Parents. Your poem is heartfelt and very sad, and the depth of your pain is so very deep ... beyond pain. Of special note:
your love was promised when I was born
your love was promised not to be torn
and:
please reach for me from up above
extend my life with my lost love
K, The loss of a child is like no other, and to grieve is a necessary and vital part of healing. I pray that your parent's grief, and yours, will pass and that your three hearts will become One, once again. In the meantime, look to others for comfort and understanding during this time of healing and need. My sincere condolences, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Hello Kahpot, You've suffered a loss, yet the greatest loss still lives ... the loss of love received from your Parents. Your poem is heartfelt and very sad, and the depth of your pain is so very deep ... beyond pain. Of special note:
your love was promised when I was born
your love was promised not to be torn
and:
please reach for me from up above
extend my life with my lost love
K, The loss of a child is like no other, and to grieve is a necessary and vital part of healing. I pray that your parent's grief, and yours, will pass and that your three hearts will become One, once again. In the meantime, look to others for comfort and understanding during this time of healing and need. My sincere condolences, LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this excellent review, and for the very sound advice, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I stay alive in the hope you see
there's only me, there's only me
please love me again as you have before
please love me again just once more...wow so much feeling here, and so touching. God bless you this is really a special poem. Good luck in the competition love and regards Meia x
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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I stay alive in the hope you see
there's only me, there's only me
please love me again as you have before
please love me again just once more...wow so much feeling here, and so touching. God bless you this is really a special poem. Good luck in the competition love and regards Meia x
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the love between parents and children that is very sensitive. The pain of a child lost is very hard to get to terms with, be patient with your parents they need to grieve and mourn. They will realize your support when the time is right.
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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A very well-written poem about the love between parents and children that is very sensitive. The pain of a child lost is very hard to get to terms with, be patient with your parents they need to grieve and mourn. They will realize your support when the time is right.
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you, Sandra, and patient I will be as love will return****kahpot
