Slide On Outta Here, Old Man Winter!
Tyburn contest entry: Second Place Winner30 total reviews
Comment from ameen786
You are not the only one happy to see winter go my friend; you captured the essence of wintry blues superbly; perfect rhymes and a perfect picture; good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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You are not the only one happy to see winter go my friend; you captured the essence of wintry blues superbly; perfect rhymes and a perfect picture; good luck!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello ameen!
Good Lord! I thought winter was never going to end!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
Comment from Air Spirit
I absolutely love your poem... First of all, the pictures cracked me up (sorry, should I laugh?)... and the words you use, all with the "ing" sound, is catchy, flippant, and fun.. I really like the Tyburn format --- it is clever, to the point, which requires the writer to be selective with his words, and make them count.. You did a great job!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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I absolutely love your poem... First of all, the pictures cracked me up (sorry, should I laugh?)... and the words you use, all with the "ing" sound, is catchy, flippant, and fun.. I really like the Tyburn format --- it is clever, to the point, which requires the writer to be selective with his words, and make them count.. You did a great job!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend!
This Tyburn was so much fun to pen! (The picture "cracked me up" too!)
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
lol, this is a fantastic Tyburn, my friend. All your syllables are correct and sentences are perfectly done. A terrific title, lol, nice one! Winter sure is sticking around longer then it should, we have snow in the forecast for the weekend, crazy!
Good luck to you! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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lol, this is a fantastic Tyburn, my friend. All your syllables are correct and sentences are perfectly done. A terrific title, lol, nice one! Winter sure is sticking around longer then it should, we have snow in the forecast for the weekend, crazy!
Good luck to you! ~Kerry
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Kerry!
This Tyburn poem was so much fun to pen!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
I am so done with winter! :)
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My pleasure, they are fun:))
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
YES! Good-bye old man winter! Loved the photo montage and the wonderful action verbs that are perfect word choices to describe winter. This is a good entry for the Tyburn poetry contest. Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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YES! Good-bye old man winter! Loved the photo montage and the wonderful action verbs that are perfect word choices to describe winter. This is a good entry for the Tyburn poetry contest. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Cindy!
And good riddance! :)
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It has been just about the worst winter I remember. You have created intense imagery. You will definitely draw the reader in with the first 4 words. How powerful. The alliteration with the "ging" effects the repetition which goes on as we repeatedly slip and painfully fall. Also this mimics the frenzied activity which takes place as if there is no end to it. The s's sound gives the sense of sliding around. I like how the line changes its mood. Much more cheerful hopeful. Cleverly written
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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It has been just about the worst winter I remember. You have created intense imagery. You will definitely draw the reader in with the first 4 words. How powerful. The alliteration with the "ging" effects the repetition which goes on as we repeatedly slip and painfully fall. Also this mimics the frenzied activity which takes place as if there is no end to it. The s's sound gives the sense of sliding around. I like how the line changes its mood. Much more cheerful hopeful. Cleverly written
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Liz!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
I am so over winter, but this Tyburn was so much fun to pen!
Glad you enjoyed!
Comment from royowen
This is a very good entry in this tyburn poetry contest, I like yours, with great internal rhyme going into the longer lines, I think this has an excellent chance in this contest, good luck, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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This is a very good entry in this tyburn poetry contest, I like yours, with great internal rhyme going into the longer lines, I think this has an excellent chance in this contest, good luck, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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You are so kind, Roy!
Thank you!
Far more challenging than it appears! But I enjoyed the challenge!
Thank you again!
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Well done
Comment from meeshu
a complicated form with a smooth and simple end result. very well done, the picture really drives it home. I wish you great luck in the upcoming contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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a complicated form with a smooth and simple end result. very well done, the picture really drives it home. I wish you great luck in the upcoming contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hello meeshu,
Man! I have struggled with this form so many times! Far more complicated...for me...than it appears!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
C'mon Spring!
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, what a fun Tyburn for the competition, and best of luck. I loved the words you've chosen and the picture is a bit of fun. It is difficult to write to strict criteria, and I don't do it at all, really. I actually don't want to, but I recognize this skill in others. I saw no errors and thanks for sharing a poem that was a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hello, what a fun Tyburn for the competition, and best of luck. I loved the words you've chosen and the picture is a bit of fun. It is difficult to write to strict criteria, and I don't do it at all, really. I actually don't want to, but I recognize this skill in others. I saw no errors and thanks for sharing a poem that was a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hello Ana!
I have to admit, I really enjoyed penning this poem...after at least fifteen attempts! Whew!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks in winter how one faces problems in movement or riding bicycle, there is chance of slipping; no problem when winter goes; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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This speaks in winter how one faces problems in movement or riding bicycle, there is chance of slipping; no problem when winter goes; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
I just want it to be spring for a very long time!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
Comment from victor 66
Tricky little form - you seem to have followed the instructions carefully and the presentation of your poem is quite good. I wish you the well in this Tyburn poetry writing contest.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Tricky little form - you seem to have followed the instructions carefully and the presentation of your poem is quite good. I wish you the well in this Tyburn poetry writing contest.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hi Victor!
Tricky, indeed!
I've attempted this form so many time that I have lost count!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
