Celebrating Persephone's Return
Second Place Winner: Farewell, winter!33 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done minute poem about the sights and moods of the changing
of seasons from Winter to Spring. I like the allusion to Greek Mythology
in the title. I have like that myth since I first read it in 8th grade, maybe earlier.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Nicely done minute poem about the sights and moods of the changing
of seasons from Winter to Spring. I like the allusion to Greek Mythology
in the title. I have like that myth since I first read it in 8th grade, maybe earlier.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Hello Joan!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
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Hi, Diane. That I did.
You're welcome
Joan
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
Congratulations on finishing in the top in this contest. Quite a lovely poem to say goodbye to the winter. Was this a blind contest? I didn't receive this poem in my PM.
Thank you for sharing your beautiful gift,
~patty~
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
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Hi there;
Congratulations on finishing in the top in this contest. Quite a lovely poem to say goodbye to the winter. Was this a blind contest? I didn't receive this poem in my PM.
Thank you for sharing your beautiful gift,
~patty~
Comment Written 25-May-2018
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
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Hello Patty!
This was a site contest...back a few weeks when spring was just a promise!
Thank you for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Mrs. KT, :)
Good poem. I know the story of Persephone, but not all of it. I studied this stuff more than 40 years ago, so I have forgotten.
Good luck in the contest.
Nome
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Hello, Mrs. KT, :)
Good poem. I know the story of Persephone, but not all of it. I studied this stuff more than 40 years ago, so I have forgotten.
Good luck in the contest.
Nome
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Hello Nome!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
diane
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-You have good meter, rhyme, imagery,
and alliteration that make this
a very good minute poem.
-You show the joys and hopes of spring.
-Good luck in the contest,Diane.
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-You have good meter, rhyme, imagery,
and alliteration that make this
a very good minute poem.
-You show the joys and hopes of spring.
-Good luck in the contest,Diane.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your minute poem and your author notes.
Winter darkness and cold turning to warmth and light is a lovely
theme for poetry. You have artistically conveyed the theme here,
with excellent rhyme and beautiful images.Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
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I enjoyed reading your minute poem and your author notes.
Winter darkness and cold turning to warmth and light is a lovely
theme for poetry. You have artistically conveyed the theme here,
with excellent rhyme and beautiful images.Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
Comment from Hitcher
I enjoyed your minute poem friend and once I read your cool notes on Hades, Persephone and Demeter i enjoyed it even more. I wish you well in the contest, a contender for sure : )
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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I enjoyed your minute poem friend and once I read your cool notes on Hades, Persephone and Demeter i enjoyed it even more. I wish you well in the contest, a contender for sure : )
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Hitcher!
I so enjoyed penning this piece. Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review. I taught mythology for years, and Persephone's story is by far my favorite.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from mvbrooks
I really like the minute poem and its gracefulness reminds me of the minuet. In this case, I especially liked the comparison of spring's renewal and the renewal of our spirits.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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I really like the minute poem and its gracefulness reminds me of the minuet. In this case, I especially liked the comparison of spring's renewal and the renewal of our spirits.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
It was a pleasure to pen this piece...
diane
Comment from estory
You crafted the rhythm and rhyme of this poem well, created some interesting musical elements in this poem celebrating spring. Right out of the pastoral romantic tradition, very reminiscent of the romantic poets like Crabbe or Freneau. Nice one estory
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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You crafted the rhythm and rhyme of this poem well, created some interesting musical elements in this poem celebrating spring. Right out of the pastoral romantic tradition, very reminiscent of the romantic poets like Crabbe or Freneau. Nice one estory
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review! I so enjoyed penning this piece.
Glad you enjoyed!
diane
Comment from Sis Cat
A fine minute celebrating the return of spring. You capture our hopes and aspirations for this season:
Our souls are once again renewed
each view imbued:
I read it aloud and enjoyed the flow and rhymes of your well-chosen words.
In terms of framing, because you did not mention Persephone in your poem, I would cut the entire author's notes and the subtitile as they do not add anything to your universal theme of the return of spring. If you addressed spring as "you" and as feminine, then it would make sense to mention Persephone in your notes. As it is now, your poem can stand on its own and be appreciated for its craft and creativity without it.
Thank you for sharing the good news creatively.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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A fine minute celebrating the return of spring. You capture our hopes and aspirations for this season:
Our souls are once again renewed
each view imbued:
I read it aloud and enjoyed the flow and rhymes of your well-chosen words.
In terms of framing, because you did not mention Persephone in your poem, I would cut the entire author's notes and the subtitile as they do not add anything to your universal theme of the return of spring. If you addressed spring as "you" and as feminine, then it would make sense to mention Persephone in your notes. As it is now, your poem can stand on its own and be appreciated for its craft and creativity without it.
Thank you for sharing the good news creatively.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Sis Cat,
I so appreciate your rating, review, and thoughtful comments.
I added the Author's Notes re: Persephone as there are many individuals who are not familiar with Greek mythology and the myth of Demeter and Persephone. "Celebrating Spring's Return" didn't sound very poetic, so...because I taught Greek mythology for years, and when I think of spring, I think of Persephone's return, I titled my poem as such.
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from LIJ Red
Looks like a properly written minute poem in response to the prompt. Those oldtimers had long complicated myths about most everything in nature, didn't they?
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Looks like a properly written minute poem in response to the prompt. Those oldtimers had long complicated myths about most everything in nature, didn't they?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed!
I love Greek mythology!
Thank you!
diane