Precious Gems
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Comment from nancyjam
Strong imagery depicts the strength of a hurricane and
its aftermath.
Strong rhymed couplets used to mimic the
speed of the hurricane and the winds that
accompany this force of nature.
Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Strong imagery depicts the strength of a hurricane and
its aftermath.
Strong rhymed couplets used to mimic the
speed of the hurricane and the winds that
accompany this force of nature.
Nancy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Dear nancyjam, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery with the art work and your words. You always write such good poems my friend! love, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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This is a very well written poem. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery with the art work and your words. You always write such good poems my friend! love, Teri
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. You always write good poems too! (I can't for the life of me figure out why I wrote about a hurricane, with all the off and on snow and rain we've been having!) Love, Donna
Comment from robyn corum
DM,
I have no idea what might have been the impetus for this poem, and I certainly hope it wasn't a real hurricane in your life that inspired it. (fingers crossed!)
It was a realistic and slightly terrifying look at what can happen in these instances. YUCK!
Only one suggestion from me --
1.) At the end of its destruction
We all must join in new construction
--> Consider moving this couplet to the end of the poem?
Thanks!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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DM,
I have no idea what might have been the impetus for this poem, and I certainly hope it wasn't a real hurricane in your life that inspired it. (fingers crossed!)
It was a realistic and slightly terrifying look at what can happen in these instances. YUCK!
Only one suggestion from me --
1.) At the end of its destruction
We all must join in new construction
--> Consider moving this couplet to the end of the poem?
Thanks!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Dear robyn, Thank you for your comments and review and suggestion. I will go in and edit. Dove
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture is a perfect selection for your poem that is excellently well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read. I really enjoy poetry stories.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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The picture is a perfect selection for your poem that is excellently well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read. I really enjoy poetry stories.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Dear Harry, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from karenina
We had ONE in New England in well over thirty years....it was horrifyingly scary! The sickly grey/yellow of the sky and the total silence before the winds begin is like a pre-death experience. I can't imagine people w ho live in the path of these dealing with them!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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We had ONE in New England in well over thirty years....it was horrifyingly scary! The sickly grey/yellow of the sky and the total silence before the winds begin is like a pre-death experience. I can't imagine people w ho live in the path of these dealing with them!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Dear Karenina, Thank you for your comments and review. I feel sorry for people who have to constantly deal with hurricanes, like in the southern states. Dove
Comment from frogbook
Excellent build up to the storm then description of its force and then the quiet destruction afterward. Powerful little poem here to tell of a very frightening phenomenon.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Excellent build up to the storm then description of its force and then the quiet destruction afterward. Powerful little poem here to tell of a very frightening phenomenon.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Dear frogbook, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the pending doom of a hurricane on its way. The winds are super strong and the rain comes down in sheets all will come down in destruction.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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A very well-written poem about the pending doom of a hurricane on its way. The winds are super strong and the rain comes down in sheets all will come down in destruction.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I know all about hurricanes.We have way too many here. I hate them because they knock out the power and you have no A/C and you want to die. We have never had any damage from one, not even a broken tree branch which amazes me as the wind blows so hard you think you house will be picked up and you'll wake up in Oz. =}
Well done and great picture.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I know all about hurricanes.We have way too many here. I hate them because they knock out the power and you have no A/C and you want to die. We have never had any damage from one, not even a broken tree branch which amazes me as the wind blows so hard you think you house will be picked up and you'll wake up in Oz. =}
Well done and great picture.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Dear Roxanna, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove