Comment from Michael Steinert

Excellent

Dark, just how I like it. He was so close. Karen really made him pay for his indiscretion, You told a complete story just like every good piece of flash diction should.

Thank you and have a great night!
Mike

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Thanks much for reading and your gracious review!

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Mystery Writer,

This is a very good story. I thought he would make it out alive, maybe his wife did too. I guess she couldn't very well say she was the one to drop him out there.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Thanks much for reading. I'm pretty sure the little meanie wasn't too sad. LOL.

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

Great picture selection for this short story that really kept the reader interested from the beginning until the end. The reader will be back to read more.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Will be so happy to have you back to read more. Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

"...how would I catch (it) - not "him" (*smile*)

Wow, this is a GREAT story - if I had a six left, you'd have one for it because it's seriously got it all, IMHO. Well done!!! Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for your virtual 6. Greatly appreciated.

reply by Dawn Munro on 23-Apr-2018

Most welcome.

Comment from Beck Fenton

Excellent

This is a great story with a good lesson for all philanderers. Grin. I enjoyed his dismay at the elements and the reaction of his body to the abundance of sun and lack of water. Glad Karen didn't have to finish the job if he had managed to actually make it home.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Ha- I guess that was a plus. Thanks so much for the great rating and the vote for no philandering-LOL.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

very nice story, not so nice wife. good luck in the contest, your writing style is very strong. a very funny story even though being lost in the desert is not fun

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for this thoughtful review and great rating.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Well geez. He was a cad, but the death sentence is a bit much. Reminds me of a true story about a teacher in Texas, who, fed up with a very hyper boy interrupting the class multiple times took him out of the small school and locked him in the garden shed just fifty feet away. He yelled, he kicked, he screamed....she did not relent. She honestly thought one long time out would give him an attitude adjustment. After an hour or so, concerned he might be getting dehydrated, she trudged out to the shed--ready with a bottle of water and a lecture. Sadly, she found him dead. He'd been bitten by a rattlesnake.

Karenina

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018

Wow-that is a terrible story! One has to be so careful!. Thanks much for your informational and thoughtful review.

reply by karenina on 20-Apr-2018

I'm sorry I rambled on so much.....your poem just reminded me of that incident.......

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018

No apologies-enjoyed hearing from you and seeing this story I had not read.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Good strong piece here and a perfect fit for the competition. I enjoyed the deep point of view which helped drive it along.

Good stuff
GMG

What Is that light over that hill? - is.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018

The light was their own house. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Much appreciated.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I like this story. Reminds me of film with Robert Ryan, I think.
Lots of good realization on the part of the protagonist.
I'm not too fond of the newspaper ending, though. Seems to me that was an easy exit. But that's just me.

Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018

Thanks for the review and for your always valued opinion.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Lost Flash Fiction' writing prompt.
Your short story is clear and well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the review as well as the good wishes.