Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Guns"Dawn of Chaos
4 total reviews
Comment from beizanten
Inteesting and pretty well written first stanza. A good second stanza. a good and descriptive third stanza. A good fourth stanza. Overall a well written poetry
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Inteesting and pretty well written first stanza. A good second stanza. a good and descriptive third stanza. A good fourth stanza. Overall a well written poetry
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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According to some I'm a total illiterate in writing. Thanking you for your honest response about this work.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I prefer to read poetry aloud. For me that is the only way to read it. I got different meaning by combining certain combinations of words. Sometimes going to the next line and grabbing that word to go with a bit of the end of the previous line. Very interesting. Very experimental. Very experiential. There are many ideas in each line. A lit like our heads on this issue, very full. I as many readers reading this may realize how conflicted we are on the issue. I too had two guns as a child. I could twirl both guns in my two gun holster. You have captured many of the issues for debate in this poetry. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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I prefer to read poetry aloud. For me that is the only way to read it. I got different meaning by combining certain combinations of words. Sometimes going to the next line and grabbing that word to go with a bit of the end of the previous line. Very interesting. Very experimental. Very experiential. There are many ideas in each line. A lit like our heads on this issue, very full. I as many readers reading this may realize how conflicted we are on the issue. I too had two guns as a child. I could twirl both guns in my two gun holster. You have captured many of the issues for debate in this poetry. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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My problem according to reviews is comprehension of my writes. Glad dispute flaws you were able to find interests. Thanking you for your generous rate.
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It could be the reviewers do mot get that there are deeper meanings to your lines. They may only want simple lines that just say it. I imagine they would find themselves giving a similar review to e.e. cummings, my most favorite poet.
Comment from meeshu
you write the most fascinating stuff, TPAC. your language is, what, xtreme street, maybe self-created. whichever, it is so intriguing and confounding. the reader has to work a little to get it and there's nothing wrong with that.......meeshu
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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you write the most fascinating stuff, TPAC. your language is, what, xtreme street, maybe self-created. whichever, it is so intriguing and confounding. the reader has to work a little to get it and there's nothing wrong with that.......meeshu
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Someone stated I made up my own language, rendering its read a challenge to be understood as coherent. Glad these flaws didn't erude all aspects in its read. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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I say it's refreshing. poetry is not to br read so literally, it's more about feel.....meeshu
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is quite unique, I'm glad I live in a country where nearly everyone is carrying a gun, having said that, I'm from off a farm, so I know how to use one and I know there are times when you have to, but it is a very sad tale when a five-year-old child is involved. Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found quite different, Ana.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Hello, this is quite unique, I'm glad I live in a country where nearly everyone is carrying a gun, having said that, I'm from off a farm, so I know how to use one and I know there are times when you have to, but it is a very sad tale when a five-year-old child is involved. Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found quite different, Ana.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Yeah, jackass brother did the shooting, all in love. Being a little bad myself, I figure we are even. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.