Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Oh, deare me, Bill. Your imagination is running wild and so is mine. I almost had to look away. You do make me laugh, although this is on the macabre side of things. LOL. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018

Thanks, Ulla

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

A clever and musical poem you have here and very funny too. It's like the old fishin' stories one hears with the trout growing into a whale by the end. LOL

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018

Thank you, FB, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Wait! Stop, do not pass go, do not collect two hundred dollars. Severed fingers, instead of worms, pineapples instead of juicy reds, Electric Eels instead of worms. What kind of story are you telling? What kind of malarkey are you selling? I don't know what is exactly going on, but my world just got turned upside down.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018

Pineapple upside down?

reply by nomi338 on 17-Apr-2018

Eggs-zactly

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I've read that long ago, 'apple' was used for all fruits. It doesn't mean that Eve's apple was necessarily that.

Amusing tale about a worm again. With all the technology developing, we may have an e-lectric eel in some of the genetically altered fruit.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018

Worms, the other white meat.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This calls for another revision of the Old Testament. Cleverly done. I was unpre-peared to learn that the pear was actually the forbidden fruit. I don't know how this gets to a pineapple, but my husband I just got a nice one from Harry and David which we thoroughly expect to eat and enjoy. Just keep the eels out of it. Excellent rhyme in this and jaunty mood carries throughout. judi

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Judi. I was referring to the average apple bitten into by the average person and finding an average half a worm.

reply by judiverse on 16-Apr-2018

It had better not be in the apple I buy. judi

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh my goodness! It's a good job I've eaten lunch Bill! The thought of biting a word in two fills me with horror! I think I will cut all my apples up before eating them from now on! He h he, an inventive write Bill, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Your vivid imagination produces chuckles. If this is your story maybe you better stick to it. "E-lectric" a different take on electric. Gotta watch those fingers around sharp knives though.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Needed a stressed syllable for electric.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ha, you always make me laugh with your quirky animal posts. So that's what has happened.

A miniature e lectric eel, are we going all AI now?

Most entertaining.

Gloria

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Gloria

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks a funny event, a story about how a small creature has been halved , but it is mysteriously a miniature electric eel has been halved, it is not a pineapple; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from Cheryl Gilmore

Excellent

Okay, I don't know quite what to say! This is such a cute poem. Very well written with no errors in it. I loved it! Good job.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Cheryl