Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Would You Agree the Sky is Blue?"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your free verse sonnet, with it's incidental rhymes and some alliteration flows easily with your answers to the question you asked. Love is love even if seen through different shades, that's what I got. Maybe I'm freeversing. Enjoyed this one mike.
cheers.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Your free verse sonnet, with it's incidental rhymes and some alliteration flows easily with your answers to the question you asked. Love is love even if seen through different shades, that's what I got. Maybe I'm freeversing. Enjoyed this one mike.
cheers.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi, Velda Glad you liked this. You're more behind than I am. LOL Thanks a million, mike
Comment from poetwatch
I'm glad you and joy came to an understanding. I see heaven in your stare I hope you got your joy there. Not bad Mike. I like it. I'm posting one that came out of the blue. Not rhymed, but with an almost correct beat.
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I'm glad you and joy came to an understanding. I see heaven in your stare I hope you got your joy there. Not bad Mike. I like it. I'm posting one that came out of the blue. Not rhymed, but with an almost correct beat.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
This is such an interesting challenge, I guess is the word I'm looking for. And I know you have great respect and love for the sonnet form, so it is an effort of love.
That said, your poem is an unexpected stretch of free verse, and the obvious question, is the sky blue, I guess can by definition be debatable. Define blue. You have done that, and your resolution was the recognition that while blue isn't exactly the same for everyone, love is.
Really enjoyed this one, Mav. :)
Ange
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This is such an interesting challenge, I guess is the word I'm looking for. And I know you have great respect and love for the sonnet form, so it is an effort of love.
That said, your poem is an unexpected stretch of free verse, and the obvious question, is the sky blue, I guess can by definition be debatable. Define blue. You have done that, and your resolution was the recognition that while blue isn't exactly the same for everyone, love is.
Really enjoyed this one, Mav. :)
Ange
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Katya
Oooo, that is really interesting! A good poem, too. But you can give me a lesson on the form here. I see the opposition and the summing up. Where's the resolution?
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Oooo, that is really interesting! A good poem, too. But you can give me a lesson on the form here. I see the opposition and the summing up. Where's the resolution?
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Marisela Contona
I love The photos you chose. Your wording is beautiful. Your structure, format, and flow is awesome, and i look forward to more.
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I love The photos you chose. Your wording is beautiful. Your structure, format, and flow is awesome, and i look forward to more.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from meeshu
excellent free verse offering here. got to love the "freedom in free verse.
you can simply wax poetic with no rules. I like this particular poem......meeshu
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excellent free verse offering here. got to love the "freedom in free verse.
you can simply wax poetic with no rules. I like this particular poem......meeshu
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from karenina
The entire concept of a free verse sonnet is stimulating! It is tantamount to watching a wild horse released from the restraint of an unnatural tether. Your poem expresses truth without restriction of traditional form...the essence often a t poetry should be.
Karenina
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The entire concept of a free verse sonnet is stimulating! It is tantamount to watching a wild horse released from the restraint of an unnatural tether. Your poem expresses truth without restriction of traditional form...the essence often a t poetry should be.
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from apky
I like how you lure the reader in with those trips and skips of the imp, before you come to her composure and reveal to the reader that "she never missed a step", her veil always fastidious, her words never uttered "out of order".
That "she was amenable to my presence" and "appreciative of my company" to the point of being crowned with "satisfied even by her answer to my advance" seeths of fulfilled eroticism. Well, you know me - a lot in the head but erotic is the cream that floats on top!
we defined love
in colours from different wheels
with the same names
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I like how you lure the reader in with those trips and skips of the imp, before you come to her composure and reveal to the reader that "she never missed a step", her veil always fastidious, her words never uttered "out of order".
That "she was amenable to my presence" and "appreciative of my company" to the point of being crowned with "satisfied even by her answer to my advance" seeths of fulfilled eroticism. Well, you know me - a lot in the head but erotic is the cream that floats on top!
we defined love
in colours from different wheels
with the same names
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Very nice, Mikey! I like your free verse sonnet. Being happy and feeling joy can bring out all kinds of silliness in us, and vice-versa. But who cares? "Foolishness is a condition not an excuse" (my fave line ).
I like how you have personified joy, and what it brings out in a person. I also look at this write in another light ... a couple in love can be as different as night and day (sometimes that's what attracts them to begin with. They look for in each other what they themselves lack), but what they both have in common is their love for one another. That is something that they both can agree on (as you so nicely put it ... "would you agree the sky is blue?") That's my interpretation of your poem. I may be way off base here.
Whatever your intent, I think this is a great free verse poem, and I enjoyed reading it.
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Very nice, Mikey! I like your free verse sonnet. Being happy and feeling joy can bring out all kinds of silliness in us, and vice-versa. But who cares? "Foolishness is a condition not an excuse" (my fave line ).
I like how you have personified joy, and what it brings out in a person. I also look at this write in another light ... a couple in love can be as different as night and day (sometimes that's what attracts them to begin with. They look for in each other what they themselves lack), but what they both have in common is their love for one another. That is something that they both can agree on (as you so nicely put it ... "would you agree the sky is blue?") That's my interpretation of your poem. I may be way off base here.
Whatever your intent, I think this is a great free verse poem, and I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a lovely poetic entry for the competition and best of luck. I don't know if you are talking about a particular person or love in general but whatever, it read smoothly and I saw no errors, a very poetic poem, and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
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Hello, this is a lovely poetic entry for the competition and best of luck. I don't know if you are talking about a particular person or love in general but whatever, it read smoothly and I saw no errors, a very poetic poem, and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018