Precious Gems
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "An Ocean of Tears"Na-po-wri-mo
20 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely composed and presented poem, Dovemarie. The image is stunning and works well with your theme. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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This is a very nicely composed and presented poem, Dovemarie. The image is stunning and works well with your theme. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Marilyn, Thank you for your comments, review and good luck wishes. Dove
Comment from fluffnstuff
this one is a heavy...i am going to reread it again. it is one that i do relate to within your words. love ghow you reworded your version of drowning in ones own tears. nice write fluff
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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this one is a heavy...i am going to reread it again. it is one that i do relate to within your words. love ghow you reworded your version of drowning in ones own tears. nice write fluff
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear fluff, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Donna!
You've had a busy month filled with poetry. I read every selection. You are correct - there are many precious gems throughout your NaPoWriMo book. I'm trying to catch up, so can't review each one... I'm getting sleepy already lol I can clearly see the hard work you've put into this and wish you the best of luck!
Great alliteration here in this line: While the wild wind rages and raves.
Good luck!!
Kim
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Hi Donna!
You've had a busy month filled with poetry. I read every selection. You are correct - there are many precious gems throughout your NaPoWriMo book. I'm trying to catch up, so can't review each one... I'm getting sleepy already lol I can clearly see the hard work you've put into this and wish you the best of luck!
Great alliteration here in this line: While the wild wind rages and raves.
Good luck!!
Kim
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Kim, Thank you for your comments and review. I read I think most of the selections in your book too. There was just one thing - I wrote to the editors today (May 2) and told them my book was Precious Gems, they have it listed on the voting list as Ocean of Tears. It seems to me that I'm making mistakes or they're not reading my work right. I hope they can get it changed. Donna
Comment from Bill Schott
This NAPOWRIMO poem, An Ocean of Tears, completely saturates the reader with the metaphoric dousing of oceanic references. Life like being tossed and lost in the ocean can't be too much fun.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This NAPOWRIMO poem, An Ocean of Tears, completely saturates the reader with the metaphoric dousing of oceanic references. Life like being tossed and lost in the ocean can't be too much fun.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Dear Bill, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have created some powerful imagery. Your alliteration creates the effect that there is a great inner storm. If there are any readers who have experienced abuse they will definitely identify with this sense of powerlessness. You have described well, the feeling of drowning in deep water. Those who have not, may be compelled to compassion. I always find writing to be very healing. I hope writing this helped you or others to heal at least a bit. Well written.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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You have created some powerful imagery. Your alliteration creates the effect that there is a great inner storm. If there are any readers who have experienced abuse they will definitely identify with this sense of powerlessness. You have described well, the feeling of drowning in deep water. Those who have not, may be compelled to compassion. I always find writing to be very healing. I hope writing this helped you or others to heal at least a bit. Well written.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Dear Liz, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Although I should say. This is I good 1/30 of an entry for the contest. Heehee. Since you have to write thirty poems to have the full complement. I really like this phrase. "My tears have caused me to finally drown.". Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. Although I should say. This is I good 1/30 of an entry for the contest. Heehee. Since you have to write thirty poems to have the full complement. I really like this phrase. "My tears have caused me to finally drown.". Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Dear Pamusart, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, what a good entry for the competition, and best of luck. The poem flows smoothly and even though it is sad, it is easy to read and full of great imagery. I especially liked the ending. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Hello, what a good entry for the competition, and best of luck. The poem flows smoothly and even though it is sad, it is easy to read and full of great imagery. I especially liked the ending. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Dear Ana, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from moonsunrise
What emotion I felt while reading your poem! I am sorry to hear of your sharing an ocean of tears. I don't think that anyone of us can get through life without having felt pain from loneliness. Keep on writing as you unselfishly express yourself while helping others who have felt or are still feeling this pain of loneliness.
Also, the image you selected is spot on.
Kind regards.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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What emotion I felt while reading your poem! I am sorry to hear of your sharing an ocean of tears. I don't think that anyone of us can get through life without having felt pain from loneliness. Keep on writing as you unselfishly express yourself while helping others who have felt or are still feeling this pain of loneliness.
Also, the image you selected is spot on.
Kind regards.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Dear moonsunrise, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the poet has cried more tears than the ocean can fill, a look back in years reveals so, it was a kind of death; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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This speaks the poet has cried more tears than the ocean can fill, a look back in years reveals so, it was a kind of death; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Dear Alcreator, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad write filled with fear and torment. Depression is the result of such mind turmoil, and we become lost in the end, I wish you luck with the contest, this poem is filled with emotion, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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A sad write filled with fear and torment. Depression is the result of such mind turmoil, and we become lost in the end, I wish you luck with the contest, this poem is filled with emotion, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove