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Viewing comments for Chapter 179 "Snail World 9"Animal poetry and short stories
13 total reviews
Comment from Harry Smith
Excellent presentation. The poem is very well written with lots of imagery. The picture selection really complimented the poem. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
Excellent presentation. The poem is very well written with lots of imagery. The picture selection really complimented the poem. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Harry
Comment from Teri7
I have no idea how you compose these cute poems about snails, but you do a great job with it! lol You used very cute words and picture! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
I have no idea how you compose these cute poems about snails, but you do a great job with it! lol You used very cute words and picture! I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, a sonnet to a snail! Now I've seen it all, hehe. No wonder that you are sleep deprived. I wish I could come up with some intelligent review about the poetic form, but I don't know much about it. Loved what I read though. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
Hahahaha, a sonnet to a snail! Now I've seen it all, hehe. No wonder that you are sleep deprived. I wish I could come up with some intelligent review about the poetic form, but I don't know much about it. Loved what I read though. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Ulla
Comment from Spitfire
Nice work with word reversal to make it read as iambic pentameter in stanza one. Meter seems a little off in two. But then I'm not one to judge. IT's HARD! It took me eight hours to compose my one and only attempt at this, and I still didn't get it right. Your form is right with situation, solution, and couplet at the end. I found it quite funny and could relate to the sleep deprivation and headaches.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
Nice work with word reversal to make it read as iambic pentameter in stanza one. Meter seems a little off in two. But then I'm not one to judge. IT's HARD! It took me eight hours to compose my one and only attempt at this, and I still didn't get it right. Your form is right with situation, solution, and couplet at the end. I found it quite funny and could relate to the sleep deprivation and headaches.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Shari. I figured the lack of sleep would account for writing a sonnet to snails.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill ... you are such a dear man. Any man who can sonnet a snail has a heart the size of Texas. Well written and understood. You go with your bad self mate! xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
Hi Bill ... you are such a dear man. Any man who can sonnet a snail has a heart the size of Texas. Well written and understood. You go with your bad self mate! xoxo deborah
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Deborah
Comment from damommy
I've seen it all now. A sonnet to a snail. I think any snail would be proud to have this dedicated to him/her.
Maybe you should get some rest if you're sleep deprived, or the snails will outrun you.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
I've seen it all now. A sonnet to a snail. I think any snail would be proud to have this dedicated to him/her.
Maybe you should get some rest if you're sleep deprived, or the snails will outrun you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, da
Comment from Cmelton
This is a great poem with a wonderful rhyming scheme and excellent word choice. I like what you have to say and how you say it. You have clearly been working hard on writing and it shows. I enjoyed reading it and following along with every line.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
This is a great poem with a wonderful rhyming scheme and excellent word choice. I like what you have to say and how you say it. You have clearly been working hard on writing and it shows. I enjoyed reading it and following along with every line.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, C
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Well executed sonnet about writing a sonnet to a snail. I guess a meta-sonnet of sorts. I am sure in their very limited way, they would appreciate your poetic gesture!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
Lol. Well executed sonnet about writing a sonnet to a snail. I guess a meta-sonnet of sorts. I am sure in their very limited way, they would appreciate your poetic gesture!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from Gloria ....
What an adorable little snail that is. Where did he ever get that cute shell?
I'd say this snail in cheek sonnet is written is perfect form for the snails at heart. I'm actually quite enjoying this book, Bill.
great job,
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
What an adorable little snail that is. Where did he ever get that cute shell?
I'd say this snail in cheek sonnet is written is perfect form for the snails at heart. I'm actually quite enjoying this book, Bill.
great job,
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Gloria
Comment from Matt V. Unger
I like it. It made me smile when I finished it. Very simple (in a great way) and made me feel very peaceful. I see that you're a retired teacher, is teaching snails anything like teaching high school students? Great work!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
I like it. It made me smile when I finished it. Very simple (in a great way) and made me feel very peaceful. I see that you're a retired teacher, is teaching snails anything like teaching high school students? Great work!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Snails have more of a glimmer in their eyes.