The Book of Fine Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Coffee, Tea, or Me?"A Collection of My best works.
8 total reviews
Comment from apky
What a great write with words of wisdome.
I really enjoyed the read and found much to impress me: You get my virtual six, since I'm all out, my friend.
"There's So much suffering and waiting...
Suffering and waiting for just a little more time!"
"Time.'
"The Great Healer of Woes!"
"But now tell Me what do Thee need from Me 'Suffers?'
"Coffee, Tea, or *Me?"
Approximate Word Count:163.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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What a great write with words of wisdome.
I really enjoyed the read and found much to impress me: You get my virtual six, since I'm all out, my friend.
"There's So much suffering and waiting...
Suffering and waiting for just a little more time!"
"Time.'
"The Great Healer of Woes!"
"But now tell Me what do Thee need from Me 'Suffers?'
"Coffee, Tea, or *Me?"
Approximate Word Count:163.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks again Apky.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Ricky, another one of your unique works. I did like the picture, it was very suitable and my answer would be 'tea' every time. I am a tea-aholic. I don't know why you don't delete the speech marks and learn to use grammar properly, or in a poem, you don't need much of it at all. Or, you could say, 'no, or little punctuation' as punctuating something the wrong way is so offputting, I'm sorry to be so blunt because I give 5 stars whenever possible. But, I just can't give writing like this five stars as it really would make a mockery of the site, and other writers work.
â?¬�¿�£C. FanStory 2018 â?¬�¿�£ ... this is gobbeldy-gook and should be deleted.
"Once When I Was young... You're not even consistent with your bad punctuation as this has no speech marks at the end of the sentence.
"I wanted to be?"
"And, when I got a little older... same as here.
"I wanted to be?"
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"But, now that I'm dead and gone... I've just copied and pasted a small segment so you know what I mean, but you do it throughout every poem.
All the ellipses and speech marks detract from the lovely sentiment of your writing, and I know this is born of tragedy, but in your profile, you obviously want to learn to be a writer, and yet you never change the way you write, which is wrong in the punctuation department. Thanks for sharing your poem, and when you fix it up, get back to me and I'll change the rating. Ana.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hello Ricky, another one of your unique works. I did like the picture, it was very suitable and my answer would be 'tea' every time. I am a tea-aholic. I don't know why you don't delete the speech marks and learn to use grammar properly, or in a poem, you don't need much of it at all. Or, you could say, 'no, or little punctuation' as punctuating something the wrong way is so offputting, I'm sorry to be so blunt because I give 5 stars whenever possible. But, I just can't give writing like this five stars as it really would make a mockery of the site, and other writers work.
â?¬�¿�£C. FanStory 2018 â?¬�¿�£ ... this is gobbeldy-gook and should be deleted.
"Once When I Was young... You're not even consistent with your bad punctuation as this has no speech marks at the end of the sentence.
"I wanted to be?"
"And, when I got a little older... same as here.
"I wanted to be?"
...
"But, now that I'm dead and gone... I've just copied and pasted a small segment so you know what I mean, but you do it throughout every poem.
All the ellipses and speech marks detract from the lovely sentiment of your writing, and I know this is born of tragedy, but in your profile, you obviously want to learn to be a writer, and yet you never change the way you write, which is wrong in the punctuation department. Thanks for sharing your poem, and when you fix it up, get back to me and I'll change the rating. Ana.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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I need you to not review my beautiful work with callous remarks on my style.
I'm Nationally Recongnized but you could care less.
So block me as Eye will you.
No hard feelings, just my prefertirence.
Like that one for grammar.
Or?
Comment from meeshu
nicely done, Rickey. very unique in both style and substance.
nicely written although I would suggest DOTH THOU in third to last verse.
.....meeshu
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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nicely done, Rickey. very unique in both style and substance.
nicely written although I would suggest DOTH THOU in third to last verse.
.....meeshu
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thank you much meeshu!
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully presented poem with lots of imagery. The picture selection is outstanding and complemented the poem. The reader really enjoyed the read. I will be back to read more of writers work.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Beautifully presented poem with lots of imagery. The picture selection is outstanding and complemented the poem. The reader really enjoyed the read. I will be back to read more of writers work.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thanks a million Harry!
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from karenina
I suspect in ways we are not aware our loved ones converse with us a million times a day. I have often felt the "sense" my Mom or Dad is calling for my attention...and when random thoughts come into my head further thought brings up a memory when my grandmother might have said that, or my best friend who was "stolen" from me in our twenties by ovarian cancer....so yes, I can imagine life ever after involving just such discourse.....I also know, because your broken heart bleeds into your poetry, that given the choice of coffee or tea...you would sacrifice these forever for one more glimpse of HE.....
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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I suspect in ways we are not aware our loved ones converse with us a million times a day. I have often felt the "sense" my Mom or Dad is calling for my attention...and when random thoughts come into my head further thought brings up a memory when my grandmother might have said that, or my best friend who was "stolen" from me in our twenties by ovarian cancer....so yes, I can imagine life ever after involving just such discourse.....I also know, because your broken heart bleeds into your poetry, that given the choice of coffee or tea...you would sacrifice these forever for one more glimpse of HE.....
Karenina
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Would you live for Me?
Would you die for Me?
Yes, Jason in a second..
Three live on because of Jason..
Jason Richard Smrkovsky
November 5th, 1984~
March 31st, 2003
Organs Donated on April First 2003.
(April Fool's day)
But, this of course is no joke.
Done Vida!
(Give Life)
And thanks for your wonderful review and time and review.
Ricky....
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The soul should always stand ajar, ready to welcome the ecstatic experience.
Emily Dickinson --Karenina
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Thanks Karenina.
Ricky...
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May your grief be balanced by your joyful memories!
Karenina
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Well author, I guess Im a bit slow or had a brain fart that is in a frozen state because I really cant grasp an understanding for this piece. So I gave you 5 stars for the color combo and the effort and purpose of yoir writing. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Well author, I guess Im a bit slow or had a brain fart that is in a frozen state because I really cant grasp an understanding for this piece. So I gave you 5 stars for the color combo and the effort and purpose of yoir writing. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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If you were firing and in Need, would you take...
"Coffee, Tea, or Me?"
Thanks,
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
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Im just a little slow sorry
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Thanks for sharing
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Good piece
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Thanks for sharing
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THANKS for sharing
Comment from Artasylum
First I have put The Gift of life into my contacts... thanks for that info. Your point of view is great... Love the slice of life point of view dead and all. thanks so much yours, diana
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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First I have put The Gift of life into my contacts... thanks for that info. Your point of view is great... Love the slice of life point of view dead and all. thanks so much yours, diana
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Glad you caught it.
Another didn't?
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Okay, this is a very different way of writing. But some may think my way is different too. =} I had to read it a few times to get what was being said.
I am not sure if your son is alive because of a donation or if he passed because of a lack of them. I do hope it is the first and I am so sorry if it is the latter. I know how important it is to donate organs so hope this helps bring awareness.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Okay, this is a very different way of writing. But some may think my way is different too. =} I had to read it a few times to get what was being said.
I am not sure if your son is alive because of a donation or if he passed because of a lack of them. I do hope it is the first and I am so sorry if it is the latter. I know how important it is to donate organs so hope this helps bring awareness.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks Roxanne and Jason is still alive in three lucky Souls...
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
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I am sorry for your loss, but I know it must be comforting to know he helped so many. The Lord bless you.
