To Feel the Robin's Song
Kyrielle Contest Entry52 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"To Feel the Robin's Song", is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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"To Feel the Robin's Song", is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you ever so much for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. We have a nesting pair of robins who come back each year to our olive tree. I should get a bird feeder. I love seeing those robins each year. And yes I hear them sing. Probably just the male. A really nice poem full of poignancy. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. We have a nesting pair of robins who come back each year to our olive tree. I should get a bird feeder. I love seeing those robins each year. And yes I hear them sing. Probably just the male. A really nice poem full of poignancy. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Pam,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
Comment from Angela Post
I loved your poem! It was very sing-songy which is a great reflection on the topic of a robin's song. It also has a kind of magical, fairy tale, day-dreaming quality.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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I loved your poem! It was very sing-songy which is a great reflection on the topic of a robin's song. It also has a kind of magical, fairy tale, day-dreaming quality.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Angela,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review
Comment from karenina
I have read some funny, some eerie, some witty multiple tonight....but not the more traditional subjects, love or nature...until now. This is exquisitely penned. Such a delicate touch.
Mesmerized!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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I have read some funny, some eerie, some witty multiple tonight....but not the more traditional subjects, love or nature...until now. This is exquisitely penned. Such a delicate touch.
Mesmerized!
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Karenina,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
So pleased you enjoyed...
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My Pleasure! Happy Easter!---Karenina
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This is worthy of six stars and I wish I had one to give. Such a wonderful poem that flows with beauty in every stanza. Good luck to you in the contest. I'm sure this will be a solid contender.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is worthy of six stars and I wish I had one to give. Such a wonderful poem that flows with beauty in every stanza. Good luck to you in the contest. I'm sure this will be a solid contender.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Cindy,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Poet,
I had to check out this poem because I love robins :) It's cool to see a picture of a European robin as opposed to the ones we see here in Canada. This makes me sing, "When the red red robin goes bob bob bobbin along".
I enjoyed your kyrielle with fairly good iambic meter. You have nice rhymes that fit in smoothly.
I just had trouble with your meter in lines six and ten. Though it doesn't appear that meter is a required part of this contest.
I enjoyed reading all the things you have never done, but I wish you could have added some examples of how exactly the robins song makes you feel? To, "feel" the robins song is vague to me. I'd love to have more in depth examples.
I wish you the best in this contest. You have a delightful entry in my humble opinion.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello Mystery Poet,
I had to check out this poem because I love robins :) It's cool to see a picture of a European robin as opposed to the ones we see here in Canada. This makes me sing, "When the red red robin goes bob bob bobbin along".
I enjoyed your kyrielle with fairly good iambic meter. You have nice rhymes that fit in smoothly.
I just had trouble with your meter in lines six and ten. Though it doesn't appear that meter is a required part of this contest.
I enjoyed reading all the things you have never done, but I wish you could have added some examples of how exactly the robins song makes you feel? To, "feel" the robins song is vague to me. I'd love to have more in depth examples.
I wish you the best in this contest. You have a delightful entry in my humble opinion.
Joy xx
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello Joy,
I would say that "To feel the robin's song" is to experience the purity of nature - without the trappings of society. Just nature in its purest form. It's not enough to hear the robin's song; one needs to feel it... So the song is the antithesis of what the writer is sharing she has never done...
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
Comment from Realist101
How beautiful! It has a certain cadence that is a joy to read. But I can tell this would be very hard to write, right. :) Lovely subject. Lovely post. Best of luck in this contest, it should do well!! :)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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How beautiful! It has a certain cadence that is a joy to read. But I can tell this would be very hard to write, right. :) Lovely subject. Lovely post. Best of luck in this contest, it should do well!! :)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Write A Kyrielle' writing prompt.
Your verse of the Robin's song is well rhymed and lovely.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Write A Kyrielle' writing prompt.
Your verse of the Robin's song is well rhymed and lovely.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello Sharon!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Swampfox1
Very nice. This looks like a very good entry. I hope it wins for you, good luck. I like the way it flows, I like the repetitive use of I felt the robin's song. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Very nice. This looks like a very good entry. I hope it wins for you, good luck. I like the way it flows, I like the repetitive use of I felt the robin's song. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from meeshu
beautiful and in keeping with Kyrielle form. you channeled BOB DYLAN in verse 2.
he wrote: "I have dined with kings, I've been offered rings. And I've never been too impressed". from "Changing of the guard." lofty company.....meeshu
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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beautiful and in keeping with Kyrielle form. you channeled BOB DYLAN in verse 2.
he wrote: "I have dined with kings, I've been offered rings. And I've never been too impressed". from "Changing of the guard." lofty company.....meeshu
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hello meeshu!
Bob Dylan, eh?
Woah! I'll have to check that out. Pretty neat.
My college roommate - a lifetime ago - constantly played "Lay Lady Lay" on our "record player!"
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Lofty company, indeed!
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Y.W. its on the album
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