To Feel the Robin's Song
Kyrielle Contest Entry52 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi anon - this is a very lovely Kyrielle - it floats along beautifully as this form should do. Your rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout the poem and the picture is delightful and appropriate. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hi anon - this is a very lovely Kyrielle - it floats along beautifully as this form should do. Your rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout the poem and the picture is delightful and appropriate. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Dorothy!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you again,
diane
Comment from jusylee72
Love the message of hope in the Robin's song. We never seek everything we truly need to know, lIfe teaches those lessons. I have lost a true friend and I went through a very sad time. I did learn to hear the Robin's song again, but only after I felt the pain.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Love the message of hope in the Robin's song. We never seek everything we truly need to know, lIfe teaches those lessons. I have lost a true friend and I went through a very sad time. I did learn to hear the Robin's song again, but only after I felt the pain.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased that my poem resonated with you!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
diane
Comment from Cedar
Hello Author: I must say that you did a magnificent job with this entry. This style of poetry certainly isn't simple.
You have written sixteen lines, each with eight syllables, each stanza with amazing rhyme and it all comes together resulting in a great story for your readers.
Sorry, I don't have anymore "sixers." I think this one should be hard to beat....Happy Easter....Bill
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Author: I must say that you did a magnificent job with this entry. This style of poetry certainly isn't simple.
You have written sixteen lines, each with eight syllables, each stanza with amazing rhyme and it all comes together resulting in a great story for your readers.
Sorry, I don't have anymore "sixers." I think this one should be hard to beat....Happy Easter....Bill
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Bill,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
I so enjoyed penning this offering, and I am pleased it resonated with you...
diane
Comment from RGstar
Good rhythm here. Your repeating line fits in nicely, as should, without being obvious enough to upset the rhythm.
Nicely done.
Wishing you good luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Good rhythm here. Your repeating line fits in nicely, as should, without being obvious enough to upset the rhythm.
Nicely done.
Wishing you good luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
This is the second Kyrielle I have ever written = challenging, but rewarding.
diane
Comment from Pantygynt
This kyrielle interprets the instructions in the simplest way and repeats the same line the whole way through as a last line refrain. This one is written in excellent iambic tetrameters in order to comply with the syllabic instructions. The rhyme scheme here is in couplets.
The salient feature is the idea that the robin's song is somehow "felt" rather than heard, and unusual physical reaction that adds a certain piquancy to the piece.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This kyrielle interprets the instructions in the simplest way and repeats the same line the whole way through as a last line refrain. This one is written in excellent iambic tetrameters in order to comply with the syllabic instructions. The rhyme scheme here is in couplets.
The salient feature is the idea that the robin's song is somehow "felt" rather than heard, and unusual physical reaction that adds a certain piquancy to the piece.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Jim,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
This poem was a pleasure to pen...
diane
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a great entry for the Kyrielle poetry contest. You developed a good verse with The Robin as your theme. It flowed well and met the syllable count. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a great entry for the Kyrielle poetry contest. You developed a good verse with The Robin as your theme. It flowed well and met the syllable count. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems the things you haven't done aren't as important as hearing the robin's song.
It is a sign of hope for Spring and new life.
I hope this did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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It seems the things you haven't done aren't as important as hearing the robin's song.
It is a sign of hope for Spring and new life.
I hope this did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello dragonpoet,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
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You are very welcome on both accounts.
dp
Comment from nartoonla
Hi, A robin song is delightful as it sings and so was your piece, yet a little sad in the end... especially if that friend was once most dear to you. Whatever the sorrow may spring as Easter bring a new beginning slowly your way to ease that pain away.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi, A robin song is delightful as it sings and so was your piece, yet a little sad in the end... especially if that friend was once most dear to you. Whatever the sorrow may spring as Easter bring a new beginning slowly your way to ease that pain away.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello nartoonia,
Still cold, but spring is definitely on its way!
Thank you for your excellent rating and kind review!
Comment from Writeling
This has a very pleasing message. I really like:
'At times, I never did belong,
but I have felt the robin's song.'
May I suggest you continue to use the past tense in 'or be adorned' (been) ... and
'or seek glory' (sought).
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This has a very pleasing message. I really like:
'At times, I never did belong,
but I have felt the robin's song.'
May I suggest you continue to use the past tense in 'or be adorned' (been) ... and
'or seek glory' (sought).
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Writeling!
Thank you for your suggestion and for your excellent rating and review!
Comment from Zue65
Again, a perfect rhymed verse swaying with lilting cadence. The rhymes are so smooth and unforced , they glide while being read. There is nothing wrong in this piece. Excellently executed that I will never tire reading this again and again. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Again, a perfect rhymed verse swaying with lilting cadence. The rhymes are so smooth and unforced , they glide while being read. There is nothing wrong in this piece. Excellently executed that I will never tire reading this again and again. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
What a lovely review!
Thank you for our excellent rating and kind words...
