To Feel the Robin's Song
Kyrielle Contest Entry52 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
This is a beautiful post from the imagery, your color are peaceful and loving, your font, pitch perfect... Your have written a lovely Kyrielle and good luck in the contest. ours, diana
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a beautiful post from the imagery, your color are peaceful and loving, your font, pitch perfect... Your have written a lovely Kyrielle and good luck in the contest. ours, diana
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Artasylum,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
So pleased you enjoyed!
diane
Comment from damommy
This is a lovely Kyrielle.
I like the repeated line of hearing the robin's song. It gives one the feeling of nothing mattering but hearing the robin sing with joy.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a lovely Kyrielle.
I like the repeated line of hearing the robin's song. It gives one the feeling of nothing mattering but hearing the robin sing with joy.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello damommy!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
diane
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-You have good rhyme and repeating line.
-I like the topic, imagery, and ideas in your poem.
-Your repeating line is a strong one because
of the examples in the previous three lines
in each stanza.
-The conclusion is also strong, especially,
"At times, I yearned to just belong..."
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-You have good rhyme and repeating line.
-I like the topic, imagery, and ideas in your poem.
-Your repeating line is a strong one because
of the examples in the previous three lines
in each stanza.
-The conclusion is also strong, especially,
"At times, I yearned to just belong..."
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Pam!
Thank you ever so much for your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
I am deeply honored and pleased that you enjoyed my poem...
diane
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine Kyrielle poem and entry for the contest
with a strong repeating lines, which is the key to the form
Excellent rhymes and it reads smoothly
many will relate to the repeating line
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a fine Kyrielle poem and entry for the contest
with a strong repeating lines, which is the key to the form
Excellent rhymes and it reads smoothly
many will relate to the repeating line
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello RS!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
I enjoyed penning this poem...
diane
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is the poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection is outstanding and went perfectly with the poem. The reader really enjoyed this poem. Exceptional work!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Beautifully written is the poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection is outstanding and went perfectly with the poem. The reader really enjoyed this poem. Exceptional work!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Harry!
I am very honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
I really enjoyed penning this poem; it was my second Kyrielle = challenging but rewarding to pen!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from jdrhye
This is a lovely poem....I really like the style. It reads as lyrics of a song which bodes well with the last verse of each stanza of a "robins song". Very clever and enjoyable.
J
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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This is a lovely poem....I really like the style. It reads as lyrics of a song which bodes well with the last verse of each stanza of a "robins song". Very clever and enjoyable.
J
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
So appreciative of your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Mystery writer: an amazing poem with your repeat. I like the
images you add in with the kings, jewels, rings, scaled a
mountain and the robin. My daughters love mountain climbing.
Enjoy your weekend. God bless. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Mystery writer: an amazing poem with your repeat. I like the
images you add in with the kings, jewels, rings, scaled a
mountain and the robin. My daughters love mountain climbing.
Enjoy your weekend. God bless. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased that you enjoyed my Kyrielle.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
diane
Comment from rjuselius
wow, this is an astounding piece of poetry here dear anonymous! you have me awestruck and i think you should have a standing ovation. i wish i had six stars left.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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wow, this is an astounding piece of poetry here dear anonymous! you have me awestruck and i think you should have a standing ovation. i wish i had six stars left.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug!
rebekka x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello rebekka,
So very pleased that you enjoyed my Kyrielle.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Heather Knight
I love the narrator's voice in this poem. His modesty matches the idea I have of a robin: an unpretentious little bird.
Robins are cute and it makes me really happy when I see one in my garden.
The repeated line is sweet and very well written. The lines in between are gorgeous as well.
Good luck in the contest. You deserve it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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I love the narrator's voice in this poem. His modesty matches the idea I have of a robin: an unpretentious little bird.
Robins are cute and it makes me really happy when I see one in my garden.
The repeated line is sweet and very well written. The lines in between are gorgeous as well.
Good luck in the contest. You deserve it.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Hello Maria,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
I am so pleased you enjoyed my Kyrielle. It was a pleasure to pen.
diane
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a beautiful kyrielle poem. I loved the artwork and the repeating line. Very winsome and tender.
I found only one hiccup in the whole poem and that is the meter in the 3rd stanza, 2nd line:
"or seek glory beyond my ken".
I think it can easily be remedied by interchanging seek and glory to read:
"or glory seek beyond my ken".
If you read these lines aloud, It think your will see the difference.
This is only my humble opinion.
I truly loved the poem and wish you well in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a beautiful kyrielle poem. I loved the artwork and the repeating line. Very winsome and tender.
I found only one hiccup in the whole poem and that is the meter in the 3rd stanza, 2nd line:
"or seek glory beyond my ken".
I think it can easily be remedied by interchanging seek and glory to read:
"or glory seek beyond my ken".
If you read these lines aloud, It think your will see the difference.
This is only my humble opinion.
I truly loved the poem and wish you well in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Janet!
Thank you for your thoughtful review! I agree with your assessment of that last line! My husband and I have been driving in blizzard for past three hours. Now at rest stop. Will promptly change!
