Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Thoughts From an Unqualified Source"possible selections for inclusion in book project
11 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Your title drew me in, the presentation mesmerized me, and the poem left me feeling the rustling of leaves mingled with butterfly wing winds and cool winter frost! Excellent originality and contemplative depth. Fine free verse voicing and flow. Good imagery. I especially liked:
the million seeds
seeking the one obelisk
of truth
and
a pillar made of eggshell
easily shattered
with each piece
a small grail
adrift on a laughing ocean
Favorite stanza:
I feel what was once outside
inside
and I find inside
that of unknown origin
Good closing note:
I've heard it called God
that is fine by me
I like your use of formatting to sculpt cadences. Well done! No nits. Wish I had a six.
Warmly, rd
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Your title drew me in, the presentation mesmerized me, and the poem left me feeling the rustling of leaves mingled with butterfly wing winds and cool winter frost! Excellent originality and contemplative depth. Fine free verse voicing and flow. Good imagery. I especially liked:
the million seeds
seeking the one obelisk
of truth
and
a pillar made of eggshell
easily shattered
with each piece
a small grail
adrift on a laughing ocean
Favorite stanza:
I feel what was once outside
inside
and I find inside
that of unknown origin
Good closing note:
I've heard it called God
that is fine by me
I like your use of formatting to sculpt cadences. Well done! No nits. Wish I had a six.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Spiritual' writing prompt.
Well said. I believe that a certain spirituality resides in all of us. I choose not to put a name on it.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Spiritual' writing prompt.
Well said. I believe that a certain spirituality resides in all of us. I choose not to put a name on it.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
Comment from Nancy Tremblay
Wow! That is really has a lot of depth and emotion. I liked your descriptions and how you put your words together. I read it twice, and then had to read it just one more time. It seemed to draw me in to it. In my opinion, well done.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Wow! That is really has a lot of depth and emotion. I liked your descriptions and how you put your words together. I read it twice, and then had to read it just one more time. It seemed to draw me in to it. In my opinion, well done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much, Nancy. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. :))
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Absolutely astonishing. It flowed so well and I loved the "laughing ocean" and the descriptive words to show how alive the world. I understood your point of view on spirituality. It's such a personal journey, but through the mysteries of nature, it can be alive for anyone who's willing to take a look. Worth six stars if I had one!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Absolutely astonishing. It flowed so well and I loved the "laughing ocean" and the descriptive words to show how alive the world. I understood your point of view on spirituality. It's such a personal journey, but through the mysteries of nature, it can be alive for anyone who's willing to take a look. Worth six stars if I had one!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Wow, Cindy, I'm so humbled and pleased with your kind words. Thank you so much. :))
Comment from nordicgirl
This is beautiful and more spiritual than almost every so called religious piece I read here. I feel a reverence for creation and for your fellow man. I love this. NG
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is beautiful and more spiritual than almost every so called religious piece I read here. I feel a reverence for creation and for your fellow man. I love this. NG
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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That's some high praise and most appreciated. :))
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. So much beautiful imagery and metaphors gets you my last six star rating. Here are my favorite parts but there many others as well.
"the million seeds
seeking the one obelisk
of truth"
"a pillar made of eggshell
easily shattered
with each piece
a small grail
adrift on a laughing ocean"
This was written by a master poet I can learn from you. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. So much beautiful imagery and metaphors gets you my last six star rating. Here are my favorite parts but there many others as well.
"the million seeds
seeking the one obelisk
of truth"
"a pillar made of eggshell
easily shattered
with each piece
a small grail
adrift on a laughing ocean"
This was written by a master poet I can learn from you. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Aww, you are much too generous, but I'll certainly be pleased to let you make my day. Thanks a million. :))
Comment from Henry King
This poem fits the requirement, write a spiritual but not religious piece. An unnamed poet acknowledges they are neither omnipotent nor have omnipresence using excellently selected words to prove that.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This poem fits the requirement, write a spiritual but not religious piece. An unnamed poet acknowledges they are neither omnipotent nor have omnipresence using excellently selected words to prove that.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. Wow, what great praise. :))
Comment from karenina
While I believe in God, I cannot find a clear defining line between Him (or Her) and the great "Spirit" and I suppose that is what endears me to your poem...the LACK of isms and structure and divisions religion creates... To acknowledge a higher power and also acknowledge, humbly, we do not know...nor does anyone else, for certain,
the form and shape that holds is true faith...perhaps the greatest truth men like to admit is "I simply do not know and cannot prove my theory." Great write!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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While I believe in God, I cannot find a clear defining line between Him (or Her) and the great "Spirit" and I suppose that is what endears me to your poem...the LACK of isms and structure and divisions religion creates... To acknowledge a higher power and also acknowledge, humbly, we do not know...nor does anyone else, for certain,
the form and shape that holds is true faith...perhaps the greatest truth men like to admit is "I simply do not know and cannot prove my theory." Great write!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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We're on the same page. I love how you put things, Karenina. Thanks so much. :))
Comment from Kory James
I like it. Interesting ideas mingled together in a fascinating pacing. Universalities as a pillar of eggshells...very interesting indeed and I agree.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I like it. Interesting ideas mingled together in a fascinating pacing. Universalities as a pillar of eggshells...very interesting indeed and I agree.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for the kind words and exceptional rating. Wow. :))
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written work as an entry in this spiritual poem, the optimism that pours from every word and syllable is palpable, a lot of soul in this work, and it is God in it. Well done, good job, good luck, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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A beautifully written work as an entry in this spiritual poem, the optimism that pours from every word and syllable is palpable, a lot of soul in this work, and it is God in it. Well done, good job, good luck, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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High praise from someone I respect highly. I'm so pleased you saw God in this write as I hoped would come across. Thanks a million, Roy. :))
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Well done